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March 5, 2024 at 4:48 pm #177340
Cool!!
"Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"
March 5, 2024 at 4:53 pm #177341yep, so…….
if you need any more ideas for anything in specific, I’ll be here, for the next 20 or so minutes lol
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
March 14, 2024 at 9:21 am #177816@keilah-h I am in need of your assistance once again!!!
I am finally at the part where she meets Hemlock, but I have no IDEA what to do!!
"Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"
March 15, 2024 at 12:33 pm #177861well, I had some ideas if you flip back a page or two
Want me to repost them or are you ok with looking for them?
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
March 15, 2024 at 12:52 pm #177865But timeline wise, one thing that’d make sense is that Leo will have been there for a good while before Cross arrives there. Probably a few weeks at least.
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
March 15, 2024 at 12:55 pm #177866Yeah, that makes sense! And I’ll go check it out 😁
"Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"
March 17, 2024 at 6:57 pm #178013@evelyn-collins ooh, this is gettin’ good!
one little edit though–Emerie introduced herself twice??? maybe rework that scene so she doesn’t say her full name until Leo asks for it.
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
March 18, 2024 at 4:56 pm #178055to be honest, I didn’t even notice I did that. Recently I’ve been writing in a half-dazed state :p.
I shall fix this error! also, tbh, I’m seriously stalling. I’m so scared to write Hemlock.
"Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"
March 19, 2024 at 4:03 pm #178070@evelyn-collins lol don’t blame ya. He’s terrifying.
If it’s a “how do I write him” thing, just rewatch the show and get an idea of his mannerisms, how he acts around other characters, etc. Dig deeper in to his personality besides the creepy psychopath part (but do pay attention to that lol)
If it’s just “eeeeh I don’t like him, so I’m gonna stave off writing him”, I can’t help with that lol, and I definitely understand the reasoning behind it.
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
March 20, 2024 at 3:09 pm #178106@evelyn-collins was just reading the latest bit of your story!
tbh I love how you wrote Leo being annoyed at the bird flying outside her window lol
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
March 20, 2024 at 3:09 pm #178107she most definitely got that from her dad, ha
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
March 20, 2024 at 3:15 pm #178108for real. idk why, but I just needed to write that. the hate of the avian creatures is hereditary.
"Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"
March 20, 2024 at 3:18 pm #178109@evelyn-collins it’s in the same genes that control the gray hair and sniper eyes XD
seriously though, I do a lot of things like my dad, and my mom says it really is in our blood since he and I have the same blood type
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
April 6, 2024 at 1:40 pm #178671@evelyn-collins oooh I just read what you wrote recently! The plot is thickening lol
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
April 6, 2024 at 2:41 pm #178672Thx!!! I’m actually super stuck rn 😅
"Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"
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