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@elishavet-pidyon Thank you! Thank you! Thank you!
I have a hard time not making my villains “stereotypical” that’s why I wanted to add this whole twist with Maddock. Oh! Natan in the Promise of Zion series sounds kind of like what I want to aim for with Maddock now (Yes I did just switch directions with where I take him….) Conflicted but still kind of an antagonist? IDK. I just came up with this story today so there are still quite a few loose strings to tie up, but y’all’s answers have been so helpful!!
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@queen_of_alvastia yes it is Paxtonās mom! HerĀ name is Lilith.
Also, I highly suggest a book called Save The Cat Writes a Novel (just maybe skip over some of the examples from books, depending on what ur comfortable reading) but itās extremely helpful with character arcs, and I believe it would help you a lot!
I honestly think making Maddock the MC is the way to go, unless the other person HAS more to say and a better view in the story. But if he doesnāt, then Maddock is the better choice.
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That could be an amazing story.
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Thank you! I can’t wait to write it sometime in the near future…. XD
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OH! And writing a MC who is also their own antagonist is actually…quite fun. I would recommend you keep Maddock as your MC, and have a terrible character who doesn’t end well for a second foil, using Moddock’s brother as your first. That way your MC would end up in the center of the foil.
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@koshka I really wanted to keep Maddock but just wasn’t sure it would work! I am soo making him the main MC now!!
Poor Maddock….center of the foil….
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@koshka. @godlyfantasy12. @elishavet-pidyon. Y’all have such good advice! Gonna keep that in mind for my story’s too! XD
@godlyfantasy12. NO!!! NOOOO WHY!? *hugs Paxton tight* Us Writers are so cruel. XDWelcome!!!
Ugh, I struggle with stereotypical villains too. As of right now, my villain, Ocran, is a…
Wait a moment…
*Thundering brainstorm rolls overhead*
ONE IF MY THEMES IS BATTLING BITTERNESS!!!
Anyway, a long story short, Ocran lets bitterness and fear of the enemy warp himself. (And I really need to work on it a lot more, but whatever.)
Natan is a very interesting character. A death camp survivor, actually, so in a way he is a lot like Maddock. Looking back, I would have really enjoyed a book about Natan specifically, so doing that with your character sounds awesome!
I can’t wait to see where you take this story!
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Poor, sweet Paxton! Ahhhhhhhh!
Does he survive the books? Or do I not want to know?
*Sniffle*
You have listened to fears, child. Come, let me breathe on you... Are you brave again? -Aslan
I know! Villains can be very tricky!! XD
Oh Ocran sounds like an interesting character! Ah that’s such a powerful theme!!
What is the general plot of your story?
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@elishavet-pidyon @freedomwriter76 donāt worry my dears he does survive! In fact he gains an incredible family š
So, for the rest of his childhood.
Because ofā¦well everything previously mentioned, you already know that heās abused by his mother, this is mostly verbally and mentally, and itās extreme. Heās also bullied by his brothers, and this is mostly where the physical abuse comes from (though a slap from his mother wouldnāt be a surprise at all)
heās also treated badly by the rest of the Fae as well, because Lilith is in high standing, and so they watch over him (in a āWeāre guarding you because youāre our sacrifice. Donāt get out of line.ā Way.
Lilith has the Fae Guard under her thumb (or so she thinks anyway. Sheās uh actually being played by her first husbandās former second in command who is now Head of the Guard) Itās like a Lion King, Scar situation. That guy is literally just like Scar (personality wise. The cartoon scar)
Also, with his mother being a Siren, (again Iām working out the details, but Iām thinking that Lilith canāt really ācontrolā people, cuz thatās too much power and justā¦leaves too many things to try and figure out for me, so itās more she can kinda āconvinceā and manipulate. Though there are some Sirens who can control. It all just depends on their ability and power)
Using this ability, she actually forces Paxton to fall asleep as a young baby.
Including the time when he finds the mural as a toddler that depicts his āsacrificeā. And any other time he ends up in a place his mother doesnāt want him.
She just has to whisper or sing to him, lulling him to sleep, and heās out like a light.
(ughā¦itās literally soā¦messed up.)
And she has the Guard try and guard him at all times.
She doesnāt want him in certain places, or learning certain things, so heās usually kept in his room, and when heās not heās either watched or heās escape and is constantly afraid of being found and āpunished.ā
And of course, his brothers are older then him, and scary. And everyone has wings, and he doesnāt. (And he has phantom pains even tho he doesnāt have the wingsā¦and he stutters) I know I just keep torturing him, but it all ends well for him in this same book so donāt worry friends!!
Yeaā¦
Other questions!! His hobbies! This is a great question because at first I was like āhmm, I donāt really think he has any.ā
He honestly is tĀ ableĀ to get out much, orĀ doĀ anything.
But thinking about it, I now realize, if he could, heād really enjoy reading.
Heās not allowed in the library, due to his mother, but he sneaks in there anyway. This being said, heās unable to read the books joyfully though, because he lives in constant fear of being discovered.
Plus most of the books he reads is to discover if thereās any other way to get out of the whole āsacrifice thingā which his mother quickly tells him āThereās not.ā
But there are some occasions where he picks up a book for pleasure and becomes lost in it (which usually ends badly for him because he doesnāt hear someone coming to the library, and he gets caught) but yea, he enjoys reading.
Thinking about it, I also think heād enjoy sketching and singing.
Heād be by himself a lot, so I think heād need something to do while by himself, and I think it would be something that fits his personality. Heās so sensitive and shy, I think he would sketch, but I think he wouldnāt do it on paper.
I think heād be afraid of it being discovered, so heād draw lines into the carpet, or paint on the back of his curtains. Maybe draw on top of his arms, where itās covered by his sleeves, and heād find different ways to do it.
Heād use it to communicate with himself. Drawing in the snow. In the sand. Etc. (oh manā¦Iām coming up with this as I am writing and Iā¦I love it. š„¹š)
And singingā¦heād be just a little boy, singing lullabies to himself, because he has no one to sing to him.
And if they do sing, they arenāt happy. Theyāre dreadful songs of pain from his mother.
So he sings softly to himself.
And once he opens up, he might even sing to others. And being a siren, his songs can uplift and encourage those who listen.
my sweet babyā¦.
As for his Lie?
Well, Paxton is actually a lot like November in his lie. He believes heās worthless and unlovable. He doesnāt see why anyone would ever be willing to love or save him. He believes his motherās words (at least eventually) that his only reason for living is to die. And not only to die, but to die so thatĀ othersĀ will also die.
He was born a shame to his family; what could he possibly do in this world? AndĀ whoĀ would possibly love him?
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@godlyfantasy12. NOOO!!! PAXTON!!!! šššš
Well, another character I need to protect. š
Ooh, sounds fun!
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