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    Evelyn collins
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      Cool!!

      "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

      #177341
      Keilah H.
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        yep, so…….

        if you need any more ideas for anything in specific, I’ll be here, for the next 20 or so minutes lol

        Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

        #177816
        Evelyn collins
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          @keilah-h I am in need of your assistance once again!!!

          I am finally at the part where she meets Hemlock, but I have no IDEA what to do!!

          "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

          #177861
          Keilah H.
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            @evelyn-collins

            well, I had some ideas if you flip back a page or two

            Want me to repost them or are you ok with looking for them?

            Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

            #177865
            Keilah H.
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              But timeline wise, one thing that’d make sense is that Leo will have been there for a good while before Cross arrives there. Probably a few weeks at least.

              Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

              #177866
              Evelyn collins
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                Yeah, that makes sense! And I’ll go check it out 😁

                "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

                #178013
                Keilah H.
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                  @evelyn-collins ooh, this is gettin’ good!

                  one little edit though–Emerie introduced herself twice??? maybe rework that scene so she doesn’t say her full name until Leo asks for it.

                  Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

                  #178055
                  Evelyn collins
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                    to be honest, I didn’t even notice I did that. Recently I’ve been writing in a half-dazed state :p.

                    I shall fix this error! also, tbh, I’m seriously stalling. I’m so scared to write Hemlock.

                    "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

                    #178070
                    Keilah H.
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                      @evelyn-collins lol don’t blame ya. He’s terrifying.

                      If it’s a “how do I write him” thing, just rewatch the show and get an idea of his mannerisms, how he acts around other characters, etc. Dig deeper in to his personality besides the creepy psychopath part (but do pay attention to that lol)

                       

                      If it’s just “eeeeh I don’t like him, so I’m gonna stave off writing him”, I can’t help with that lol, and I definitely understand the reasoning behind it.

                      Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

                      #178106
                      Keilah H.
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                        @evelyn-collins was just reading the latest bit of your story!

                        tbh I love how you wrote Leo being annoyed at the bird flying outside her window lol

                        Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

                        #178107
                        Keilah H.
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                          she most definitely got that from her dad, ha

                          Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

                          #178108
                          Evelyn collins
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                            for real. idk why, but I just needed to write that. the hate of the avian creatures is hereditary.

                            "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

                            #178109
                            Keilah H.
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                              @evelyn-collins it’s in the same genes that control the gray hair and sniper eyes XD

                               

                              seriously though, I do a lot of things like my dad, and my mom says it really is in our blood since he and I have the same blood type

                              Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

                              #178671
                              Keilah H.
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                                @evelyn-collins oooh I just read what you wrote recently! The plot is thickening lol

                                Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

                                #178672
                                Evelyn collins
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                                  Thx!!! I’m actually super stuck rn 😅

                                  "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

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