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February 4, 2024 at 4:29 pm #175263February 4, 2024 at 4:30 pm #175264
@evelyn-collins lol yay!
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
February 4, 2024 at 4:32 pm #175266I unfortunately don’t have time to talk today but I hopefully will be on tomorrow!
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
February 4, 2024 at 5:58 pm #175270okayyyyy
"Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"
February 5, 2024 at 2:46 pm #175308@Keilah H.
Hello!!
random idea I needed to get out for silly old sanity purposes 🙃
so, I have seen headcons that the reason Crosshair chews on toothpicks bc of an oral stimulation problem, which could be genetic (I used to have it) or something else.
I haven’t done much research on it (that will soon change), but I wonder if that too would transfer to Leo 🧐"Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"
February 5, 2024 at 2:54 pm #175309@evelyn-collins I’ve heard that, and yes, that theory certainly fits him.
I personally think it might, and if it doesn’t, I think just having her with the habit but not know where it came from is a great idea lol
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
February 6, 2024 at 3:41 pm #175381@evelyn-collins kinda random, but are you planning to have the other members of the Bad Batch show up anywhere? Like either in flashbacks or as part of Leo and Rylan’s journey? And will they have children of their own? (Obviously Omega won’t lol, and I feel like that’s not Echo’s thing either)
(Oh, and a little tip–usually when I write flashbacks, like the one you’re writing right now, I put them in italics to distinguish them from the main story.)
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
February 6, 2024 at 4:42 pm #175385I plan to have the other members in it at some point, tho I am still undecided on if they would have children, and what their children would be like.
also, so random, but where do you live?
"Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"
February 7, 2024 at 2:24 pm #175424@evelyn-collins cool! I can’t wait to see what you come up with….
also I’m from Florida, but I can’t tell u specifically where lol
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
February 7, 2024 at 2:36 pm #175430February 7, 2024 at 2:57 pm #175432@evelyn-collins ha, we’re actually pretty close together then.
oh and question… I was reading your fanfic and came across this line:
“If she doesn’t have the force, how did you find her?” he [Rylan] asked.
“She is a special case,” Varian said distantly. “But I suppose that was plain to see.”
What did he mean by that, and how did he find her exactly? Was it coincidence that he happened to walk by and sense her there?
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
February 7, 2024 at 3:04 pm #175433i actually had two ideas for that (as always 🙃)
it’s either her mother’s doing (I’m not sure exactly how yet, but like she told Varian she didn’t want Leo or something somehow),
or it might be even more personal than that (I’m not quite sure how about that one either 😆)
sorry, sometimes when I write I get random ideas, and ad them with very little plan for how I’m going to explain it. Currently this story is only loose ends 🙃
"Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"
February 7, 2024 at 3:10 pm #175435@evelyn-collins ah ok, makes sense! The first one sounds like the one I’d go with.
oh and the Bing AI came up with this when I asked it do draw a character matching Leo’s description. This drawing has tattoos on both arms, not just the left one, and looks kinda more like something out of a early 2000s, somewhat cringey Disney Channel rom-com than Crosshair’s daughter, but for an AI this isn’t terrible. I’ve seen much worse.
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
February 7, 2024 at 3:15 pm #175437February 7, 2024 at 3:16 pm #175438@evelyn-collins yeah I might use it as my reference image for if I ever draw her
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
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