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December 14, 2022 at 6:33 pm #124493
You’re fine. XD
I understand. There’s a few things I haven’t talked about much as I’m still figuring them out.
Like Vulka’s character arc. *Sigh*
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Fork the GorkDecember 14, 2022 at 6:40 pm #124499@koshka Vulk giving u some trouble there?
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#ProtectSebDecember 14, 2022 at 6:41 pm #124500@godlyfantasy12 @lightoverdarkness6
Thanks so much for the suggestions! So here’s what I’ve decided to do:
Russian soldier invade a large city close to them. At first there isn’t much change in their smaller town, but after a few days they start to see the effects (propaganda on the news, no Ukrainian news agencies being targeted and not allowed to operate, very spotty internet connections, no heat or hot water in their apartment, explosions around them, and threats and uncertainties about the future). They decide to leave after a few days. To escape they have to go through Russian checkpoints, and some fighting. I might also make some of the family stay behind because of their jobs…
I’ll stop so I don’t spoil anything else, but thank you girls for helping me sort this out! š
I think a lot of us as writers forget to think about the fact thatā¦uhhā¦weĀ areĀ the writers XD, and if itās not enjoyableā¦we wonāt want to write it, so while yes we do have to think about our future readers, we must also think of ourselves and what we want to do.
This is so true!!
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December 14, 2022 at 6:44 pm #124502Yes! I think that may be a 4King and Country song!! I LOVE 4King and Country! Whatās your favorite song from them??
My favorite song is Cheering You On. What about you?
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December 14, 2022 at 6:48 pm #124505Thats great!! Love it! Iām so glad we could help š.
I think Iāve heard of that one. It sounds good! My favorite is Burn the Ships or Fight on Fighter. š
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December 14, 2022 at 7:03 pm #124506@felicity that sounds great!!!
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#ProtectSebDecember 14, 2022 at 7:22 pm #124511@mineralizedwritings @godlyfantasy12 @felicity @koshka @elishavet-pidyon @esther-c @any-one-else
Sooo, my plot hole!! Yay! *Grins nervously*
So, in my new book, There’s two siblings. 13 year old Asher and 16 year old Iris. The story opens with them living at a foster home/orphanage/something like that. And they hate it. Especially Asher. Then they find out that they have an aunt who wants to adopt them! They go to live with the aunt, and she lives out in the country in a little neighborhood of 5 or so houses. She is kind to them…but she is away a lot, doing things and shopping. (I might have her be doing something else…something mysterious. But for now, I think she’s just shopping.) The siblings are thrown into public school, and Iris does well. Mean while, Asher is bullied. A lot. He runs away from home several times. Iris always drags him back. This is going to be when I really get to show their personalities and their relationship. School gets better for Asher, following the advice from his sister. He even makes a new friend or two! But then one day, Iris is home making dinner. It had been getting dark, and Asher still hadn’t gotten home from his friend’s house down the street. And he always gets home before dark. And their aunt hasn’t gotten home yet either. As soon as Iris finishes dinner, she jumps into her car and drives to Asher’s friend’s house. The hadn’t seen him since school. Panicked, Iris goes home and tries to call her aunt. No answer. But the second time, someone answers…and it’s not her aunt’s voice. The man tells her that if she ever wants to see her brother again, she must come to the place that he gives her directions to.
(And maybe bring something? Idk.)
Okay, so that’s the outline. Sorry that was really scattered XD. What you guys think? Oh, and their parents aren’t dead!! The part I’m struggling with is why the villain captured Asher. They just think that. I think the villain captured Asher for leverage for Iris to do something or give him something. But what? I don’t want it to be fantasy, though. I’m better at writing contemporary fiction. So it can’t be like a crown that whoever has it becomes king or some such. And money seems just too cliche. Sooo, any ideas? And i’m open to suggestions about the main plot and ideas, etc. Thank you!!
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December 14, 2022 at 7:22 pm #124512My own research? Who, me? *Dramatically points to myself*
Yes you, Š“Š¾ŃŠ¾Š³Š¾Š¹ Š“ŃŃŠ³! š
Heheheā¦Iām supposed to be writing fantasyā¦they said I didnāt need a lot of real life knowledgeā¦ *Hides stack of books behind my back*
*Laughs smugly* well since you’re just writing fantasy, and don’t have ANY research to do, you have LOTS of time to research stuff for ME. Mwahahahaha!!! *suddenly remembers when I was writing fantasy last year and spent hours researching an herb that would draw poison from a wound*
I actually don’t have anything specific to research right now, since I usually do my detailed research when I get to that part in the story, but I’ll keep your offer in mind. š
Seriously though, digging around in stuff is one of my all time favorite pastimes.
If you want some stuff to dig around in…
A first hand resource I have found helpful is the YouTube channel DaryanaVlogs. She is a Ukrainian girl who started a channel last year because she wanted to make money to support her Mom who has some health issues. Recently they had to flee Ukraine because of the dangers. She is a Christian, she plays piano and writes songs, and does some drawing. Watching her short, down to earth videos gave me a real sense for the personal feelings behind what’s happening. So if you want to check her out you can. She also has a small music channel called Daryana Alice MUSIC. I really appreciate her sincerity and sweet personality.
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December 14, 2022 at 7:47 pm #124513I think Iāve heard of that one. It sounds good! My favorite is Burn the Ships or Fight on Fighter. š
Oh those two are good! My sister and I made up a rendition of Fight on Fighter that went:
“Write on, writer…etc. ”
We weren’t sure if it would make sense with the rest of the lyrics, but I sing it sometimes anyway. š
About your story!!!!
It’s a very creative and gripping plot, and I like the mysterious aunt dynamic (who’s currently just shopping).
Does Iris have any special talents? (not magic) Like knowledge/education of something that could be valuable to the villain? Maybe she knows the way to someplace that they’re trying to get to.
Wow. I see why you’re having trouble with this. It’s hard!
Is her aunt or her parents connected with the villain?
Maybe you could make the “villain” be her dad. Maybe they heard bad rumors about their parents and are afraid of being found by them. But the rumors weren’t true. Her dad knows if he just shows up they’ll run away, so he disguises himself, “captures” Asher, and tries to get Iris to come meet him.
Those are my random thoughts!
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December 14, 2022 at 7:48 pm #124514Also, I won’t be able to RP til later tomorrow afternoon. I’m going to the Nutcracker play tomorrow morning!! But y’all can go ahead and RP, I’ll try to respond as soon as I can! Talk to y’all later š! Good night!
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December 14, 2022 at 7:57 pm #124517Oh, good tips(ideas! Thank you! I only saw a few things, bc Iām brushing my little brotherās teeth for bed š.Ā Iām Iāll finish reading it tomorrow š. Thank you again!!
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December 14, 2022 at 8:05 pm #124518Ok! Oh fun! Enjoy the nutcracker play!!!!
Oh, good tips(ideas! Thank you! I only saw a few things, bc Iām brushing my little brotherās teeth for bed š. Iām Iāll finish reading it tomorrow š. Thank you again!!
Your welcome! Glad to do it. Oh sweet!! My little brother just turned 14. šĀ I can’t imagine him letting me brush his teeth…šš
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December 14, 2022 at 10:22 pm #124526Oooh!! Okay so Iām not sure how much advice I can giveā¦.
Butā¦if u havenāt read a series of unfortunate eventsā¦.honestly it kinda reminds me of this!!! Itās not fantasy butā¦it also has thatā¦idk how to explain itā¦like another world feel because the places are fictional, butā¦ ahh itās just so great.
Itās a bit grim but more comedically grim and itās about three orphan siblings whose parents were killed suddenly in a fire. They drift from home to home, chased by a man named count Olaf because of their fortuneā¦.
Thats honestly all I can sayā¦itās justā¦so good! Itās a long series, but the books start out small, getting bigger as they go.
And if u donāt want to read the series maybe just look into them? Idk they just seem like they might be helpful for ur own work (;
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#ProtectSebDecember 14, 2022 at 10:26 pm #124527@koshka @elishavet-pidyon @felicity @mineralizedwritings @serafini
anyone on?
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#ProtectSebDecember 14, 2022 at 11:01 pm #124530ŠŃ ! Š”ŠµŃŃŃŠ°, you don’t know how happy you made me, seeing Cyrillic in a conversation. Or rather you probably do, you being a language learner yourself… *Happy sigh*
I think practically any writing takes some form of research.
I shall definitely have to check her out. Most of what I know of what’s going on I’ve heard from a missionary family my Mom knows.
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