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@evelyn-collins Really?
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
Well, you could have her ask him how everyone knows her. He doesn’t have to provide a truthful answer….
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
Yeah, I had that much, but it’s what happens after, and what leads up to her plan and escape
"Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"
Hmmmm…..
Well, she’s gotta meet her dad somehow. How about here?
After realizing what they’re doing to the clones (maybe thinking “oh, I’m next!”), she decides she has to escape. He might try to help her, or talk her out of it.
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
@evelyn-collins heyy! Been working on the story any, or are still a bit stuck on it?
also WE’VE GOT ONE MORE EPISODE TO GO!!! I can’t imagine how it’s gonna end, but I’m terrified for the boys cause I know someone is gonna die.
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
Yeah, I’m still stuck 😭
I just don’t know how to practically move forward.
and I’m still on no screens, so I haven’t seen past the 6th episode
"Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"
@evelyn-collins ohhh ok!!
I won’t give you any spoilers 😉
hmmmm……IDK. I’ve run out of suggestions lol, I guess just look back at my old ones…..
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.