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@ellette-giselle

Yayyy!! They’re back! 🥰

This was a good section too.

The one that seems to be their leader is extremely bold, and he doesn’t seem to care what anyone says— or throws at him.”

Leon smirked, having a hard time stifling a laugh. He could guess who that was

Lol 🤣

Hi Julian, we’re back.”

This did seem a little out of place. I’m…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle @linus-smallprint @theshadow @whalekeeper @keilah-h @theducktator @koshka

Two new chapters this week! They should be uploaded to the doc now. Excited to hear what y’all think!

I’d be open to creating our own community. Slack would probably work for me, I’d have to check with my parents about Discord since I don’t have it yet. There’s also Group Me… which I don’t know much about, but plenty of youth groups seem to use it for announcements (not sure if you can create mini channels or anything like that.)

@ellette-giselle

Yep! I noticed that! 😆 “Teacher.” I like it.

@ellette-giselle

I love the way you put us inside Rolf’s story instead of having him just tell it. It worked so much better. Also, the transitions were great.

Good section. The part about Conrad was sad, though. I don’t really have any big critiques. Great job!

@theshadow

It looks good! I don’t have any major critiques. It is a very short chapter, but it does a good job of building on the tension. Also, I like the way you described the trees.

It seems a little weird that Olivia and Adeline and Dylan don’t seem to care about their families… well, maybe Dylan a little bit.

@ellette-giselle

Ohhhhh nooooooo! Ellette! I’m so sorry! That’s terrible!

I’m glad LOS was okay… but I’m really sorry about your WIP. That’s terrible.

I use Word Online (microsoft365.com, I think…) to write, and it saves online so I can access it through my phone and other devices. That might be worth looking into for the future, since I’m pre…[Read more]

@freed_and_redeemed Love it!!

@ellette-giselle

Wait… what? What happened to the parts you couldn’t recover?

@freed_and_redeemed ^^

@freedomwriter76 Great scene! *sniffles* 💔😭

@the_lost-journal That’s exciting! Hopefully it works!

@ellette-giselle

I just find the whole idea of his story interesting, and the different ways he has gone about fighting the slave-trade.

Definitely.

I wonder what is hooking everyone so much about this section?! Why do y’all like it so much? 😂

I don’t know! Maybe it was really well written or something. Also, just the events were super i…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

It’s a weird system, okay. 😂 I try not to cheat, but . . . it’s hard. I need to know what button to press. 😝

Well, like, the podium for this book, which includes Leon, Julian, and Ian. I think. xD

He seems like a good guy. His backstory sorta reminded me of Julian’s, just cause they both lost their little brother.

@ellette-giselle

Well . . . ahem . . . I sort of kind of saw that “It was Rolf.” before I read the section, since I had to scroll down to the bottom of the email to get to Kingdom Pen.

But, no, I don’t think I would have. I was still a little surprised, because I didn’t realize Quayid was going to be Rolf. But I knew someone was going to be…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Rolf!!! 😁

Wow, I really liked that section. That might have been my favorite part so far. I love Ian. He’s the best.

(And poor Albee, but I have a feeling he’s going to seek God out now that Leon’s gone…?)

@the_lost-journal

Pax

@the_lost-journal

Phew, so glad it didn’t actually happened. No worries! I’ll continue to pray for her.

@linus-smallprint

Yeah. I didn’t think it was realistic for her to be able to keep disappearing without her family knowing.

@ellette-giselle

Leon!!! I didn’t think you would kill him!!

I didn’t feel like the overseers punishing Leon instead of Ian was unrealistic. However, I’m starting to wonder what Ian did to deserve it. I know they’d had their eyes on him, but all he did was trip, right?

Julian’s scene was good too. I liked how it started raining and they were…[Read more]

@theshadow

Awesome, thanks!

@linus-smallprint

Great, thank you!! What made you guess that? You’re right xD