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I’ll try my best to read through your WIP, but I can’t make any promises since I’m also helping two other people with their stories. (:
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So pretty!! I love the soft shimmery feel of your cover.
My only critique on the cover is that the words feel a little crowded and off balance, like they were shoved into the top of the picture. I might move your name to the bottom of the page, enlarge the words, and drop them down a little bit. Maybe even flip one or both of the swirls to frame in the top of the page and shift the readers eyes down a little. You could also play with different typeface effects, but the letting is good in my opinion. (slight shadow or varied coloring might make the words pop and fit in a little more.)
As to the blurb, interesting! You have me a bit concerned over this couple.
Again, I don’t have many critiques for the back either. You might character or actions description for a few of the ‘he saids she saids’ just to draw a reader in and create a clearer mental snapshot.
Anyway, very pretty cover and interesting blurb. I’d probably pick up the book if just to read the last page (okay, that’s a bad habit of mine but whatever XD).
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Fork the GorkLooking and squinting at your cover, my eye goes right to the character’s faces. Good. I think the colour contrast is good. I wonder if there is a way to make the title stand out more from the illustration. I think @koshka has some good advice for improvement.
Now I know you are not supposed to judge a book by its cover, but people do anyway, so I am going to tell you what I would expect from this just by looking at the cover. It is some sort of romance, and there will be tension between these two individuals. I might expect upper-class parties and scenes to take place underneath a starry sky. The man and woman on the cover will likely dance together at some point. Being a male who likes action-adventure stories, this is not the most appealing to me, and I probably would not pick this up, but I think you have something going for your target audience.
You’ve managed to convince me to pick up the book and look at the back cover to read the blurb. I tend to prefer it when the caption tells me about the overall plot instead of just one scene, but this might just be my own opinion. Quote on the top? You’re starting to catch my interest there, I would keep that there. Inspired by Pride and Prejudice. No surprise there. Oh, you got some Princess Bride in there as well. Now I’m expecting some witty humour, which I love. Ah, a testimonial is useful, I’d rather hear that the book is good from someone else other than the author (no offence). The only place it looks crowded is towards the bottom, where you have the publisher’s information.
Overall, a decent cover, but with a few tweaks, I think this could stand out a little more.
Just an idea, how would it look if you placed a graphic of a piece of paper in between the words on the back cover and the background (or just a simple white rectangle with a little bit of a drop shadow)?
So, on the front cover, I agree that the title feels a little cramped. Maybe enlarge it a little and move your name to the bottom?
Also, I would remove the “By:” and just put your name. In my opinion, it feels more professional, but it’s up to you if you like that version more.
The cover illustration is beautiful!
On the back, I agree that I prefer blurbs instead of scene snippets, but I see tons of books that do what you did, so it’s just a personal choice I guess. As it is, we don’t know much about the characters or the plot aside from what we can grasp from the cover and quote on the back. But if it’s a hardcover, there might be a real blurb on the inside sleeve. And if the readers are buying this book online there’s usually a blurb there anyway.
There is a lot of “said” and “replied” in that snippet. Again, mostly a personal choice, but you could substitute a few of them for dialogue tags.
In the brief summary, you used both valor and courage. I think they both have similar meanings, so you could cut one if you wanted to make it less wordy.
And there’s two spaces in the publishing blurb at the bottom between “world” and “one”. I know that’s nitpicky but I just saw it 😅
Overall, great job! And feel free to ignore whatever you don’t agree with.
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That’s sooo awesome!! I love the art!! I’d recommend softening the word color though, the black is a really sharp contrast with the pale cover, but I think it’s amazing!
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OK, you guys had GREAT feedback! This is just what I needed.
Ok, the blurb on the back…… I am HORRIBLE AT WRITING THOSE!!! I can NEVER EVER write a good one! I hate it when they spoil the story, but I also want them to sound interesting. If anyone is good at writing blurbs I would LOVE help.
Now I know you are not supposed to judge a book by its cover, but people do anyway, so I am going to tell you what I would expect from this just by looking at the cover. It is some sort of romance, and there will be tension between these two individuals. I might expect upper-class parties and scenes to take place underneath a starry sky. The man and woman on the cover will likely dance together at some point. Being a male who likes action-adventure stories, this is not the most appealing to me, and I probably would not pick this up, but I think you have something going for your target audience.
You about got that right. It’s a little more complicated, but yes. There is also an underlying plot with a super evil badguy who is trying to steal the throne, but no one knows this until all is revealed near the end and everhything falls to peices. Other then that, you have a good idea of what is going on. It’s more of an interpersonal struggle type book as these two young people learn what God’s design for marriage truly is. (With some action, sword-fights, and a war thrown in) I liked that etched cover with the two of them because it was very old fashion. I was going for something like this book, (which by the way has awesome plot twists and such. So don’t judge the cover. lol)
Just an idea, how would it look if you placed a graphic of a piece of paper in between the words on the back cover and the background (or just a simple white rectangle with a little bit of a drop shadow)?
uhhh, I don’t know. I like the blue…… I’ll try it and see.
My only critique on the cover is that the words feel a little crowded and off balance, like they were shoved into the top of the picture. I might move your name to the bottom of the page, enlarge the words, and drop them down a little bit. Maybe even flip one or both of the swirls to frame in the top of the page and shift the readers eyes down a little. You could also play with different typeface effects, but the letting is good in my opinion. (slight shadow or varied coloring might make the words pop and fit in a little more.)
Ok, I was wondering about that. Let my try some alterations tomorrow and I’ll send it along.
As to the blurb, interesting! You have me a bit concerned over this couple.
Haha, you SHOULD be!!
So, on the front cover, I agree that the title feels a little cramped. Maybe enlarge it a little and move your name to the bottom?
Also, I would remove the “By:” and just put your name. In my opinion, it feels more professional, but it’s up to you if you like that version more.
K. Got it.
And there’s two spaces in the publishing blurb at the bottom between “world” and “one”. I know that’s nitpicky but I just saw it 😅
lol, thank you!
I’d recommend softening the word color though, the black is a really sharp contrast with the pale cover, but I think it’s amazing!
I was wondering about that…. I’ll try it!
Thank you again everyone! Like I said, anyone who is willing to help me write a better more catching blurb, Maybe Linus you could help me get a bit of a guy attention grabber in there, or Freedom, you did a great job on yours! that would be really helpful! I can provide a story outline for anyone who wants to help.
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I wouldn’t mind helping if you need it! Though I’ve never written out a full blurb before
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And guess what? His is eternal (:@kyronthearcanin I bought your book!! I finished it a few minutes ago. It was AMAZING. There were a couple of editing errors, but honestly I could look past those. How many do you have planned for the series, and when do you think the next one will be coming out?
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@ellette-giselle you have published books too right? Where can I get them?Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
Thank you so much!! I’m glad you enjoyed it! Yeah, I’m dyslexic, and I told my parents that if I found fewer than fifty editing things I’d be okay lol. I’ve read through the book and saw those errors too, but figured it wouldn’t be worth republishing over since it’s not as many as I thought.
I have at least three books planned, but there are so many different elements that if I wanted to I could go farther with different characters, especially since each book is from a different perspective.
I’m around 85k into the second book, so if I keep going strong I should be done soon! The guy who helps me edit is very back-and-forth on time, so it’s hard to tell how long the rest of the process to take, but I do know it’ll be less than a year from now haha.
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LEFSE FOREVER!!!!!! <333Thank you! Yeah I would love help doing a good back blurb. Do you have any ideas or info you need?
Yes, I do!! You have to order from my company through mail. I have a link to the order forms if you would like me to send you one. So far I have not put it on Amazon yet, though that’s going to be one of the next steps.
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