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@kate-flournoy Yes!!! Same here; I asked my sister that question and the look she gave me still makes me laugh.

Second person. Always second person. 🙂

A random and slightly crazy question…judge me insane if you wish. Most people say they talk to themselves, but what they consider talking to themselves and what I consider talking to myself are two very different things. It would probably be more accurate to say I talk with myself. Anyway *takes deep breath*…do you talk to yourself in first or…[Read more]

Okay, wow, thanks for the info. So much of the research I’ve done on indie publishing has come out gloomy and negative, but maybe I just didn’t search deep enough. I’ll definitely keep those books in mind.

Well Daeus. We forgive you.

Sounds like a really, really helpful book. Thanks for sharing! I would love to self-publish… but so many times I’ve heard that self-publishing is a no-no for an author who doesn’t already have a wide reader platform. Maybe that’s not quite as true as it sounds…

@mas410 Thanks; I have fun with my blog.

Structure nut is very obliging.

Don’t worry, M.K. @the-happy-bookaholic corrects everyone’s grammar on here. It’s nothing personal. 😛

And that poem— wow. As structure goes, I’m don’t know how it was, because I’m not a structure nut (@Daeus is, if you can get him over here) but the words and the raw emotion touched me very… earnestly. You conveyed so much so briefly— or…[Read more]

Well then Denholm would die of poison and the whole world would crumble in ruin, quite simply. 😛

It’s okay— that almost happened anyway, because they were discovered halfway through the camp and he was very, very badly wounded.

Glad we could help. 🙂

But wait, plot twist here, what if the drink was important? How would that alter the story?

Thanks @Daeus and @writefury— the drink is not important. So I conclude it was a good description as descriptions go, but unnecessary, which cancels that out. 😛

Thanks guys! I’ll make it seem less important. 🙂

I really liked the drink description, personally. You did a really good job there. But I would repeat Daeus’s question: Is it important? I got the impression it was poisoned or something. (Not sure if that’s just a hunch, but it seems like the drink is important)

Gotcha @Hope. Thanks— you’re right.

Quick question for all of you here— how was the description of the drink? Specifically, did I spend too much time on it?

Just a few other picky comments…though I do love this scene. 🙂

With one accord Denholm and his companion turned,

This seems a bit stiff and formal. Simply rearranging the words would make it flow better.

I would be the last to know,” Denholm, answered,

There’s an extra comma…

But he was not to be let off so easily.

You could p…[Read more]

Welcome, and plan to have lots of fun during your stay here 😉 What type of stories do you like to write? Allegorical fantasy and futuristic suspense are my favorites (how do those two even go together?)

@mas410
XD Thanks, I’m glad you enjoy it! 😛

@mas401
XD Thanks, I’m glad you enjoy it! 😛

Well thanks! Would you mind posting one of your poems? Or are they all top secret? 😉

Great. Thanks. I’ll definitely be trying it. 🙂