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October 13, 2024 at 7:05 pm #187498
*violently defenestrates Eric*
🎵How many toes does a fish have, and how many wings on a cow? I wonder, yup, I wonder!🎵
October 14, 2024 at 10:02 am #187535October 14, 2024 at 11:46 am #187540I’m so sorry!! I’ll stop now. Honestly my two cents have already been put in. – Keilah
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October 14, 2024 at 11:52 am #187541(The puns are driving me mad tho. You seriously need to stop or I’m going to lose it. lol)
Unless that’s your goal……….. lol
Eric right now:
Hmm… I think you might be getting a break from bad puns right now.
*violently defenestrates Eric*
*looks up what ‘defenestrate’ means* Oh!
Maybe Eric is just having a Peter moment?
#noSpoliers
Oh yes, and happy Canadian Thanksgiving to all of you!
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October 14, 2024 at 3:06 pm #187554Oh yes, and happy Canadian Thanksgiving to all of you!
Thanks! Happy Columbus Day! (Do they celebrate that in Canada?)
🎵How many toes does a fish have, and how many wings on a cow? I wonder, yup, I wonder!🎵
October 14, 2024 at 3:16 pm #187555@linus-smallprint Canadian Thanksgiving is today?
That’s cool! Today’s my brother’s birthday. Also, are the traditions and history behind Canadian Thanksgiving any different than American Thanksgiving or are they largely the same?
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
October 15, 2024 at 1:21 pm #187635Thanks! Happy Columbus Day! (Do they celebrate that in Canada?)
Nope. Possibly because we’re tied to England. We do celebrate some English holidays such as Victoria Day in May.
Canadian Thanksgiving is today?
Yes. Well, yesterday by now.
That’s cool! Today’s my brother’s birthday.Â
Cool! Happy belated birthday to him!
Also, are the traditions and history behind Canadian Thanksgiving any different than American Thanksgiving or are they largely the same?
I don’t know the history behind our Thanksgiving but our traditions are similar. We get together with extended family and have turkey. However, we do not have sweet potatoes with marshmallows (though I would like to try that again.)
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October 15, 2024 at 6:05 pm #187658@linus-smallprint ohh cool! To be frank, I have never had sweet potatoes with marshmallows either.
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
October 15, 2024 at 7:09 pm #187672Happy Thanksgiving!
I just looked up what sweet potatoes and marshmallows is and I am going to have to try it. No kidding.
I usually get together with my cousins on Thanksgiving and have takeout Chinese food. 🙂
Edit: That made it sound like I’m Chinese. I am not Chinese.
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October 16, 2024 at 10:47 am #187703I’m going to die laughing, because in a really weird way that totally fits Eric!
Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God
October 17, 2024 at 11:08 am #187755October 17, 2024 at 11:09 am #187757I’m going to die laughing, because in a really weird way that totally fits Eric!
You mean just the quote? Or Thor as well?
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October 17, 2024 at 11:11 am #187758I usually get together with my cousins on Thanksgiving and have takeout Chinese food.Â
Actually, that’s what I sort of had for my Thanksgiving meal this year. Rice bowls.
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October 17, 2024 at 11:11 am #187759You mean just the quote? Or Thor as well?
All of it, because it’s so not Eric that it’s so funny.
Chapter the 21st – The Arrest
Oh Shoot.
Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God
October 17, 2024 at 11:23 am #187762Mannnnn!!!!! This just got intense!
Shattering Glass! Eric is about to get everyone in a whole world of mess. Poor Martha. She’s such a sweet girl. Oh, that conversation between Eric and his siblings, that was one of your best scenes you have every done. I don’t know why, but for some reason the way you have been writing feels almost as though we’re on the surface of the story, and then that one just got deep. It was the expression, the word choices, the interaction of all three of them combined with personality……… I don’t know, something about that was different. It was really good. The responses each of them had were perfectly fitting for the characters that they were.
Btw, if Alan doesn’t end up loving Martha I think I’m going to kill him. THEY. ARE. PERFECT.
Just saying.
Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God
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