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November 20, 2015 at 12:52 pm #7565
Anna: “Well, I guess that’s fairly cool.” *rests hand lightly on pistol and looks at ghost* “So we just need to row this boat across the swamp?”
INTJ - Inhumane. No-feelings. Terrible. Judgment and doom on everyone.
November 20, 2015 at 1:03 pm #7566Quinn: *steps in slowly* I hope the hull is sturdy enough to hold up to all those snags.
November 20, 2015 at 1:10 pm #7567Rameaux: “Quinn, you have experience with boats, take this oar. I’ll take the other and if I cause us to go to far to the right, I can simply correct it by going to far to the left.
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November 20, 2015 at 1:27 pm #7568Quinn: Right. *takes the other oar* *hands compass to Anna* Hold this and make sure we keep on course, please.
November 20, 2015 at 1:36 pm #7569All characters in the boat, they set off.
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November 20, 2015 at 3:03 pm #7570Arianwen: *grips side of boat, leans over and touches water with fingertips.* *jerks hand back with sharp cry* “The water is scalding!”
November 20, 2015 at 3:22 pm #7573Tolkien:
“The water is scalding
The water will freeze
The water will eat you
So stay away please”*Stands up and backs to then end of boat* “Survive if you can!” *Suddenly transforms into an ugly hag and leap over board.*
Rameaux: “The witch!” *Rises and fires. He hits. The hag screams and then vanishes into the water and never comes up. Incidentally, Rameaux looses his balance and falls into the water. He struggles to the surface and takes a deep breath. A huge black slithery form is perceived snaking through the reeking filth of liquid directly towards him.*
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November 20, 2015 at 3:28 pm #7574Arianwen: *catches breath sharply, half rises in seat and draws sword over her shoulder, sends it flying end over end through the air* *it lands in water with splash and sticks* *tentacles lash, something roars, then tentacles disappear in bubbling water with gurgling sound* *Arianwen reaches over side of boat, extends hand to Rameaux* “Haste, my lord! Haste, before you are boiled alive!”
November 20, 2015 at 4:13 pm #7575Rameaux: *Takes hand and climbs eagerly back into canoe. Groans in pain but sits down and takes it.* “My powder is ruined. I am down to a dagger.”
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November 20, 2015 at 4:15 pm #7576Anna: “I knew that wasn’t Tolkien!” *furrows brow and looks at Rameaux* “Are you alright? I have some painkillers if you need them.”
INTJ - Inhumane. No-feelings. Terrible. Judgment and doom on everyone.
November 20, 2015 at 4:17 pm #7577Arianwen: *horrified* “You have what?!”
November 20, 2015 at 4:47 pm #7578Rameaux: Thank you, but I’m close enough killed already and pained for sure. It will heal though.
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November 20, 2015 at 4:48 pm #7579Quinn: I pray we run into no more of her evil sort. *watches the edges of the swamp* that serpent wasn’t the only one… *pulls oar out of the water as a dragon-like thing snaps at it, tearing a bit of the wood off* I’m beginning to think land might be a better bet. Everyone keep your weapons near.
*water stirs with shining scales again*November 20, 2015 at 4:56 pm #7580Rameaux: *Watching scaly creature warily and poising dagger* “If we can find land. Are we still headed in the same direction?”
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November 20, 2015 at 5:09 pm #7582Quinn: *tips head to look at compass* we’ve drifted a little bit more north, but not to far off. I’d go for that shore, to the west, though. It’s more clear and we could get back on course from …
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