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    Evelyn collins
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      @keilah-h

      cool!! It’s actually pretty close to the real thing

      "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

      #175441
      Keilah H.
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        @evelyn-collins nice!!! Great job drawing.

        Also, I love how she has a toothpick in her mouth, just like her dad.

        You should draw them together next.

        Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

        #175442
        Evelyn collins
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          oooo!! good idea!

          "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

          #175445
          Keilah H.
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            @evelyn-collins I’d love to see it once you’re done.

            How tall is she compared to him? (My Clone Wars guidebook says he’s 183 centimeters, or six feet four inches.)

            Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

            #175446
            Evelyn collins
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              Honestly, I can see her being around 5’5 to 5’9 feet

              "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

              #175447
              Keilah H.
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                @evelyn-collins me too. That would make her about six inches shorter than him.

                Apparently I got my math wrong, too, and he’s 193 centimeters, not 183….lol

                Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

                #175450
                Evelyn collins
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                  Yep

                  "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

                  #175545
                  Keilah H.
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                    @evelyn-collins oh btw, how long does it take to do drawing like those ones of Leo? I draw a lot of human characters, but it usually takes me at least an hour or so to do one, especially if they aren’t wearing a helmet and I have to do all their facial features.

                    Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

                    #175554
                    Evelyn collins
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                      @keilah-h

                      depends. Expression sheets like the one I sent you usually take 30 min to an hour, while more detailed ones take anywhere from an hour to two days.

                      "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

                      #175555
                      Evelyn collins
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                        @keilah-h

                        Hey!! for once I am trying to plan ahead, and I’m trying to decide how Leo will receive the news that Crosshair is her father.

                        I wanted to know if perhaps you had any ideas.

                        "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

                        #175599
                        Keilah H.
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                          @evelyn-collins I sure do!!

                          Ok, before we get to Leo’s reaction, we should probably talk about the reveal itself. Who tells her? Crosshair himself? Varian saying something along the lines of “I’m the only one who cares about you! Your mother obviously didn’t care, and look where your father is now!” Perhaps Rampart, trying to convince her to go to his side?

                           

                          Plus, she’d have a different reaction depending on who tells her.

                          1. If you’re going the route of her hearing it straight from Cross’s mouth, don’t just have him say it outright. “I am your father” worked for Vader and Luke, but that’d be a bit of a cop-out here, especially since this story’s also set in the Star Wars universe and it’d look like a copy and paste job. It’d be more interesting for him to say something indirect, such as “I’ve been looking for my daughter for years…only for her to live on the same planet I’m stationed on” or something like that..  The reaction here would probably be similar to “Well, why didn’t you come back for me?” to which he can explain the whole story or something.
                          2. If it’s from Varian, Rampart or some other villain, she’ll probably deny it, and keep denying it until she goes looking for Crosshair himself so he can tell her it’s not true. But he’s just like “Hate me if you want, but I am undoubtedly your dad.” She probably wouldn’t even have to ask him what went down in this scenario, he’d probably launch into an explanation of why he left her alone.

                          In both scenarios, she could do one of two things: decide she’s done hating him and forgive him, or run off in fury and perhaps do something foolish that almost gets her, him, or someone else hurt/killed, and she either has to let go of her anger and help him, or he pulls her out of danger in hopes he can reconcile himself to her (in the case that it’s someone else in the dangerous situation, say Rylan or one of her townspeople friends, he saves them because he figures the only way to earn her trust is to save one of those she already trusts).

                          Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

                          #175600
                          Keilah H.
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                            wow that was a rant lol

                            Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

                            #175601
                            Keilah H.
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                              oh btw I just drew this picture of Leo and Cross as dragons today, I haven’t actually finished and colored them but wanted to show you as soon as I got close to being done.

                              Both have toothpicks in their mouths lol, and yes, Crosshair has a snake tattoo on his arm. I came across a drawing of him with it once and thought it was funny how you’d mentioned Leo had effectively the same thing, so I put it on.

                              Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

                              #175602
                              Evelyn collins
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                                u good!! That was actually really helpful 😁! I think imma lean towards Varian or someone else (maybe even Hemlock😳)

                                "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

                                #175603
                                Keilah H.
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                                  @evelyn-collins forgot about Hemlock haha

                                  he’d actually be perfect for it.

                                  Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

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