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    Cloaked Mystery
    @jonas
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      @linus-smallprint

      I’m pretty sure it’s the same book.

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      #194435
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      @savannah_grace2009
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        @linus-smallprint

        yes, this is the same book that you started before. I did revise it a lot though πŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚πŸ˜…

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        #194438
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        @savannah_grace2009
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          @jonas

          whoaaaa

          that was a lot πŸ˜…πŸ˜…

          thank you for all your help, it is appreciated!!

          however, I’m not looking for so much of a detailed critique as I have in the past. This is still a really rough draft and I know there’s a lot of messy sentences and chapters. I’m mostly looking for critiques to see if the pacing is good and if it makes more sense the way I changed it from previous drafts. There are a lot of big changes and I want to make sure they are good ones and at least make a little sense to readers πŸ˜…

          When you critique the next chapters, you don’t need to go sentence by sentence because I Β know it’s messy. I can go and edit it later, but right now I’m trying to bounce ideas off of people and just slap words on the page.

          you are also really good at editing like this, so in the future when I’ve written through the entire novel, your help and suggestions this way would be amazing!!!!

          I know when I’ve asked you for help in the past I wanted this kind of critique but I’m looking for a little more broad suggestions this time. Sorry I should have clarified that πŸ˜‚

          thank you again!!!

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          #194439
          Cloaked Mystery
          @jonas
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            @savannah_grace2009

            Alright then, got it! I guess I’ll make a lot faster progress than I thought then!

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            #194441
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            @savannah_grace2009
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              @jonas

              Thank you again for your help!!!

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              #194586
              Linus Smallprint
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                @savannah_grace2009

                Okay. Revising is fine, I have a lot of changes between my first and second draft of TNPT. I will continue reading then. Reading the second chapter, I see it is a scene you had in your previous draft now. I’ll get back to you when I have more thoughts.

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                #194626
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                @savannah_grace2009
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                  @linus-smallprint

                  Perfect! Thank you!!!

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                  #194940
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                  @savannah_grace2009
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                    @everyone

                    I wrote a few new chapters, if anyone’s interested in reading them!

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                    #196801
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                    @savannah_grace2009
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                      @jonas @theducktator @ellette-giselle @linus-smallprint @grcr @esther-c @whalekeeper @anyone-else

                      I haven’t heard from you guys in a while and I was just making sure you were still up for reading through my draft? It’s okay if you’re not, just please let me know…I don’t want to annoy anyone with tags XDXD

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                      #196803
                      The Most Esteemed Feathered One
                      @theducktator
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                        @savannah_grace2009

                        I haven’t started it yet, but I will later this week. Maybe tomorrow, since I’m probably too sick for co-op.

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                        @savannah_grace2009
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                          @theducktator

                          Okay, sounds good!!!!
                          Aw girl I’m sorry you’re sick :/

                          I hope you feel better!

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                          #196805
                          -GRCR-
                          @grcr
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                            @savannah_grace2009

                            Yup yup. I was actually thinking about it yesterday. A little busy right now, but I planned to read and catch up very soon. πŸ˜‰πŸ˜

                             

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                            #196806
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                            @savannah_grace2009
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                              @grcr

                              Okay!!!

                              I understand being busy!!! If you don’t have time don’t worry about it!

                              I was just kind of confused since I haven’t heard anything from anyone about my draft for like three weeks πŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚

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                              Ellette Giselle
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                                @savannah_grace2009

                                We had a death in the family and I’m super busy, but I’ll see what I can do.

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                                #196809
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                                @savannah_grace2009
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                                  @ellette-giselle

                                  Oh noooo! Girl I’m so sorry *hugs* <3

                                  I’ll be praying for you guys….

                                  This lady thrives on the divine grace of Faith and the rich embrace of caffeine.

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