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@jonas

Sorry. Brain fart. I meant EU. (Why did I put P?) But then that reminds me of the abbreviation for Europe. So idk.

@jonas @thearcaneaxiom

So in my WIP, Liv has a horse named Xandro. I was thinking that all the races have horses that are intelligent and match the “color scheme” and have the same powers. For example: Liv in an Aquino, she has blue hair, eyes, skin, clothes, and has the power to manipulate water. Xandro has a blue coat, eyes, hooves, mane and…[Read more]

@esther-c

Yeah, ofc!

@jonas

In that case, maybe the prison could be split into several units and you could call this one the ‘Experimental Unit’

Okay, I like that. Maybe I could call it the EP instead of the UNIT for short? (I know, so creative…not.)

@koshka

Hello.

Now that we know each other, here’s a list of random questions about your WIP!

1. Does Igua like fish?

2. With such an aversion to butter knives, is eating butter a problem?

3. About how old is Igua at the beginning of your story?

4. What do you think inspired his character the most?

Hello, I’m called Ru or Ruee.

1. No, he d…[Read more]

@jonas

I love conviction! And oh my gosh, Flaz would drive Ellis insane, this is going to be hilarious!

@hybridlore

Oh! you didn’t have to read the entire thing today!!! Oh, well.

The biggest things I noticed were again, really long paragraphs. I think it would be easier to read if you split them up, but it’s up to you.

Yeah, I’ve only gotten to chapter four with my paragraph revisions

What did you think of the scene in The Deal? Ya, know, this pa…[Read more]

Okay, here’s chapter 7

CHAPTER 7-THE INVESTIGATONS
The suns were bright and shining over Ladance as two Laxdains came walking together through the dusty streets. One was taller, dressed in red coarse, but durable, clothing with a powerful blaster strapped to his side, from his thigh to his knee. The other was shorter, but with tailored and…

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@jonas

Yeah, that’s happened to me too before!

@thearcaneaxiom

I like it! Thing is my favorite, lol. I don’t think you should change the name even though it’s a little mean, but it’s up to you. I think it fits her and she likes it, so it works.

The plot is a little confusing to me… a lot of the philosophy/science stuff goes over my head but that’s fine, lol. Anyway, nice job so far! I…[Read more]

@rae

Okay, phew! Finally caught up. And yeah, Chapter 7 isn’t showing up for me… so I guess I’m not, lol.

The biggest things I noticed were again, really long paragraphs. I think it would be easier to read if you split them up, but it’s up to you.

And long sections of dialogue without tags, like this:

“You can…”

“Read, write, and speak i…

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@jonas

Okay, I actually don’t think I’ll join… Thanks, though!

@jonas

Oh yeah that’s happened to me before. Idk why. 🤷🏻‍♀️ If I have to edit a post, I’ll just edit it, copy it, then submit the edit just in case it deletes.

@savannah_grace2009

Aww, thanks!!

Plotting isn’t always easy for me, so that’s encouraging to hear. 😊

I’ll try to get to writing a RP later today, but I’m not sure if that will happen. 😅 I haven’t gotten to it this week because life has been pretty busy. 🙃

@jonas

This is going to be great XD XD

@jonas

I love Conviction 😂

Oh no. The character I’m going to use also has a talking sword lol.

Now I’m imagining just a couple of swords, having a conversation 🤣🤣

PRONUNCIATIONS
Note: pronunciations are in alphabetical order rather than by revelance.

Of characters:

Aiqa _ Aye-quh

Akin _ Aye-kin

Alin _ Aye-lin

Azio _ Ah-zee-oh

Budeca _ Buh-deck-ka

Canin _ Cane –in

Gaygarum _ gey-gar-rum

Ginja _ Gin-juh

Grostoff _ Grew-stof, staff with an ‘o’

Hallia _ Hall-ee-uh

Jonas _ Joe-nas

Knihan _ Knee-…

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@jonas

*thumbs up*

Take your time reading, I just wanted to post them and get feedback so i know how to change them