@anna-brie
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Snapper replied to the topic Attack this, please in the forum Novel Critique Requests 9 years, 9 months ago
@daeus One quick note, where you say’ discovering a historic treasure, Matthew returns…”
You spelled Matthew with one ‘t’. -
Snapper replied to the topic Attack this, please in the forum Novel Critique Requests 9 years, 9 months ago
@daeus I really like this third version, but I still have a few battle-moves I like to use. 😛
First off, you say ‘vague shadows surrounding’. Well, my mind inserts the word ‘shrouds’ instead. I don’t know. I just think that word works better there.
Secondly, you say ‘wreak his vengeance’, it just doesn’t seem to fit. I start thinking ‘wreak…[Read more]
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Faith Kindred replied to the topic Awesome Christian Writer's Conference that you have to attend in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 9 months ago
This sounds awesome, Kate! Thanks for sharing!
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Faith Kindred's profile was updated 9 years, 9 months ago
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Snapper replied to the topic Ren in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 9 months ago
@perfectfifths
There are some very cool and well-done battles scenes in the prequels, but Anakin was very annoying. -
Snapper replied to the topic Ren in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 9 months ago
@perfect-fifths Moody teenager indeed.
There are some very cool and well-done battles scenes in the prequels, but Anakin was very annoying. -
Snapper replied to the topic Attack this, please in the forum Novel Critique Requests 9 years, 9 months ago
@daeus
*melts synopsis* ATTACK!!! 😛 😀
Okay, just kidding.
So, for me, I wasn’t able to connect this:Returning to wreak his vengeance, Matthew takes on the character of the mysterious Edwin Brook.
To this:
His wealth and power make his success almost certain
I guess for me, I don’t really know anything about Edwin Brooke…[Read more]
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Snapper replied to the topic Attack this, please in the forum Novel Critique Requests 9 years, 9 months ago
@daeus
*melts synopsis* ATTACK!!! 😛 😀
Okay, just kidding.
So, for me, I wasn’t able to connect this:Returning to wreak his vengeance, Matthew takes on the character of the mysterious Edwin Brook.
To this:
His wealth and power make his success almost certain
I guess for me, I don’t really know anything about Edwin Brooke…[Read more]
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Snapper replied to the topic Attack this, please in the forum Novel Critique Requests 9 years, 9 months ago
@daeus
*melts synopsis* ATTACK!!! 😛 😀
Okay, just kidding.
So, for me, I wasn’t able to connect this:Returning to wreak his vengeance, Matthew takes on the character of the mysterious Edwin Brook.
To this:
His wealth and power make his success almost certain
I guess for me, I don’t really know anything about Edwin Brooke as a…
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Snapper replied to the topic Attack this, please in the forum Novel Critique Requests 9 years, 9 months ago
@daeus
*melts synopsis* ATTACK!!! 😛 😀
Okay, just kidding.
So, for me, I wasn’t able to connect this:Returning to wreak his vengeance, Matthew takes on the character of the mysterious Edwin Brook.
To this:
His wealth and power make his success almost certain
I guess for me, I don’t really know anything about Edwin Brooke as a…
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Faith Kindred replied to the topic Attack this, please in the forum Novel Critique Requests 9 years, 9 months ago
Ooh, I like it! Although, I’m really not the best judge when it comes to stuff like this…Haha! But it definitely kept my interest throughout.
I don’t have anything to add, really. I agree with what @kate-flournoy said about the sentence structure. I did notice that, but, overall, I think you did a great job -much better than I could’ve done.…[Read more]
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Snapper replied to the topic Ren in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 9 months ago
@kate-flournoy I have every confidence that Rogue One is going to be awesome, because it doesn’t have Anakin Skywalker or Jar Jar Binks in it. Those two characters made the prequels bad…this is not about those characters.
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Snapper replied to the topic Writers' Corner #3 in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 9 months ago
@kate-flournoy …So, I think that I’ll probably just stop now because I can’t seem to write anything that I like…at all. Good luck though!
I wrote 463 words all told. -
Snapper replied to the topic Writers' Corner #3 in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 9 months ago
@daeus Very good!
@kate-flournoy I think I’ll keep going…get this muse to do something with itself. 😛
So far 264 words. -
Snapper replied to the topic Writers' Corner #3 in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 9 months ago
@daeus @kate-flournoy
Sorry I’m late…I’ll see if I can conjure up a few words. 😛
Muse! I summon thee! -
BlueJay replied to the topic Unrealistic Romance in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 9 months ago
@perfectfifths & @hannah-c Here you go. Just a little something that I was working on. 🙂
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BlueJay posted an update 9 years, 9 months ago
Okay peoples I’m STUCK!!!! I need a title for a story, but I don’t want to give too much away. So basically it’s based on Jane Austen’s novels and Charles is lord of Birchwood, a magnificent estate. His *cough* comes and well, kicks him out, so to speak.
My sister suggested the title “The Annoying Guest” which would work as a chapter title, but…[Read more]-
You could just call it “Lord of Birchwood.” I don’t know. Just a suggestion. Or you could call it *Cough*, since that seems to be a theme in your story. 😉
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@bluejay Uh oh… even the KP doctor has a cough. D’you think it’s from all that smoke from my melting the chairs yesterday? 😛
Lords of the Will
Birchwood Problems
The Lord of Birchwood
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*hands you cough medicine* Sorry, that’s all I could come up with for now.-
@dragon-snapper Yes, that smoke was terrible. So please don’t do that again. Ooo cough medicine, thank you. You know, if you were nice tempered, I could take you on as a nurse. 😉
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@his-instrument Hehe. The genre…hard question since I’m not great with genres, but just think Pride and Prejudice. 🙂
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How about “The Will of Birchwood”?
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Or does that sound too much like a name???? :S
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The title “The Birchwood Will” might work, if you think that “The Will of Birchwood” doesn’t work. 🙂
Jackson E. Graham
http://jacksonegraham.wixsite.com/jackson-e-graham
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Hmm…a second on Lord of Birchwood.
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hmm, I’m not sure, but here are some questions that might help you choose.
What lesson does the character learn?
What’s one word that could sum up the story’s conflict?
Is there anything extremely unusual about your characters or the situations they find themselves in?
What are common words used in titles for the book’s genre? (romance, I assume.…[Read more]
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BlueJay posted an update 9 years, 9 months ago
@aratrea I hope you’ve seen Flywheel. Q: What kind of character is Vince? A henchman? Bad guy? Neutral? I can’t figure him out.
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Unfortunately, Flywheel is still sitting on my to-watch list… >.> =P
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@aratrea *gasp* Dooooommmmm…..
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I know. xP I really need to get around to watching it one of these days…
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You do. And when you’ve watched it, please tell me what Vince is. My sisters and I were talking about it last night and I can’t decide. 🙁 (And it’s driving me crazy)
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Haha; I will!
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Greta replied to the topic Book Spine Poetry in the forum Poetry 9 years, 9 months ago
@bluejay
Ohhh, those are really cool! I love the first one especially. 🙂 By the way, I love your new profile picture. Maybe it’s not so new, but I haven’t been on here in a while; I’m just so busy with school. I miss talking to all you KeePers, though. 😉 -
BlueJay replied to the topic Unrealistic Romance in the forum General Writing Discussions 9 years, 9 months ago
@hannah-c I laughed when I read that and I’m still chuckling. I like that.
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