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    Evelyn collins
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      Ur good 😁!! Just moving forwards as always!

      "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

      #177251
      Evelyn collins
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        just moving forward as always, plus I am still soooo lost on how imma write the Hemlock scene

        "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

        #177260
        Keilah H.
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          @evelyn-collins all righty!

          Ideas (You can take or leave any of them):

          • Leo awakes imprisoned on a starship in hyperspace, Crosshair guarding her. She is going to confront him, but he’s called away before she can really get anything out of him, or some other stormtroopers take her away or something. They take her on an Imperial shuttle to Tantiss. (Maybe that’s the first time she sees him helmetless)
          • When they get there, Hemlock is waiting to greet her. When she asks who he is and what she’s doing here, he says she’s where she belongs and he’s been looking for her for a long time. She wonders if he’s her father, and at some point (probably not straight off the bat) asks him. He probably tells the truth for once and tells her no, but her dad is important to the Empire.
          • He begins training her, but soon proves he’s just as harsh as Varian (probably worse). Probably also runs some experiments on her, but doesn’t tell her that’s what they are.

          Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

          #177267
          Keilah H.
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            Some more ideas:

            • Leo comes across Emerie once or twice. They don’t interact much, but Leo tires something daring and probably dumb, and Emerie warns her not to get on Hemlock’s bad side. Or, maybe she’s the one who Leo asks if Hemlock’s her dad, which she obviously answers no to.
            • Crosshair shows up to Tantiss in much the same way he does in the show. Leo freaks out at first, but realizes he’s effectively imprisoned, and she becomes more curious about it than anything else.
            • Perhaps she overhears a conversation between Cross and Hemlock that makes her wonder about whether she’s more connected to Crosshair than she thought.

             

             

            I don’t have any other ideas right now….My brain is too busy being obsessive over how good this one character’s accent sounds when he sings.

            • This reply was modified 8 months, 3 weeks ago by Keilah H..

            Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

            #177320
            Keilah H.
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              also there is a plotting forum if you want to get ideas from more than just me.

              Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

              #177329
              Keilah H.
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                @evelyn-collins ooh, another idea I had….

                Maybe this last flashback was a dream? And when she’s dreaming about it, something happens that didn’t happen when she actually did it. She wakes up and wonders why her brain went to that when it clearly didn’t happen in her memories, then realized it was a dream. That sets up her being on the Imperial ship.

                Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

                #177330
                Evelyn collins
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                  Ooooo!!!! Maybe she sees Crosshair in the black armor and is like “🫥 wut theh kriff?”

                  "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

                  #177331
                  Keilah H.
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                    @evelyn-collins yeahh that makes a lot of sense!

                    Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

                    #177332
                    Keilah H.
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                      She hears him talking to her, and that’s what wakes her up, and she realizes he was actually talking to her, and that might set up whatever you want to do afterwards

                      Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

                      #177333
                      Keilah H.
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                        (I’m playing Minecraft right now, and I just realized that the character model I’m using, I made to look like Crosshair lol)

                        Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

                        #177334
                        Evelyn collins
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                          YO!!!!

                          "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

                          #177335
                          Keilah H.
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                            lol yeah

                            I totally forgot until I looked at him again

                            Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

                            #177337
                            Keilah H.
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                              He’s just there, in his shiny iron armor and golden boots, holding a diamond pickaxe and a shield XD

                              Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

                              #177338
                              Evelyn collins
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                                Noice!!

                                "Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"

                                #177339
                                Keilah H.
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                                  Seriously though, my brother and I, when we’re making up stories for our Lego minifigures, when they’re playing Minecraft in the story, Crosshair’s always the guy who always strives for the most overpowered armor and weapons possible.

                                   

                                   

                                   

                                  why do we make the Bad Batch play Minecraft in their free time? I don’t really know……

                                  Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

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