AbigailRose

And yes. This is the correct way to post a critique thingy. 😉 For the forum, at least. If you wanted an excerpt critiqued by the actual staff and posted on the home page, you’d have to submit it by email as stated in the submission guidelines.

@Abigail-Blomberg I really love the idea of taking the story from Joseph’s perspective, and I love the symbolism of a songbird you chose to represent their love. Great choice. There were only a few things I noticed that actually needed work— for one, you seem to randomly switch back and forth between past tense and present tense. That can be…[Read more]

@Abigail-Rose I really love the idea of taking the story from Joseph’s perspective, and I love the symbolism of a songbird you chose to represent their love. Great choice. There were only a few things I noticed that actually needed work— for one, you seem to randomly switch back and forth between past tense and present tense. That can be…[Read more]

@AbigailRose I really love the idea of taking the story from Joseph’s perspective, and I love the symbolism of a songbird you chose to represent their love. Great choice. There were only a few things I noticed that actually needed work— for one, you seem to randomly switch back and forth between past tense and present tense. That can be…[Read more]

@Winter-Rose yessss. All that. The theme definitely wouldn’t have been as powerful, nor the characters as dynamic, if it hadn’t ended the way it did.

Ha! Oh dear…

@Daeus I literally just copied and pasted that into a word file… 😀

@Rolena-Hatfield probably also in places where people of faith were suspected to be in high numbers gatherings over three or four could be prohibited. It’s possible too if you were suspected to be a Christian they could limit the number of ‘outreach’ devices or opportunities you were allowed to have. Basically try to isolate you, in a non-violent…[Read more]

@Daeus sackcloth may be a little extreme… XD
Good point. That’s true.

@Daeus no, you’re right. I agree. What I meant was I don’t understand it clearly enough to actually state for a certainty what it means, because as you pointed out there is information missing. Obviously it means what it says, but it didn’t give us the whole story, therefore there is that part of it I don’t understand.

@His-Instrument actually that does sound like it could be a powerful allegory, handled well. It’d need a lot of prayer and study of scripture of course, but that’s not difficult.

And that verse has always puzzled me as well. For me, it’s one of those mysteries that doesn’t really need explaining. Something God knows, but didn’t spell out for me,…[Read more]

Yes. It was definitely awesome. @Anne-Swiftblade

@Winter-Rose YAYYY!!!!!!!! *hot-pink and aqua confetti* Congratulations. That’s a lotta words.

Sounds like a plan. 😀

@Daeus

@His-Instrument yeah. What he said.

Well @His-Instrument, it depends on how you define ghost I guess. And sorry Tolkien, whatever you say about no allegory, I’m not buying it. 😛 There is no way he was blind to the symbolism in his work. Even if it wasn’t supposed to be a specific allegory, it was allegorical in so many ways it’s impossible he did that on accident. Sauron of course…[Read more]

@alia
Oh my goodness, I’m so sorry. That’s really hard. I’ll definitely be praying for the little girl and all those involved.

@Emma-Flournoy the ‘a deep uncertainty’ is after an ‘and’ so it doesn’t really matter.

@Daeus yessss. We loves it very much. Except you made web plural. Typo.