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YES. Exactly. Denholm frightens people with that. If his cover gets blown and someone notices he’s tired, he just laughs at them or ignores them, depending on what mood he’s in, until he can’t possibly go on any longer. 😛

That is what’s ever so nice about this sort of character. 😛 They take so much and still stay cheerful and forgiving. 🙂
It’s almost humorous when Cobalt’s hurt because he just won’t admit that he needs to take it easy for a bit. He’s just “No really, I’m fine!” and keeps going until he passes out or something. XP

Thanks, @kate-flournoy! 🙂 I love hearing when my stuff has made people laugh.
Yeah, I noticed that was a bit of a problem, too. I’ll see if I can fix it up on that point. I already fixed what my mom noticed. I didn’t mention the fog soon enough before and it was sort of a “and then… fog!” effect. XD

@dbhgodreigns Thanks so much. And a question about Scrivener. It looks cool, but with regards to formatting, how much more use would it be than Microsoft? I’m currently using Kindle’s Textbook Creator (though I’ve not done much with it yet) to make and export my book…

I’ll even make sure G doesn’t find out you said such things.

Thank you. Thank you from the depths of my heart.

*snickers into hand* Don’t mind me, guys. I’m just… yeah. Don’t mind me.

@hope said it, Masyn. 🙂

Believe it or not, I don’t think I’ve ever read a dystopian novel, but I definitely know what the genre is.

I will just say a couple of things though. I would say a dystopian story where the hero loses would have more potential for harm than otherwise. Assuming the hero stood for freedom and virtue etc.— everything…[Read more]

@kate-flournoy A guinea-pig! Now you tell me. 😉 But then, as the oldest in my family, I’ve been the guinea-pig my whole life; I suppose I’m used to it. I’ll even make sure G doesn’t find out you said such things.

I don’t think there is anything inherently better or worse about dystopian fiction when compared to any other fiction. In books, the hero almost always saves the day in some why or another because well, that’s what the hero does, I suppose. Though no matter what the genre, if the book is told from a Christian worldview, then the character will…[Read more]

@Daeus Wait, rewrite the future? How can you do that when it’s not even happened? (and how can I put a line like than in some story or another? Unless you’ve claimed it, of course.)

@writefury I suppose that’s true. That is true. 😉

The second person part of me can be very sarcastic too. 😛

Ah, poor Cobalt. In with the bad guys, is he?

I don’t think Denholm’s going to stop being banged up and banged around until the climax finally finally comes and goes. Everything’s gone wrong for the poor guy lately.

It’s okay. He forgives me. 😛

Oh boy this thing made me laugh.

I’ve absolutely nothing to pick on except one thing. I noticed you use subject sentences a LOT. So many of the sentences began with ‘I’ or ‘Me’ or ‘The etc.’ You might try breaking up that pattern a bit— it can sound a little strange.

But otherwise this was great. Sterling has a very distinct personality (so…[Read more]

Ah, I see. 😛 I would never want you to kill Denholm. Cobalt’s rather banged up at the moment as well, though. XD

Only when I am extremely nervous or in a very stressful situation do I talk out loud in second person.
The occasional first person comment on a ridiculous situation is more common for me. Sarcastic first person.

I haven’t done Kindle specifically, but I’ve done the general ebook formatting. The chapter break stuff is a pain. But it’s pretty much the only one, so that’s good. I didn’t have the word doc headings in properly so it took me a while to fix, but if you have that going it should be alright.
@kate-flournoy, we aren’t exactly a huge public. Still,…[Read more]

@hope shhh! *shocked voice* I’m not ready to declare myself in the public market yet! *looks around stealthily, lowers voice* I’ll tell you a secret— you are my guinea-pig.
😉

Also, does anyone know if, after you publish a kindle book, you could edit or add to it? Like if I published a novella and then, a month later, wanted to add a page at the end with contact information or a free book or something like that? Could I change it or do I need to make sure everything is done before I publish it?

Actually, @kate-flournoy is designing my cover. 😉 I’m currently planning on doing the rest of the formatting. And I did just get that book, though I’ve not read it yet.

And I don’t know if I’ll just do kindle. Right now I basically want to have two novellas to build my mailing list though, to start with, I am going to attempt to publish…[Read more]