AveryTheExplodey

@thearcaneaxiom

Oh, sorry, it is chapter 6!

Well, two years have passed, and Sef has been abused, so that changes her personality a little bit. They both get older and more mature. What do you mean by different, like personality?

@anyone

More questions worth discussing:

How do we know that we interpret Scriptures correctly, when there’s so many different interpretations found? (This is different from a discussion of translation)

How do we discuss dilemmas that seem unique to our era and have no (seemingly) direct reference to what we see in scripture?

Anything else?

@everyone

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@jonas

That sounds good, what you developed so far seems like a good base to start for him.

Yeah, it’s interesting to have those kind of quirks in a magic system, like the nats in Mistborn.

Divine/magic influence is always the simplest way to go. Many point out that saying “a wizard did it!” is bad, and in a certain context this is true, but…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I like the new character you introduced in chapter 4. I don’t think you shared a chapter 7 yet, but I started chapter 6, but it seemed like there was some kind of gap, where the characters are somewhere different without explanation. Is that intentional?

@jonas

I like Vilsayor, have you developed his character much in terms of things like motives and such, or is he just plain bad?

I like that you fixed the magic system to implement more even structure. That sort of thing would have driven me nuts. Though it does make me ask the question of what makes these sorts of interactions fundamental in…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

I’m putting more thought into the 4th chapter. Then I’m going to make it so Lilitu gets 2 chapters. What do you think of the revisal?

Chapter 4: A theif

“Git your grubby fingers off that bread!” Lilitu froze. He looked longingly at the loaf of bread which might as well have been a bar of gold, before turning to face the e…[Read more]

@jonas

Wow, how are you so good at creating magic systems? i’m so jealous, lol

@acancello

“A masquerade party?” Amir said, completely bewildered. “Why?”

“Maybe they’re torturing us,” Hugo joked, “what could be worse than dressing up and dancing with girls?” He laughed, seeming to have made a full recovery.

Girl I legit started laughing!!!

“That’s strange,” Amir commented from the floor, “these clothes, this rack here.…

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@whalekeeper

They’re going great, and I’ve been getting so much great feedback on my story? How about you?

@fernweh_grace

Yeah, once again though, this is the era of self publishing, so stories from indie writers from all over the planet are getting better and better access to the market, allowing a deep saturation of ideas, themes, and stories of all sorts of cultures, including African varieties. While I don’t know of many examples of African…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

Do you think that the Paynes of the labor camp would use names still, but perhaps only in hushed tones especially around Pythonos?

Yeah I think so.

 An issue that I’m beginning to see now however is that it still feels like there’s no continuity of characters. Who do the readers connect to? Once they get to know one set of char…

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@acancello @mineralizedwritings

Yeah I’m good with whatever 🙂

@fernweh_grace

No worries, we all have lives, I knew you would get around to it eventually.

Those are excellent points. Things like dragons specifically might drag on the story’s ability to distinguish from other stories (pun almost unintended🤦‍♂️). Dragons are a unique case I think though, they can be unoriginal, but they have a timeless…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I like the revisal. Do you think that the Paynes of the labor camp would use names still, but perhaps only in hushed tones especially around Pythonos?

Anyway, I it is a good introduction to Ottoline’s character. An issue that I’m beginning to see now however is that it still feels like there’s no continuity of characters. Who…[Read more]

@jonas

True, but being for a younger audience doesn’t make rebels not star wars cannon for example. And Cecil G. Bagsworth is in it, so while it may be purely an easter egg, I think there are ways of making it work. That being said, there are definitely some non-Cosmere books that are going to be their own thing, like Infinity Blade.

@traiblazer

KP ate my original post where I had put all the ages of the McKinleys and so I had to hurry and redo it. So I must have forgotten to put Esther’s age, but she’s seven like @grcr said.

@trailblazer

They’re both still young though, so any romance between them would have to stay pretty light and not get too serious until they’re a little older. Bennett also is going to the army when he turns 17 or 18, but depending how their relationship would play out, they could write letters to each other and such.

I know you also said Tin…

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@jonas

I’m sure that many have. I’ve looked into it a bit, and it seems like there’s been a lot of discussion amongst fans about it, and Sanderson has even planned on writing more books related to a multiverse like Frugal. 17th Shard simply says that it has been a common theory that poses similar evidences that I worked out and mentioned already.…[Read more]

@grcr @whalekeeper @freedomwriter76 @smiley @trailblazer

Okay guys, sorry I’m late, but meet the McKinleys!

Reuben McKinley

He’s 45, with blue eyes and blonde hair. He’s very kind and loves to talk with people. He’s one of those parent’s who’ll stay hours at church talking with other parents! He’s good looking and muscular.

Ada McKinley

She’s…[Read more]