AveryTheExplodey

@esther-c

If you print it out/read it out loud to someone, it helps a lot with forcing yourself to read the whole thing instead of just skimming over it because you know what happens. It also helps with finding mistakes and sentences that could go more smoothly.

(I know you probably won’t want to read your WHOLE BOOK out loud, trust me, your…[Read more]

@freedomwriter 76

I love it! I wish I was that good at making mood boards for villains… Here’s mine

@freedomwriter76

WHY ARE ALL YOUR BOARDS SO SADDD lol

@thearcaneaxiom

Okay, I’ll work on that.

Thank you! 🙂

@kathleenramm

You know what might also be interesting to explore since you’ve talked about your questions and issues with Joseph Smith and my Church as a whole, we can play the reversal game where I talk about my own questions and misunderstandings of Orthodox Christianity (Or whatever sect you subscribe to if any) if your comfortable.…[Read more]

@jonas

Interesting, this makes me think of number theory! Could they also be placed on a 16-gon, instead of a linear line? That way they are all equal. Because it feels odd for there to be a numerical hierarchy, where would such a thing come from? And it isn’t a line of least to greatest, because Odium is one of if not the most powerful Shard…[Read more]

@jonas

Interesting. I actually didn’t know much about this, but I have been pondering on the nature and symmetry of the shards for a while. When I first learned about them, I was honestly a little disappointed, because they seemed random to me. When you have an elemental system, you usually want a theme, and it didn’t look like there was one…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Alright, so I finally got a chance to catch up again.

I actually don’t have too many comments on the latest 3 chapters as far as critiques go other than maybe Neveah’s part. I’m all for her having sudden resolve of vengeance, feeling intense emotions of anger and hatred, but it also felt perhaps a bit too sudden. Right now…[Read more]

@grcr

Let me know what you decide to write yours on!

@grcr

Thank you!

@rae

I’m not sure what you found wrong with this scene. I think it’s well written! It feels like I’m reading a published book!

@grcr

Ummm idk lol

I would look up writing prompts? I know KP has an article with writing prompts.

@rae

Yeah, don’t worry if you don’t get to all of them! I know it can be a lot, lol.

@rae

Thanks! That’s so sweet <3

And I’ll go back to EDITING on the first part like you said. You have great feedback! Wanna read the whole thing, XD I’ll post the link! https://editor.reedsy.com/s/p8SdhuQ (if you don’t want to that’s totally fine!) Unfortunately, I don’t have any more chapters following this one, but if you want to critique the…[Read more]

@acancello

Aww, thanks girl!

@trailblazer @hybridlore

Is this better?

“Last night, I had a dream…” Lilitu began. They stopped walking in a clearing. “I saw this girl…” he shook his head. “She was crying. She looked so sad, and hopeless…And it was so vivid. I could feel her pain, her suffering, and there was nothing I could do.” His voice was strained. Is he crying? Sef wonde…

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@thearcaneaxiom

BWAHAHA we know your name, now we can hack you! hehe