Adry_Grace

@adry_grace Hmm, I hadn’t thought of those questions. Why are the princesses (though they probably won’t really be princesses in my story) having to sneak out? And who is watching/guarding them? And why?

Stopping now @adry_grace. Thanks for joining me. I got 463 words and finished a scene.

@adry_grace That sounds great. I’d better speed up my words per minute.

@adry_grace Good! Glad you found us. It’s really helpful.

Speaking of which, I’ll be writing till 2 (that’s about an hour from now) if anyone wants to join.

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After a while I begin to laugh

Maybe cut out “after a while” here.

It’l be okay.

I think that’s supposed to be “it’ll.” 😉

Just like that her voice breaks.

I would take out “just like that.”

But the choice is yours too make

“Too make” would be “to make.” 😉

but sure enough I find her walking by my side.

I’d take out “sure e…[Read more]

@adry_grace
This is super! I like it a lot…however, I do echo what Hope said about Eon’s emotions needing to run deeper. I also feel like you could use Milennia’s name more instead of saying “she” all the time. That’s all I’ve got! Nice work!!! 🙂 🙂 😉

@hannah-olsen I know, right? I love coffee. I might be a little too obsessed with coffee. 😛

@adry_grace Yeah, I put a lot of cream in my coffee. 🙂 We never get creamer at my house, so when we go to a hotel, my siblings and I always drink the creamer packages with only a little bit of coffee added. 😛

@adry_grace — lol!

Try your tag again @Adry_Grace

Yes @Adry_Grace, they do— it’s a quill pen stuck upright in a mug of coffee. Printed in large, blocky letters on the mug is the motto: ‘If you can’t be brilliant, odd will do.’

*ecstastic squeal* I’m so proud of myself! I designed the universal writer’s flag! Millions will rally to my standard! Chaaaaaaaaaarge!!!

@kate-flournoy and @adry_grace
Yay, so I’m not as weird as I thought! I do it too! 🙂 🙂

Have some one you can talk to about all your ideas. I have a friend who I will text when I’m trying to figure out something for my WIP(s). Sometimes just talking to someone helps me think better.

@Adry_Grace don’t laugh… but I talk to my characters. 😀

@adry_grace, Oh, neat! That sounds like a lot of fun. 🙂 For an English assignment one time, I had to listen the conversation of people I didn’t know and make it into a story. We went to an antique shop. It was so fascinating listening to conversations and writing them down (although it was hard to write fast enough 😉 ).

@adry_grace Exactly! From the beginning till now, the kingdom of Pen suffers violence and the violent take it by force.

Great advice everyone!

@adry_grace I like that analogy! XD

HC

@Anna-Brie— Libernova? ‘New book’? That’s awesome!

Er… this is awkward. *scratches head, wrinkles up little pointed nose and scrunches up face* I seem to have been awarded a title shared with a namesake about whom I knew nothing— not even that she existed. 😛 What is this evil and desperate villain of whomst thou speakest?

@adry_grace…[Read more]

How exciting!!! *slips on hoodie and gives staff a twirl* Hmmm…

@adry_grace: Noble Linoness

@gretald: The Peaceful One

@ingridrd: Duchess of Sweet Dreams

~ Lady of Sunny Smiles, of Ackten, of the relam of the KeePers.

Ah… yes @Adry_Grace, my Mom used to sing me the chorus of that song when I was little. Trouble was, I was a very sensitive, tender-hearted little toddler and it always made me cry instead of soothing me. 😛 😉

@kate-flournoy Your reaction… I’m grinning my face off right now. XD I’ll definitely post some more. (Though I can’t promise that stopping spot will be much better… 😉 )

@daeus and @adry_grace That was my biggest concern on the scene. Bad guy dialog isn’t really my strong point. 😛 I shall work on that.

Thanks for catching the typos,…[Read more]

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Other than just having no idea who these characters are and their back story, I think the main problem was a scattered and rushed scene structure. There’s some slowing down that needs to be done and that includes describing the details of setting, facial expressions, feel in the air, etc. I get the sense that you are skipping back…[Read more]