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Mallory O'Bier replied to the topic The Shabby Guitar Poem in the forum Poetry Critiques 2 years, 10 months ago
Thanks, @koshka! That would be great. 🙂
I wrote this poem after my uncle’s passing. He was self-taught on guitar and left a few of the instruments behind (as well as many people who loved him).
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Mallory O'Bier replied to the topic Why was my post marked as spam? in the forum Questions and Support 2 years, 10 months ago
Okay, I just deleted the old post from my feed, redid the post and reposted it. It worked. 🙂 @kathleenramm
I think it must’ve marked it as spam before because I edited it a few times? Not really sure. Weird.
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Mallory O'Bier started the topic The Shabby Guitar Poem in the forum Poetry Critiques 2 years, 10 months ago
I’d appreciate any and all feedback on this one! It’s an older poem of mine that I really want to polish and improve. Thanks! 😀
The Shabby Guitar
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Silent is the shabby guitarÂ
Locked and put away
Faded are the songs it madeÂ
Folded are the hands that played
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Silent is the shabby guitarÂ
Slowly losing its tune
While people come a…[Read more]
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Mallory O'Bier replied to the topic Why was my post marked as spam? in the forum Questions and Support 2 years, 10 months ago
Thanks, @whalekeeper ! 🙂
Hi, @kathleenramm ! I haven’t tried reposting it yet. It’s still hidden so far as I can make out. I see on my profile that I made the post, but it’s still marked as spam in the thread section.
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Mallory O'Bier started the topic Why was my post marked as spam? in the forum Questions and Support 2 years, 10 months ago
So I posted a new post in the poetry critiques, but I had to edit a couple of times to make the formatting right. Suddenly, it was marked as spam and hidden? I’m confused.
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Joy replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 10 months ago
Didn’t mean to disappear oop… how has everyone been?
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Mallory O'Bier replied to the topic The Moonlit Sea and Me in the forum Poetry Critiques 3 years ago
Awesome, @acancello! I prefer that one too! 🙂
I’ll think about it for sure, @light-warrior-pen. 🙂
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Mallory O'Bier replied to the topic The Moonlit Sea and Me in the forum Poetry Critiques 3 years ago
@avancello, your comments made my day! I’m so glad you like my poem! 🙂 It really makes sharing it worthwhile! I was seriously thinking about just burying this poem after editing it, but maybe I’ll publish it somewhere after all.
I’m actually considering altering one of those lines slightly, so I’m curious about what you think.
It would be…[Read more]
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Mallory O'Bier replied to the topic The Moonlit Sea and Me in the forum Poetry Critiques 3 years ago
Endings are tricky, aren’t they? @light-warrior-pen ? Sometimes they come naturally and effortlessly, but most of the time they take a lot of staring at the WIP, then staring off at nothing, then staring at the WIP again, then writing gibberish, then…
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Mallory O'Bier replied to the topic The Moonlit Sea and Me in the forum Poetry Critiques 3 years ago
Thanks, @elanor ! 😀
You grasped the concept of my poem perfectly! I’m glad you enjoyed it and found it relatable. 🙂 Because it’s very personal, I really wasn’t sure if anyone would be interested in it. I’m glad I decided to share it!
I’m still working on those last lines. I’m torn between fleshing them out and changing them a bit to better…[Read more]
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Mallory O'Bier replied to the topic The Moonlit Sea and Me in the forum Poetry Critiques 3 years ago
Thanks, @light-warrior-pen ! I’m glad you liked my imagery. 😊
The subject is me, the author, and the boat and sea is a fictional, metaphorical dream I used to describe the feeling of living in myself, I suppose. (Although I was next to the sea and I have been in wooden boats many times. My da is a fisherman, so.)
I’m glad you pointed that out…[Read more]
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Mallory O'Bier started the topic The Moonlit Sea and Me in the forum Poetry Critiques 3 years ago
Hey, everyone! This is my most recent, completed poem. Please critique it and let me know what you think! I’m looking for feedback an all aspects of the poem (including the name, and consistency of imagery), so don’t be shy if you have any thoughts to share. (I’m working on sharing my poetry more often and seeking regular feedback.)
Thanks!
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Mallory O'Bier replied to the topic Does anyone here write poetry or haiku's ? in the forum Poetry 3 years, 2 months ago
Nice poem, @acancello! And I like yours, @mineralizedwritings, and the Masked and Victory poems, @elanor. 🙂
I haven’t written any lately, I’ve been so busy with work. Maybe I’ll write one this weekend.
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Joy replied to the topic Art Sharing For All 🙂 in the forum Art 3 years, 3 months ago
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Joy replied to the topic Writers' Corner #1 in the forum General Writing Discussions 3 years, 3 months ago
@seekjustice YOU’RE HERE!!! 😀 Yeah I totally understand haha!
I’m not too bad. I’ve been focusing my energy on drawing and other things instead of writing over the past few years, although I do have an idea for a writing project that I just need to get over the writer’s block for haha. How’ve you been???
@euodia-vision Yeah, it’s a place to…[Read more]
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Joy replied to the topic Writers' Corner #1 in the forum General Writing Discussions 3 years, 3 months ago
I would like to bring this back once again. Good place to chat while you’re working on stuff. It’s supposed to help people be motivated to write if they know someone else is doing it with you while also chatting with you……. emphasis on *supposed to*, I’m notoriously bad at focusing when I’m talking to people haha, but I’ve always loved the…[Read more]
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Mallory O'Bier replied to the topic Does anyone here write poetry or haiku's ? in the forum Poetry 3 years, 3 months ago
That’s fun, @elanor! 🙂
This is my most recent poem. Most of my poetry is brief in length. Usually, I get out an idea or a feeling and then stop.
Forgottenings
Sediments of nostalgia shape a place:
Like icing on a cake, wrinkles in a face
Aging, changing, but ever the same feelings,
Nameless emotions, memories stirring
Like ghosts,…[Read more]
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Joy replied to the topic Art Sharing For All 🙂 in the forum Art 3 years, 3 months ago
@artsy-dragon Oh that robot is so cool
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Joy replied to the topic Character Castle! in the forum General Writing Discussions 3 years, 3 months ago
@keilah-h Hi um I am so so so sorry I’ve been unfaithful with posting here. I’m gonna go ahead and withdraw Hazel for now so Feather can do their own thing.
I’ve always been like this in roleplay-like situations… I’ll be super excited about it, prepare a character, brainstorm ideas, write the first segment…. and then immediately lose…[Read more]
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