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    Evelyn collins
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      @keilah-h

      yeas!

      "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

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      Evelyn collins
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        @keilah-h Yes!!

        "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

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        Evelyn collins
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          @keilah-h sorry, i thought the first didn’t go through.

          "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

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          Keilah H.
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            @evelyn-collins heyyyy I noticed your fanfic now says “Draft One.” Are you already working on a second draft? Can I see it yet or is it off limits?

            Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

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            Evelyn collins
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              @keilah-h
              Hey!!!! Sorry I didn’t respond right away. I’m on a trip 😅 I can talk now tho. Not much is going on.

              But yes, I am starting draft two. I’m not even a full two pages in 🥲.
              I’ve mostly just been trying to evaluate  what needs to be tweaked and such. My biggest critique is that its too slow.
              I am open to any of your constructive feedback 😁

              "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

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              Keilah H.
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                @evelyn-collins personally, I didn’t think it was too slow! it was fine to me.

                Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

                #185890
                Evelyn collins
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                  @keilah-h

                  Thanks ☺️

                  Never the less, there were also some holes that needed to be filled, and some things I wanted to change, so we’re trying for round two😁

                  "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

                  #185927
                  Keilah H.
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                    @evelyn-collins cool, I look forward to seeing it!

                    (probably a good idea to at least finish draft one though lol, but hey, I’m also guilty of starting a second draft without finishing the first)

                    Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

                    #185949
                    Evelyn collins
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                      @keilah-h

                      yeah, I’ve been teetering between finishing the first or just diving into the second😅

                      Rn I’ve just been doing plot work.

                       

                       

                       

                       

                       

                       

                       

                      Unsuccessfully. …

                      "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

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                      Keilah H.
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                        @evelyn-collins lol plot work never works for me either

                        I’d love to see what you’ve got if you have a story structure or something! Seeing the whole plot laid out might help me give you feedback on where you could go next.

                        Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

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