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That story was so good, I read to my mom. She laughed and said āsounds like its from half-experienceā
Thank you! Lol, I’ve never exploded a microwave myself, but once at co-op, someone microwaved his hotdog for 4 minutes, the microwave broke and started smoking, we all evacuated, and the fire department showed up.
I, for one, really like Roman numerals.
Okay. I think I have time today to finish up here and get stuff posted for y’all. If it’s not posted tonight IĀ will (lord willing) get it posted tomorrow morning.
First Grand Historian of Arreth and the Lesser Realms (aka Kitty)
Fork the GorkWelp, I didn’t get it all typed up and posted before work, so here it is a few more hours late.
Good gravy, it was hard to pick. I probably spent way too long staring at them all till Iād forgotten all my first impressions.
A very interesting scene and character. The whole room oozed creepiness, which reflected the storyās feel beautifully. Your grammar and style has a flowered tone, which makes me feel like Iām listening to a harold when I read your writing. It makes reading your work very amusing to me. I enjoyed it. Is this a villain from your WIPs, or something you came up with here? I feel sorry for the maid that has to deal with that woman.
You used a straightforward voice here without many fancy words. It gives the character a solid feel and helped me feel like I understood him and he wasnāt trying to lie to me. It felt more like a character sketch than regular flash fiction. (Also, the name Lord Quackers cracks me up everytime I read it. Congratulations. It’s great.)
I feel sorry for Ignatius, but also, wow, all her cookies? May I aspire to be as generous.
Your descriptions are vivid and clear. The abnormalities of the characters don’t feel big/unreal when in story. A kid fireball? Why of course! It was very enjoyable. I sympathize with Ignatius and his sister.
Oh gracious. That microwave is very much totaled. I remember doing some stuff growing up for the āname of scienceā but it was mostly just seeing if hand soap or toothpaste cleaned the bathroom counter better.
The overall tone sounds like a kid writing their own autobiography with all the dramatic flare they can think to add. Iād guess the character is quite a handful. It was a lot of fun to read.
Random, but I do like the name Percival. It just has this snide, offhanded smirk that is very character-ish.
Are they brothers, or did something happen to Damienās brother? Because now Iām wondering. I liked how you introduced the scene and then let parts of the back story unfold itself in the characterās actions and thoughts. Iām intrigued by how they got to this point of daily dueling.
Alrighty, Iām going to throw a 1st place ribbon at Whaley and say she’s now flash fiction judge for the next round (or she can elect someone else if she needs to).
I think second place goes to Rae with the very creepy setting, and third to Ducky and the story that made me laugh the hardest.
And everyone gets raspberry chocolate cake and ice cream because you made it really hard to decide anything. So congratulations. You’re all amazing.
First Grand Historian of Arreth and the Lesser Realms (aka Kitty)
Fork the GorkRandom, but I do like the name Percival. It just has this snide, offhanded smirk that is very character-ish.
Lol didnāt realize that but glad that someone recognized could get that from there.
Are they brothers, or did something happen to Damienās brother? Because now Iām wondering.
No, theyāre not related. Althoughā¦ that sounds really interesting. Iām still figuring out their relationship because theyāre both from a WIP, and Damian and Percival are rivals who hate each other (donāt know why yet). Also, did I mention Damian having a brother, because Iām a little confused. He doesnāt have one, so that might be my bad for conveying that. Anyway thank you!!
āOur house is full of ducks!!!!ā
Ah no, I meant Percival’s brother. Or, I think you said that his “brother fights better” than him.
First Grand Historian of Arreth and the Lesser Realms (aka Kitty)
Fork the GorkOhh, okay that makes so much more sense now. Percival has an older brother, Emmerich, who does fight well and is generally considered a ābetterā knight than Percival because he is a better swordsman and adheres more to chivalry than his brother.
āOur house is full of ducks!!!!ā
I remember doing some stuff growing up for the āname of scienceā but it was mostly just seeing if hand soap or toothpaste cleaned the bathroom counter better.
My siblings and I tested the slipperiness of banana peels once, but we’ve never caught anything on fire either.
The overall tone sounds like a kid writing their own autobiography with all the dramatic flare they can think to add.
She’s from one of my WIPs, and that’s exactly what it is. šHer autobiography.
Ā Iād guess the character is quite a handful.
Goodness, yes. XD
It was a lot of fun to read.
Thank you!
Congratulations!
I, for one, really like Roman numerals.
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