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@elishavet-pidyon Thank you! Thank you! Thank you!
I have a hard time not making my villains “stereotypical” that’s why I wanted to add this whole twist with Maddock. Oh! Natan in the Promise of Zion series sounds kind of like what I want to aim for with Maddock now (Yes I did just switch directions with where I take him….) Conflicted but still kind of an antagonist? IDK. I just came up with this story today so there are still quite a few loose strings to tie up, but y’all’s answers have been so helpful!!
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@queen_of_alvastia yes it is Paxton’s mom! Her name is Lilith.
Also, I highly suggest a book called Save The Cat Writes a Novel (just maybe skip over some of the examples from books, depending on what ur comfortable reading) but it’s extremely helpful with character arcs, and I believe it would help you a lot!
I honestly think making Maddock the MC is the way to go, unless the other person HAS more to say and a better view in the story. But if he doesn’t, then Maddock is the better choice.
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That could be an amazing story.
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Thank you! I can’t wait to write it sometime in the near future…. XD
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OH! And writing a MC who is also their own antagonist is actually…quite fun. I would recommend you keep Maddock as your MC, and have a terrible character who doesn’t end well for a second foil, using Moddock’s brother as your first. That way your MC would end up in the center of the foil.
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@koshka I really wanted to keep Maddock but just wasn’t sure it would work! I am soo making him the main MC now!!
Poor Maddock….center of the foil….
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@koshka. @godlyfantasy12. @elishavet-pidyon. Y’all have such good advice! Gonna keep that in mind for my story’s too! XD
@godlyfantasy12. NO!!! NOOOO WHY!? *hugs Paxton tight* Us Writers are so cruel. XDWelcome!!!
Ugh, I struggle with stereotypical villains too. As of right now, my villain, Ocran, is a…
Wait a moment…
*Thundering brainstorm rolls overhead*
ONE IF MY THEMES IS BATTLING BITTERNESS!!!
Anyway, a long story short, Ocran lets bitterness and fear of the enemy warp himself. (And I really need to work on it a lot more, but whatever.)
Natan is a very interesting character. A death camp survivor, actually, so in a way he is a lot like Maddock. Looking back, I would have really enjoyed a book about Natan specifically, so doing that with your character sounds awesome!
I can’t wait to see where you take this story!
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Poor, sweet Paxton! Ahhhhhhhh!
Does he survive the books? Or do I not want to know?
*Sniffle*
You have listened to fears, child. Come, let me breathe on you... Are you brave again? -Aslan
I know! Villains can be very tricky!! XD
Oh Ocran sounds like an interesting character! Ah that’s such a powerful theme!!
What is the general plot of your story?
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@elishavet-pidyon @freedomwriter76 don’t worry my dears he does survive! In fact he gains an incredible family ?
So, for the rest of his childhood.
Because of…well everything previously mentioned, you already know that he’s abused by his mother, this is mostly verbally and mentally, and it’s extreme. He’s also bullied by his brothers, and this is mostly where the physical abuse comes from (though a slap from his mother wouldn’t be a surprise at all)
he’s also treated badly by the rest of the Fae as well, because Lilith is in high standing, and so they watch over him (in a “We’re guarding you because you’re our sacrifice. Don’t get out of line.” Way.
Lilith has the Fae Guard under her thumb (or so she thinks anyway. She’s uh actually being played by her first husband’s former second in command who is now Head of the Guard) It’s like a Lion King, Scar situation. That guy is literally just like Scar (personality wise. The cartoon scar)
Also, with his mother being a Siren, (again I’m working out the details, but I’m thinking that Lilith can’t really “control” people, cuz that’s too much power and just…leaves too many things to try and figure out for me, so it’s more she can kinda “convince” and manipulate. Though there are some Sirens who can control. It all just depends on their ability and power)
Using this ability, she actually forces Paxton to fall asleep as a young baby.
Including the time when he finds the mural as a toddler that depicts his “sacrifice”. And any other time he ends up in a place his mother doesn’t want him.
She just has to whisper or sing to him, lulling him to sleep, and he’s out like a light.
(ugh…it’s literally so…messed up.)
And she has the Guard try and guard him at all times.
She doesn’t want him in certain places, or learning certain things, so he’s usually kept in his room, and when he’s not he’s either watched or he’s escape and is constantly afraid of being found and “punished.”
And of course, his brothers are older then him, and scary. And everyone has wings, and he doesn’t. (And he has phantom pains even tho he doesn’t have the wings…and he stutters) I know I just keep torturing him, but it all ends well for him in this same book so don’t worry friends!!
Yea…
Other questions!! His hobbies! This is a great question because at first I was like “hmm, I don’t really think he has any.”
He honestly is t able to get out much, or do anything.
But thinking about it, I now realize, if he could, he’d really enjoy reading.
He’s not allowed in the library, due to his mother, but he sneaks in there anyway. This being said, he’s unable to read the books joyfully though, because he lives in constant fear of being discovered.
Plus most of the books he reads is to discover if there’s any other way to get out of the whole “sacrifice thing” which his mother quickly tells him “There’s not.”
But there are some occasions where he picks up a book for pleasure and becomes lost in it (which usually ends badly for him because he doesn’t hear someone coming to the library, and he gets caught) but yea, he enjoys reading.
Thinking about it, I also think he’d enjoy sketching and singing.
He’d be by himself a lot, so I think he’d need something to do while by himself, and I think it would be something that fits his personality. He’s so sensitive and shy, I think he would sketch, but I think he wouldn’t do it on paper.
I think he’d be afraid of it being discovered, so he’d draw lines into the carpet, or paint on the back of his curtains. Maybe draw on top of his arms, where it’s covered by his sleeves, and he’d find different ways to do it.
He’d use it to communicate with himself. Drawing in the snow. In the sand. Etc. (oh man…I’m coming up with this as I am writing and I…I love it. ??)
And singing…he’d be just a little boy, singing lullabies to himself, because he has no one to sing to him.
And if they do sing, they aren’t happy. They’re dreadful songs of pain from his mother.
So he sings softly to himself.
And once he opens up, he might even sing to others. And being a siren, his songs can uplift and encourage those who listen.
my sweet baby….
As for his Lie?
Well, Paxton is actually a lot like November in his lie. He believes he’s worthless and unlovable. He doesn’t see why anyone would ever be willing to love or save him. He believes his mother’s words (at least eventually) that his only reason for living is to die. And not only to die, but to die so that others will also die.
He was born a shame to his family; what could he possibly do in this world? And who would possibly love him?
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@godlyfantasy12. NOOO!!! PAXTON!!!! ????
Well, another character I need to protect. ?
Ooh, sounds fun!
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@keilah-h. Yes, talking about characters is always fun. XD
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