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@that_writer_girl_99 What about the beginning confused you? What do you think could be done to make it more clear?

@elly I’m sorry for my lateness. I guess you could say that I’m toast. 😛
Anyways…welcome to the forum, enjoy the fun, and watch out for dragons. 😛

@lola-jane I’m late…*sniff sniff* I’m sorry.
Anyways…HELLO! *blows you away with giant dragon hello!*
Do you play any instruments?

@f5a8c3e92 (sorry, just trying to tag you. 😛 )
Nuts. Did I really type the title as Shorty?
@daeus Are you able to make it ‘Short Story-Mystery’ ? 😛

@f5a8c3e9

@f5a8c9e3

Thanks @DelightInLife. 😀 It took me forever to get that actually… :/

@That_Writer_Girl_99

I didn’t write that, and I don’t think I can right now. I’m not that good.

*wise Yoda look* That— is why you fail.

*goes off into gales of smothered laughter* Okay, okay… so it’s not that drastic. I have a reputation to live up to apparently, though, so… *shrugs*

No, you’ve got enough humility to sink a ship.…[Read more]

@Daeus awesome. I got 506 words written. 🙂 See ya.

Also, see how much I told you by not telling? *grins*

@That_Writer_Girl_99 Ahhh… yes. You’re POV telling. That makes it boring and dull; you’re right. See, what you’re doing is giving us Kara’s thoughts instead of showing us her emotions through the way she acts. Instead of doing this:

That was strange. I think to myself as I—finally—enter my cell. I wonder what Matthias was talking about?
I tak…

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@That_Writer_Girl_99

Glad to hear it. 😉

Okay. You need help. Just getting to a good place to start? Prioritizing your ideas? What?

@That_Writer_Girl_99 Yyyyyes???

@That_Writer_Girl_99 heh. Yes indeed. 🙂

@Daeus @That_Writer_Girl_99 can I join you for a bit? I got permission to do some writing in the daytime and so I’m going to be working on my climax until around four. 😀

@That_Writer_Girl_99 here… have a snippet to give you a few ideas.

That was it. They could do whatever they liked about him. But they were not going to touch Denholm. A murderous spark ignited at the base of his throat, and suddenly a great warm, eager humming swelled and filled his mind, pressing outward through the boundaries and seeking an…

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@That_Writer_Girl_99 ha! 😀 I can get on board with that… *stands heroically on the verge of a deserted island with the wind streaming through her hair and her weird Jedi robes* May the force be with you. 😛 😉

Ahhhh… yes. Elemental fight scenes. *laughs* I can so relate. The MC of my WIP is also a fire Elemental, though not in the same way…[Read more]