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April 2, 2018 at 9:17 pm #69872
@rochellaine WHAT? YOU DIDN’T SHIP THEM?! GIRL, I WAS SHIPPING THEM SO HARD BY THE SECOND HALF!!!
@seekjustice We shall convince Rochellaine that Chessy and Justice should be a couple! ๐I'm a Kapeefer 'TIL WE'RE OLD AND GREY!
www.jennaterese.comApril 2, 2018 at 9:54 pm #69884@seekjustice Just give them a few more window scenes and I might fall for them. ๐ย I don’t care what happens, whether the conversation is completely boring, whether they argue, whether they kiss – I just love the fact that they’re talking through the open window!!!ย Since it seems like Justice is accustomed to coming to Chessy’s window when he wants to talk to her, may I expect more such scenes? ๐ ๐ ๐
@jenwriter17 Why didn’t I ship them?ย Well, I thought Chessy’s crush was way too immature, and that Justice’s character would be ruined if he ever loved anyone better than his country.ย That was such an integral part of his character I couldn’t see him softening and still being interesting.ย I was really happy when I read Chessy’s thoughts at the end about how he would “never love anyone more than his country, but that was okay, because she didn’t need him to love her anymore.ย She could be content to love him from a distance never expecting anything in return.”ย That was perfectly what my thoughts of their ending should be…and then all the readers but me apparently decided to ship them and Seekjustice went with the majority! ๐ฎ"Sylvester - Sylvester!"
April 2, 2018 at 10:41 pm #69898Well, I never thought of window scenes being romantic, but there you go. *scribbles in notebookย give Justice and Chessy more window scenes*
I did, however, consider giving Chessy another love interest. I had considered Quillon, since she’dย almostย fallen in love with Quillon in the first book, till I paired him with Sapphire, but I knew Quillon wouldn’t ever love Chessy after loving Sapphire. So he gets to be big brother/best friend character.
And then there was Zachary Stoner…
And I was going to kill Justice as well.
INFP Queen of the Kingdom commander of an army of origami cranes and a sabre from Babylon.
April 2, 2018 at 11:23 pm #69920@rochellaine ah, I see your reasoning……..not that I understand still ๐ ๐ ๐
@seekjustice WHAT KILL JUSTICE?! *dies*I'm a Kapeefer 'TIL WE'RE OLD AND GREY!
www.jennaterese.comApril 2, 2018 at 11:26 pm #69922Whoops *laughs carelessly* I accidentally killed Justice AND Jen. My bad.
๐ He’s still alive at the end of the outline, so there’s a 95% chance he’ll still be alive at the end of this book.
INFP Queen of the Kingdom commander of an army of origami cranes and a sabre from Babylon.
April 2, 2018 at 11:59 pm #69927@seekjustice Oh, Iย thought she was going to end up with Quillon until he started interacting with her sister!ย Then I refrained from mentioning it since Sapphire and Quillon obviously were meant for each other and Chessy had nothing to do with anything there. ๐ย I also could have seen her with Jonas if she was a little bit older.ย As it was he was too mature for her, but I thought he was awesome.ย I also liked Kendall a bit, and thought he was immature enough to put him on the same level with Chessy.ย So basically, @jenwriter17, what I’m saying is I could have shipped Chessy with any male character but Justice. ๐ย Sorrrrryyyy!!!
SeekJustice…you kill characters so carelessly I am terrified of meeting you in real life!ย Um…what is the saber from Babylon for, exactly? (In America we spell it saber, not sabre. ๐ )
"Sylvester - Sylvester!"
April 3, 2018 at 12:17 am #69932I love the fact that you could have shipped her with any of the male characters but Justice :D. Jonas is way more mature than any of them, but if I remember correctly he’s younger than Justice. I’m not sure though, I’ve misplaced my book of notes, so I can’t check. I do remember that Cirrus is the oldest revolutionary and that Rain or Kendall, not sure which, is the youngest, excepting Waif.
I scare myself when I’m on the internet ๐ Most of my real life friends don’t know about myย mass-murdering tendanciesย though and I haven’t scared them off yet. I don’t know if that’s good news or not.
INFP Queen of the Kingdom commander of an army of origami cranes and a sabre from Babylon.
April 3, 2018 at 12:17 am #69933@seekjustice Did you actually say that?!ย You’ll give Justice and Chessy more window scenes?ย *squeals* Yes, window scenes are very romantic!ย Of course, like I said, the first thing I thought of was that favorite couple of mine, Bill and Patty, but the original window scene, which is considered one of the most romantic scenes of all time, is the balcony scene from Romeo and Juliet, right? ๐ย So it’s not just my opinion. ๐
"Sylvester - Sylvester!"
April 3, 2018 at 12:18 am #69934@seekjustice I’ve read the prologue, and so far I like it. I haven’t had time to read the rest yet. So many things have happened today that I didn’t want to get started and then be forced to walk away to do something else. I will get to it tomorrow. Well, tomorrow for me at least. This I promise. ๐
"For God hath not given us the spirit of fear; but of power, and of love, and of a sound mind."
April 3, 2018 at 12:20 am #69935@skredder No worries! Also, I think I neglected to mention that this is a sequel, so if there’s bits that don’t make sense to you, that’ll be why. All the other readers have read the first book and you can too if you want to. you’ll find the links on the first page of this topic!
INFP Queen of the Kingdom commander of an army of origami cranes and a sabre from Babylon.
April 3, 2018 at 12:21 am #69936@seekjustice I’m still worried about that 5% ๐
I'm a Kapeefer 'TIL WE'RE OLD AND GREY!
www.jennaterese.comApril 3, 2018 at 12:23 am #69938Yeah, I wouldn’t trust me either. ๐
INFP Queen of the Kingdom commander of an army of origami cranes and a sabre from Babylon.
April 3, 2018 at 12:30 am #69939I tried to upload a picture but it wouldn’t work. However yes, I literally did.
Yeah, I guess so. Balconies and windows are romantic.
INFP Queen of the Kingdom commander of an army of origami cranes and a sabre from Babylon.
April 3, 2018 at 12:49 am #69940@seekjustice Haha, yes it’s funny, isn’t it? ๐ย Any character but Justice.ย That doesn’t mean I didn’t like Justice, because I thought his character was wonderful!ย And I’m beginning…justย beginning to ship him with Chessy now. ๐
Ah, please let Rain be younger than Kendall!!ย I really don’t like romance when the girl is older than the guy, especially since girls mature faster than boys in their teens. ๐ย Oh, yes.ย I think I remember that Jonas was a bit younger than Justice.ย But he was definitely the most mature.
But they’re all dead now… ๐ ๐ ๐
"Sylvester - Sylvester!"
April 3, 2018 at 1:07 am #69941You need not fear, Kendall is 19 and Rain is 18. Kendall is the youngest male member of the revolutionaries, while Chessy is the youngest. And there’s Waif too.
INFP Queen of the Kingdom commander of an army of origami cranes and a sabre from Babylon.
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