- This topic has 412 replies, 16 voices, and was last updated 1 day, 5 hours ago by
.
-
Posts
-
I’m pretty sure it’s the same book.
🏰 Fantasy Writer
✨ Magic System Creator
🎭 Character RPer
📚 Appreciator of Booksyes, this is the same book that you started before. I did revise it a lot though 😂😂😅
"Hair. Mouth. Cheese of yak. Come, Sintar, bRiNg a MeLoN."
whoaaaa
that was a lot 😅😅
thank you for all your help, it is appreciated!!
however, I’m not looking for so much of a detailed critique as I have in the past. This is still a really rough draft and I know there’s a lot of messy sentences and chapters. I’m mostly looking for critiques to see if the pacing is good and if it makes more sense the way I changed it from previous drafts. There are a lot of big changes and I want to make sure they are good ones and at least make a little sense to readers 😅
When you critique the next chapters, you don’t need to go sentence by sentence because I know it’s messy. I can go and edit it later, but right now I’m trying to bounce ideas off of people and just slap words on the page.
you are also really good at editing like this, so in the future when I’ve written through the entire novel, your help and suggestions this way would be amazing!!!!
I know when I’ve asked you for help in the past I wanted this kind of critique but I’m looking for a little more broad suggestions this time. Sorry I should have clarified that 😂
thank you again!!!
"Hair. Mouth. Cheese of yak. Come, Sintar, bRiNg a MeLoN."
Alright then, got it! I guess I’ll make a lot faster progress than I thought then!
🏰 Fantasy Writer
✨ Magic System Creator
🎭 Character RPer
📚 Appreciator of BooksOkay. Revising is fine, I have a lot of changes between my first and second draft of TNPT. I will continue reading then. Reading the second chapter, I see it is a scene you had in your previous draft now. I’ll get back to you when I have more thoughts.
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
- You must be logged in to reply to this topic.