Anatra

@ellette-giselle

You’re fine. You’re still in charge of your character, but I get it. =)

Leo

He stacked their empty plates and carried them to the sink. They’d do the washing up later.

“Quincy, you got your backpack?”

The boy nodded and grinned, swinging his feet under his chair. Bare feet. Silvia her out a half exasperated laugh. “Monkey,…[Read more]

@raxforge

Syph

“Head to class, head to class. Not a bad idea if zi knew where said class was.” He flipped backwards off Rax’s shoulders to land in a crouch in a cushioning puddle. He flicked the water away and dusted off the moisture. “Time of reconing I suppose. You wouldn’t happen to know where the…” He pulled a folded up bit of parchment…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

She walked out of the sound booth and into the school halls, leaving an empty path behind her with frightened students in her wake.

XD

@raxforge

Sypher

“Oh, precisely.” Syph responded to the question without hearing. Arenas. Masters. Toadstools. He blinked, refocusing on the ceiling. Then slipped up to stand on Rax’s shoulders. He reached out to touch one arch. Such a strange choice of patterns.

“You’d think a pixie’d built this place with as many leaves everywhere.” There…[Read more]

@raxforge

Sypher

“Master Rax?” Syph propped one elbow atop the youth’s head and twisted around to squint behind him. But this felt almost too secure a position. Too controlled. He hummed to himself, resting his crossed arms on his makeshift table.

Still, there were advantages to being this high. He didn’t have to crane his neck to study the…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Leo

“Well…” Leo dragged out the word into a verbal smile. “First things first, you’ll need to get cleaned up for the day. I have some extra clothes you can have, and most of those bandages need changed too. Then breakfast. If you need help with anything, please let me know. I’ve been knocked about a few times before. Leaves…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Amen! God writes the best stories.

@whalekeeper

Oh my. XD Lucille Barnes…..that’s perfect and I haven’t even seen the Mandalorian.

Now I have to remember who’s been compared to whom…I haven’t seen most of them so I usually don’t remember…

@whalekeeper

Oh, that’s not good. I’ll be praying you get stuff figured out, and find a good solution.

@stephie

Yay!! God is good!

The Knoweth Jesus Version all the way!!

Although I do sometimes use the Elect Standard Version for clarification. However,  sounds so much more “spiritual” to forget that, and just say I look it up in the WLC/BYZ. No matter that I can’t read it without Strong’s help. XD

@raxforge

Oh gracious. I’m trying to visualize how this would work/look like. XD

BTW, Sypher looks and acts pretty much like a 14 year old (he’s marginally older as his people have a slightly longer life spans than most people) just a 4 1/2 foot 14 year old. I don’t remember if I said his age…XD

Sypher

The world spun was a cacophony of color…[Read more]

@raxforge

Sypher

He looked up at this Rax person less than two feet taller than him and frowned. “I’m a little old to be riding shoulders, but…” a smile darted across his face. “If you wouldn’t mind my following you, I could use a wave breaker just about now. You know, follow in your wake. I’d be much obliged.”

He stuffed his hands into his…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I’m glad it helped! I knew a lot of it was randomness, but when I can look at my difficulty in a new light, everything can start to click. Randomness that really doesn’t fit is typically what I use like. XD

I was trying to imply with that part, how Neveah’s heart broke for Sef. Putting myself in Neveah’s shoes, nothing wou…

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@ellette-giselle

Leo

“Whoa, kid, don’t knock yourself out.” Leo got to his feet, setting Quincy down in the chair behind him and reaching to steady the comforter entangled boy. He caught Rory’s flailing hand. Dazed green eyes turned to look at him. Confused.

“Rory, sit back down.” He offered gave a gentle smile. “I don’t think you’re fully awake yet.

And it feels like I’m going in circles. XD

If “you’re unloveable” is a side of her ‘shard of glass’, then maybe “your hopeless,” “you’re alone,” “your too far gone,” etc.

@savannah_grace2009

Wow. That’s dark. Pretty good story-wise, though. I’ll just go on a rabbit trail of plotting and hope it gives ideas. XD

I liked how you had Neveah try to combat the lie, and it’s obvious it’s for Sef’s sake, not her own. To make this sequence really work, maybe make Sef think her Mani is just trying to save herself – it’s…[Read more]

Ok! I read it. It’s good. They seem very inexperienced/in over their heads, but they’re handling it with humor so it’s funny. XD

Although the wolves were scary. O.O XD

@ellette-giselle

Ok. I am in the middle of section 2. I’ll go back and finish it. I’m just so… amazed.

WHY would ANYONE in his right mind Say That? XD I’m sorry, it’s just something I remember from a visiting missionary. You rarely if ever start off saying “the gods are false.” Telling people everything they believe is a lie will typically…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Ooo, lies. XD if I remember right, they want to start with little lies (because they’re more believable) and then work toward bigger lies with more power. So here are some ideas for chains of lies.

“You should be able to be strong enough on your own” (so when you falter, “you must be a failure” can follow)

“If God loved you,…[Read more]