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  • #11169
    BlueJay
    @bluejay
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      *hands bandages to @Daeus and comforts @kate-flournoy*

      @writefury
      that was really good. I love Cobalt’s humor.
      *Breathe @rolena-hatfield. Breathe.*

      #11175
      Daeus
      @daeus
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        Hey @bluejay, you should be the official Cobalt fan club physician.

        🐒🐒🐒🐒🐒🐒🐒🐒🐒🐒🐒🐒🐒🐒🐒🐒🐒🐒🐒🐒🐒🐒

        #11177
        Christine Eaton
        @christi-eaton
          • Rank: Knight in Shining Armor
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          Haha! I’m reading through everything and you guys are cracking me up! This is so great.

          Theater kid. Currently depressed because I can't stop listening to sad musicals.

          #11182
          BlueJay
          @bluejay
            • Rank: Eccentric Mentor
            • Total Posts: 1622

            Hmmm ok @daeus. Although I’m not always very good around real blood. Written blood will be ok. Anyone else need me? *Raises eyebrows*

            #11183
            Rosey Mucklestone
            @writefury
              • Rank: Knight in Shining Armor
              • Total Posts: 467

              Thanks for all the tips, guys! πŸ™‚
              Wow, Cobalt has a fan club now? *bursting with happiness*
              I shall most certainly consent to this. πŸ˜€

              #11185
              Rosey Mucklestone
              @writefury
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                @kate-flournoy, I elect you president. *slams down gavel in a carefully chosen empty spot*

                #11186
                BlueJay
                @bluejay
                  • Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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                  official Cobalt fan club physician


                  @writefury
                  , @daeus has made me a doctor *see above* can I go and treat Cobalt now? It goes against my physician nature to see him injured and just lying there. Please let me heal him. Please….!!!! *begs with hands clasped and eyes pleading* Does he survive? Will he be alright? He’s just come back from the dead, he can’t die now. Save him, @writefury. Save him.
                  In other words I am really loving Cobalt and his story. Well done. πŸ˜€

                  #11187
                  BlueJay
                  @bluejay
                    • Rank: Eccentric Mentor
                    • Total Posts: 1622

                    *slams down gavel in a carefully chosen empty spot*

                    Phew, no hands to fix. *grins happily*

                    #11190
                    Rosey Mucklestone
                    @writefury
                      • Rank: Knight in Shining Armor
                      • Total Posts: 467

                      Don’t worry, @bluejay. He’s up and about *cough* much sooner than he should be.
                      You have my permission to go about doctoring him. πŸ˜›

                      #11191
                      Christine Eaton
                      @christi-eaton
                        • Rank: Knight in Shining Armor
                        • Total Posts: 306

                        Wow, I better be keeping my hands far away from these virtual gavels, *looks over to bookshelf where the real-life gavel is sitting*

                        Theater kid. Currently depressed because I can't stop listening to sad musicals.

                        #11192
                        Rosey Mucklestone
                        @writefury
                          • Rank: Knight in Shining Armor
                          • Total Posts: 467

                          *gasp* everyone back! she’s armed. XD
                          Just kidding. But really, watch the gavels around here.

                          #11194
                          BlueJay
                          @bluejay
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                            Hears gasp and runs in. Sees gravel and grabs it. Chucks it out the window. Phew. No more gravels. Too dangerous. I have to much to do, without tending to injured hands. *hears a moan through the open window* Oh no! Who did the gravel land on? I told you they were deadly.
                            Ah, let me go and see my suffering patient Cobalt. *looks around surprised* He’s healed fast. I like it when my patients are like that.


                            @writefury
                            ;P

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                            #11227
                            Kate Flournoy
                            @kate-flournoy
                              • Rank: Chosen One
                              • Total Posts: 3976

                              I elect you president. *slams down gavel in a carefully chosen empty spot*


                              @writefury
                              Awesome!

                              …

                              …

                              …er…

                              What exactly does a president do? πŸ˜› πŸ˜‰

                              Rolena Hatfield
                              @rolena-hatfield
                                • Rank: Knight in Shining Armor
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                                *comes in rubbing bump on head, gavel in hand* Does this belong to someone? I was out taking a breather as instructed by the official Cobalt fan club physician @bluejay when this thing came flying through the window! *tucks gavel safely away on @christi-eaton shelf*

                                @kate-flournoy *clears throat* the president should 1) organize meetings where we can exclaim over how much we love Cobalt! (while serving lemonade of course) 2) convince the authoress @writefury to give us more Cobalt! 3) … ummm… etc.
                                πŸ™‚

                                https://rolenahatfield.com/

                                #11270
                                BlueJay
                                @bluejay
                                  • Rank: Eccentric Mentor
                                  • Total Posts: 1622

                                  *Runs to you @rolena-hatfield. Grabs ice pack and places it on bump on head. Commands you to lie down and rest. Grabs gravel and locks it in a cupboard. Dust hands off. *sigh* Life is so busy as a doctor.*

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