Beth

@highscribeofaetherium

Like a horse. It’s a smell I can’t describe. Some hate, some love it, I find it pleasant. It’s a smell that doesn’t yell “Shepherd” like a goat or sheep smell, it yells instead “barn”.

@rae

I’ve never smelled like a horse in my life… lol. What does a horse even smell like? I’m sure I’ve smelled them at some point before, but I’ve never noticed.

@whalekeeper

I didn’t cry, but I had a sudden urge to find Marcel, give him a hug and just be with him.

Now I’m wondering if there is anyway Chase could find Marcel, because Chase has an urge to apologize. Like, an urge so deep that it’s one of the first things I feel when I put on his character cloak. But…I’m afraid that’s not possible rn, at…[Read more]

@trailblazer

Thanks! Yeah, I figured it was pretty obvious, lol. I wasn’t really trying to hide it.. I guess I was more concerned with telling the story than surprising the reader. And I’m sure most of us have read other stuff with basically the exact same plot, so it wasn’t exactly surprising anyway.

Got it, I’ll fix that. Thanks!

@whalekeeper

No, I didn’t. I have watched that movie though. I remember it being good.

K, I’m just going to dump her in dance lessons cause everyone else seems to be there lol. I’ll make her thief Saoirse rn, I think she’ll be more fun than lady Saoirse, though she’ll probably switch at some point.

Saoirse

Saoirse walked purposefully past the desk and the woman standing behind it.

“Hang on.”

“What?” Saoirse asked.

“Boots…[Read more]

@jonas

I think it’s Irish.

@jonas

You have permission to say ‘Sah-o-rees’ in your head, I still do it sometimes :p

@savannah_grace2009

Aw, that was so sad! I really liked it though, tag me if you post more.

@grcr

Oohhh, I like it!

@jonas

It’s a real name, and that’s how you say it.

Ok, I’ll introduce my character.

Saoirse (seer-sha) (no last name atm)

I’ll make her seventeen here, though she’s normally closer to twentyish.

She has light gray hair and light eyes, almost clear white in color, and pale skin scattered with freckles. She’s only about 5’1”. She’ll either be wearing an elegant dress or a rough tunic, trouse…[Read more]

@jonas

Yeah, it was mentioned in the dialogue, but I guess it might be easy to miss that.

@rae

Thanks! I fixed the stall part in my document, but it won’t let me edit my post anymore.

@jonas

So, the king has been traveling for a while. He wasn’t aware of the rules put on the people by his regents, who he’d appointed to take care of the country while he was gone.

When I wrote it, I was trying to create sort of an allegory. I know it’s not perfect, but that’s what I was thinking when I came up with it. The king is meant to…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Much better!

@rae

Ok, I knew it had some connection to cough drops.

@jonas @rae

I added a few sentences that hopefully resolve it a little better? I’m not sure. Do you still think it’s missing something?

… I can’t believe I didn’t see it before—who he was. The suspicion has grown inside of me for weeks, strengthening with each day that passed. When the guards disappeared from the marketplace. When the curfe…

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@jonas

Look up, I botched your simple tag.

@jomas @highscribeofaetherium

A menthol is what a cough drop is called. It’s on the couch drop bags in the stores.

@jonas

I’m pretty sure it’s an ingredient in cough drops??