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  • December 20, 2024 at 11:43 am #192464
    Sara
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      Okay thank you guys!!! <33

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      December 20, 2024 at 4:49 pm #192504
      HighScribe
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        @savannah_grace2009

        Since I don’t know where you’re going with this, I can’t really provide a good opinion on whether you should keep it or not. It’s very different from any of your other drafts (which isn’t a bad thing!).

        I would just say that if you’re going back to add more details about Andromeda, made sure you don’t get too info-dumpy, which I think you got a bit close to at a few points here.

        I’d say keep it. If you write the draft, and it doesn’t work out as well as other options, then you can change it, but keep it for now. I want to see where you take it.

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        December 20, 2024 at 7:04 pm #192514
        Keilah H.
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          @savannah_grace2009

          For some reason I like this a lot better than the ones where she was little. It fits a bit more somehow. Throws us right into the story.

          For some reason it reminds me of the Keeper of the Lost Cities intros. I don’t know if you’re familiar with that book series but I was just reading the latest installment so it’s still fresh in my mind, and your story calls to mind the beginnings of those books.

           

          also your romance scenes are written JUST LIKE MINE somehow lol

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          December 20, 2024 at 11:02 pm #192528
          Sara
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            @highscribeofaetherium

            I agree…it did get a little info dumpy lol

            Again it isn’t edited…and the details about Andromeda are mostly in the prologue and will be revealed little by little in later chapters (if everything stays according to plan hahaha!)


            @keilah-h

            I know…me too…I feel like when I started it when she was little, it felt like the plot was moving too slow, but also too quickly. It was a weird feeling that I can’t really put into words, but I’ve always felt weird about how I had it before…I like this better too and with a LOT of editing I think it has potential…

            ✨✨✨✨ I SEE the VISION ✨✨✨✨ lol

            interesting hahaha!

            This is random but I’ve always been SO self conscious of my romance scenes…like part of me is obsessed with writing them but the other part of me is like I can never show this to ANYONE lol!

            Lukas&Livia
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