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@thearcaneaxiom

I like it! Thing is my favorite, lol. I don’t think you should change the name even though it’s a little mean, but it’s up to you. I think it fits her and she likes it, so it works.

The plot is a little confusing to me… a lot of the philosophy/science stuff goes over my head but that’s fine, lol. Anyway, nice job so far! I…[Read more]

@rae

Okay, phew! Finally caught up. And yeah, Chapter 7 isn’t showing up for me… so I guess I’m not, lol.

The biggest things I noticed were again, really long paragraphs. I think it would be easier to read if you split them up, but it’s up to you.

And long sections of dialogue without tags, like this:

“You can…”

“Read, write, and speak i…

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@jonas

Okay, I actually don’t think I’ll join… Thanks, though!

@jonas

Oh yeah that’s happened to me before. Idk why. 🤷🏻‍♀️ If I have to edit a post, I’ll just edit it, copy it, then submit the edit just in case it deletes.

@savannah_grace2009

Aww, thanks!!

Plotting isn’t always easy for me, so that’s encouraging to hear. 😊

I’ll try to get to writing a RP later today, but I’m not sure if that will happen. 😅 I haven’t gotten to it this week because life has been pretty busy. 🙃

@jonas

This is going to be great XD XD

@jonas

I love Conviction 😂

Oh no. The character I’m going to use also has a talking sword lol.

Now I’m imagining just a couple of swords, having a conversation 🤣🤣

PRONUNCIATIONS
Note: pronunciations are in alphabetical order rather than by revelance.

Of characters:

Aiqa _ Aye-quh

Akin _ Aye-kin

Alin _ Aye-lin

Azio _ Ah-zee-oh

Budeca _ Buh-deck-ka

Canin _ Cane –in

Gaygarum _ gey-gar-rum

Ginja _ Gin-juh

Grostoff _ Grew-stof, staff with an ‘o’

Hallia _ Hall-ee-uh

Jonas _ Joe-nas

Knihan _ Knee-…

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@jonas

*thumbs up*

Take your time reading, I just wanted to post them and get feedback so i know how to change them

@jonas

Ok! 😃 thanks, I’ll introduce my character later.

CHAPTER 9-THE DEAL
Nahim tapped his foot in the rhythm of the song he hummed. Master Paul leaned back in the pilot seat next to him, maneuvering through a bunch of asteroids before picking up his direction and heading into Cubespace. Nahim suddenly stopped his noise as a bright nebulae passed by with a flash. Master Paul smiled.

“You like n…

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Tell me if Chapter 7 is missing. Cuz I edited it, and I thought it got deleted so i tried to repost it, but then it said I had already posted it.

CHAPTER 8-AIQA
Nahim tossed his sword handle up in the air and grasped it with his left hand. He pitched it again, twirled it, gripped it, and held it with one finger (or at least tried to, his green sword was hefty). He played with the blue one in his right. Master Paul glanced at the movement in the co-pilot seat.

“You seem to be somewhat o…

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@all-the-peoples

Im considering joining here. Could someone tell me what’s going on 😅?

@jonas

Thanks!

I just literally figured that out about ten seconds ago and edited a post I was making and it deleted. Woops.

CHAPTER 7-THE INVESTIGATONS
The suns were bright and shining over Ladance as two Laxdains came walking together through the dusty streets. One was taller, dressed in red coarse, but durable, clothing with a powerful blaster strapped to his side, from his thigh to his knee. The other was shorter, but with tailored and comfortable clothes, and a…[Read more]

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CHAPTER 6-ON BOARD THE NIGHTMARE
Nahim was alone and unbothered for the first time in a while. He ran his right hand over his sling for his left arm but didn’t try to move the shoulder. He was different…

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Next chapter…I’m just going to post most of my chapters now since I plan to change some of them soo, but want some feedback.

CHAPTER 5-MASTER PAUL
Mandin adjusted the thick band to the satchel over his…

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