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@ellette-giselle

Oooh, I like it!! I could definitely feel and experience what Jonathan was feeling and going through.

The only suggestion I would have would be to eliminate some of the passive voice (“The floor was sinking…” “…his brother was on his hands and knees…”). It will tighten up the prose and draw the reader in more.

But that’…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

Thanks for reaching out, Kefa!! I’d love to chat some more!! 🤗

Hmm… my WIP…

Well, I have a few, but a couple of those have been put on the back burner for now. They were mostly ones written while I was trying to figure out my genre. Which, I’ve decided, is probably gonna be contemporary young adult fiction and histori…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Yeah, I mean, it’s really no big deal to me because they’re spelled slightly different (Halle and Hallie), and how they look and act is completely different so they’re very different people in my head. 🤷🏻‍♀️

Pov you just notice that you created a new character with a name that nobody you know irl has but literally meet someone with that name a few months later

😑😑

@the-lost_journal

That was brilliant. 👏👏

@raxforge @whalekeeper

Alpha

Alpha still looked confused but nodded to Rax. He then stopped leaning on the wall, walking towards Ms. Barnes. “I can’t help you find them, but I’m more than willing to fight them again. And before you say anything, I am not a student of this school so you have no responsibility for me nor authority over me.…[Read more]

@raxforge

Alpha

Alpha leaned away, giving Rax a weird look. “Holy cow? Since when are cows holy?”

@jonas

👍

@rae

I think it’s really good. The way you wrote it really feels close and suffocating, especially the first paragraph, which I think works really well.

When should we start adding characters?

@whalekeeper @raxforge @ellette-giselle @koshka

Alpha

Alpha crossed his arms.

“I have a feeling we’ll be seeing each other again soon, Ms. Barnes. Peace and I are like positive and negative. One more note, make sure Silvia is mentally stable before you go interrogating her. She was pretty shaken up.”

@raxforge

 If anything, I’m sorry if I’m bothering you so much.

You never bother me.

Sorry, you’re gonna have to put up with our numerous off-topic conversations!

I miss this rp SOOOOOOOOOOOOO MUCH!!!!!!!!

@raxforge

The spot where it gets super chaotic is page 247-285 ish I think????

Plz ignore anything Latin things going on. It was purposefully not the way Latin is really, but it still is pretty bad.

Also, ignore these ending pages (the 350’s and such). we kinda turned this rp back to what it was…[Read more]

@jonas

I’m in, though idk how I’m gonna keep up with two RPs, seeing that I can’t keep up with the one I’m in right now 😑🫣

@whalekeeper @raxforge

Almost tagged myself XD the stupid things I do.

Alpha

“I am Alpha Grath. I was returning from giving something to my sister when I heard a man saying something to a student. Something along the lines of coming with him somewhere I think, I didn’t pay much attention to what he said, only the way he said it. He was acting…[Read more]

@loopylin

Lol

@jonas

I’m in!

@raxforge @kefa @the_lost-journal

For all the new ppl looking into Character Party, you should find the part where the castle was burning down, the queen was almost killed, the villains were running rampant, the charries were squabbling and Prince Fennin was trying to hold everything together…cuz I think that was our most…[Read more]

@raxforge @whalekeeper

Alpha

“What I meant by ‘at bay’ is keeping it under control, as on keeping it from exploding out in a sudden uncontrollable burst. I’ll explain more later. For now, I believe that masked woman is here to ask us some questions.”