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    Evelyn collins
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      Yeas!!!

      "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

      #175672
      Keilah H.
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        @evelyn-collins There’s one thing about Hemlock telling Leo the news that you’d have to put in the story beforehand.

        If she’s with him, he’s most likely already experimenting on Crosshair, and shows him to her while he’s locked up (or being tortured….😬……sounds like Hemlock to do that though). Since the Empire confiscated his armor when they took him over there, he’d obviously be helmetless. But in order to recognize him, that’d mean she would’ve had to have seen him with his helmet off at least once.

         

        Just a little detail I realized.

        Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

        #175673
        Keilah H.
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          Oh, and I like your planet/moon names.

          Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

          #175674
          Evelyn collins
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            Thx!!

            "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

            #175675
            Keilah H.
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              @evelyn-collins you’re welcome!

              oh, and here’s my finished art of Leo and Crosshair as dragons:

              Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

              #175676
              Keilah H.
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                Crosshair is all silver, but Leo has a bit of blue on her spines….Also, Cross has a few scars and several of his tail spikes are snapped off due to all the torture he’s received.

                Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

                #175677
                Evelyn collins
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                  Very noice!!!!!

                  "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

                  #175678
                  Keilah H.
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                    Thanks!

                    Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

                    #175679
                    Evelyn collins
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                      This has not explained yet, but, Leo has stitches across her knuckles from Varian’s… rigorous training

                      "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

                      #175681
                      Keilah H.
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                        @evelyn-collins ouch, sounds like it must’ve hurt then

                        Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

                        #175683
                        Evelyn collins
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                          Yeeeeepp

                          "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

                          #175684
                          Keilah H.
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                            @evelyn-collins so when Hemlock “properly introduces” Leo and Cross…….do you think she’ll hate her father at first for a while, or will she forgive him pretty early on?

                            Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

                            #175685
                            Evelyn collins
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                              I think she’ll be very stand-offish, and wants to be as far as possible from him, idk about hate, but she definitely doesn’t like him or trust him

                              "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

                              #175686
                              Keilah H.
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                                I can see that…lol

                                Does she ever come around to anything more than tolerating him?

                                Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

                                #175687
                                Evelyn collins
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                                  Yes. I have a plan for that 😏

                                  "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

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