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Wait a sec, I had a bedtime RP ready –
But thanks Godly for the attention – writing these is my reward for finishing my new stressful schedule every day!
– Two Hours Later –
Sebastian
Seb was a simple man, with simple needs.
And those included snuggling up in a blanket, watching silent black and white films, eating three gallons of ice cream, and crying.
He was good at predicting what was good for him.
The door creaked open, shoving back a few paper bags, and Marcel – wearing a large pink t-shirt and pink shorts, on monochromatic overload – pushed into the black room. A few bandages dangled loosely from his forehead, and as he leaned to one side, his shirt shifted, revealing a cloth-wrapped chest underneath.
Seb probably looked like a dazed, sleepy mess, mouth smeared with chocolate ice cream, knees tucked under his chin in a little ball, staring at a tiny box television. Gray light blazed into his eyes, but couldn’t film over their swirly gold and pink tint.
As if to affirm Seb’s hazy image, Marcel picked up the paper bags and approached. “You’re tipsy on sugar.”
Sebastian hiccuped, and shoved his face into the carton. “Don’t judge me.”
Marcel didn’t. Instead, he fell back on the bed with a spring of coils, and squinted at the screen. “What is this?”
“The Adventures of a Soda Fountain Entrepreneur.” Seb slurred, pointing at a fuzzy white figure in a huge cap, pouring drinks. “That’s the entrepreneur, if you couldn’t tell. The actor was a distant relation… I forget.”
“I can see the family resemblance.”
Everyone else, since curfew hadn’t struck yet, was out in the common room, socializing, or still coming back from the infirmary. It wouldn’t be long before they were sent to bed – and a bunch of loud boys would crash their way in. They might complain about the purple stains on the floor from the unicorn gelato. But Seb didn’t care.
The machine gun had helped a little. But life still sucked.
They watched the silent shenanigans for a while, until the chocolate had completely gone to Seb’s head, and he could barely blink his eyes open from the sweetness…
Marcel
Sebastian had obviously been upset about something – before drowning his woes in ice cream and syrup – but whatever it had been, it was too late to ask.
The ten-year-old arsonist was now laying on his side, slippered feet dangling off the edge. His fluffy blond hair stuck in one direction, and drool glistened on the sleeve of his one-piece pajamas.
Marcel opened the paper bags, which turned out to be from the thai restaurant down the street. He ended up with crossed legs, floating comfortably with a pillow on his lap, slurping spicy noodles out of a bowl. His wings – the ones that weren’t twisted – had shrunk to miniature, curled into little patterns laced along his elbows and cheeks.
Every once in a while, the pain would erupt again, and he would hiss softly between his teeth and rub his shoulder blades.
Although the infirmary had helped, the burning sensation from that mysterious visitor remained. It had fell into a dull ache, and no matter how many ice packs Marcel went through, it never went away.
At least he had been set free from school classes tomorrow, due to his injuries. He could do whatever he wanted, and go where ever he wanted. As long as Cal knew where he was, anyway.
The movie wasn’t too bad.
After it was finished, Marcel flipped on the light switch for a minute, to discover both Sebastian and Paxton were asleep on their respective beds. Pax had not let out a peep, and looked like he had snoozed through the entire movie. He may have not even known it was playing.
Out the window, the sky was deepening into a pinkish purple, and in the distance, city lights twinkled without fail.
And within a few short minutes, sweet dreams prevailed.
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Weeeel, @whalekeeper it looks like you didn’t read the last paragraph of my RP… but we’ll smooth it over.
Calligripho
All was quite in the boys’ wing. Peaceful, restful. Perfectly mooded for the Royal Scribe’s errand of mercy.
The small, skinny, bookish boy of about twelve quietly opened the dorm door and slipped in. He adjusted his thick glasses, crept over to the bunk he wanted, and softly pressed a pink jewel into the palm of the sleeping Marcel, and exited, as the soft hum of healing filled the room.
Inscribed on the magic healer were these words:
I heal but one, I heal him slow
Before again he forth can go.
The worse the hurt, the longer to heal
Before another my power can feel.
“It is done, Master Alchemo.”
“Many thanks, Royal Scribe Calligripho. Now, get some rest. I think you will need it, if my brother stays predictable as always. Brian is already asleep in the empty dorm. Good night, and may the Most High keep you.”
“May the Most High keep you. Good night.”
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Yes, I totally just made up the word “mooded”. It totally should be a word.
Uh Idk about Finn, (doesn’t freedom have a finn?) I have a Flax somewhere in there but he got kinda lost with the chaos 😅
"And so I left this world just as I had entered it. Confused."
Dude your writing is just so unique, like the whole image of Marcel and Seb is so clear in my mind 😂 I can’t get enough of your descriptions lol
"And so I left this world just as I had entered it. Confused."
My apologies. Perhaps Seb warped away before Katonia could say anything? I’ll say that was his canon response. And thank you for the healing jewel. 😉
We have Paxton, Fynn (I hope I spelled it right XD), Wolfie, Flax, Marc, Seb, and… Lucas! That’s who we forgot.
And I’ll leave starting the next day to you, our valiant co-leader ❤
I am so happy you like them!! ❤ That means a lot to me, because I remember at some point you critiqued my writing, and I was a little self-conscious about the whole thing. So I decided to do better. Thank you for that little push, Min! (And if you have more advice relating to my writing, do not hesitate to wound my pride.)
Also, about seeing Marcel and Seb. I just recently got an art tablet, and I’m working on a colored sketch of Marcel right now. So I’ll share that soon! If I can figure out how…
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@whalekeeper No problem. A note: my RP’s are generally packed with little hints, references to my main story, and foreshadowing. Look at my last RP, and you’ll find two new characters introduced. Also, I revealed the name, title, and job description of the boy who gave the magic healing stone.
@anyone I would be curious as to your feedback on the writing style my RP. How easy is it to read? Does inspecting it closely make it more interesting, or more boring? I’m curious because my little brother said he literally fell asleep from trying to read my story, and I want to know if a change of writing style is in order.
I am so happy you like them!! ❤ That means a lot to me, because I remember at some point you critiqued my writing, and I was a little self-conscious about the whole thing. So I decided to do better. Thank you for that little push, Min! (And if you have more advice relating to my writing, do not hesitate to wound my pride.)
Yw! <33
Lol sorry it made you self conscious! As I remember it was a critique on the morals, not the writing style. I’ve always thought your descriptions/writing style were great since I first met you!
Also, about seeing Marcel and Seb. I just recently got an art tablet, and I’m working on a colored sketch of Marcel right now. So I’ll share that soon! If I can figure out how…
Oh I can’t wait to see it!!
"And so I left this world just as I had entered it. Confused."
Yep, I noticed 😉 I do that with my RPs most of the rime, even if it isn’t noticeable at all XD I’ve even used a specific metaphor which relates to one character’s canon death, which nO OnE KnOwS AbOuT. Just goes to show what you can sneak in for personal pleasure only.
As for your writing style… honestly, a lot of the time it’s just the reader’s personal preference. You have a style similar to… maybe Lemony Snicket? Like, just a tiny touch. With a similar treatment of characters and dialogue. I don’t know how to describe the technique, but I know it’s a distinctive, often amusing type of writing, that I’ve seen a lot of children’s mystery writers using!
The only thing I might suggest trying is to slow down a little. Explore the senses and emotions. Sometimes those are the best parts of a scene to write. It’s similar to the concept “flesh out what you already know.” But that’s how I think through scenes, and every writer writes differently, so don’t take that as the better approach. 😊
Yeah, that was it. All I needed was the one critique, and I automatically wanted to improve everything 😂❤
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I’m the one with Fynn in the dorm room. I just haven’t done any RPs for a while. XD
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Wow, y’all…this chat exploded 😂😂
and yes, I’m good with moving on to the next day…in fact, I’m ready for it.
I think I’ll give Wolfie a day to recover tho…heh, poor boi needs a day to recover (Wolfgang will just have a day off like Marcel, that’s all…he’ll still be around)
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Oooh, time for some brother pranks lol. And after this I’m good with moving on.
Crosshair
Magic phasing rock…..
Cool.
He’d only just gotten the hang of it by the time the fight was over. Such a shame.
But at least he could use it for pranking.
Tech
He walked down the hallway, noticing feathers, bits of fabric, and the occasional blood splatter.
What…happened here?
A low snicker from the corner made him turn around.
There was no one there…..who could’ve–
Crosshair’s head appeared from the wall–just his head. “Hey, Tech!”
Tech practically leaped through the ceiling.
“Don’t do that!” he screeched. Crosshair only laughed.
“You’ll be seeing more of that.” he said. “This class is great! Even though I didn’t get to train much before the fight broke out.”
“Fight?” Tech asked, looking around. Now here was an explanation of the carnage around him.
“Yeah. People all over the place.” Crosshair flicked his tail as he fully phased out of the wall.. “Hunter was there too, but he flew off somewhere. He’s probably back at his dorm now.”
“Does he have a magic rock too?” Tech asked, hoping Hunter wouldn’t appear out of the wall somewhere and startle him again.
“Uh, no. ” Crosshair shook his head. “I only have the one, and there’s no way I’m letting him have it.”
Tech assumed that extended to him and the others, too.
He turned and walked down the hallway. “Well, I’ll be in our dorm if you need me. It’s getting late.”
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@whalekeeper thanks for the tips! I’m not a very emotional person, so that sounds like a good area for me to improve in my writing.
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Where did everybody go? Is anyone going to take the initiative to start the new day, or do I have to? (I would like to, btw, if no one else wants to. I’ll keep it low-key, too)
@calyhuge IDK I usually wait until other people start, I’m not that great at starting myself.
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HEY EVERYONE! I HAVE AN ANNOUNCEMENT! I had a bit of a realization (epiphany? Idk… XD) about these RPs and my characters today (tonight lol) sooo yea 😂
From this moment on (until I change it) I am going to be placing a minimum number of my main characters into RPs. Minimum as in only 1-2 (only one if I can keep it like that)
The reason for this is
1. This makes RPing a lot less stressful and a lot more fun! When you have just one character you really love, in one RP they’re really connected in then it makes things so much more enjoyable then jumping for person to person in an RP
2. This will help me work on character’s individual voices, because many times when I make RPs I rush them because I’m just trying to get back to another character or RP because “I have to”
(And some of this will depend on the RP. Since this is an AU it’s easier to do this)
SO! That being said…
I will be removing ALL CHARACTERS from this RP EXCEPT Paxton.
(And obviously his fam XD)
So yea, I just wanted to give that heads up. Doesn’t change much rn buuut it might later.
The Character Castle However is a bit different, and I won’t be changing anything there rn.
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