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  • #107728
    Elishavet Elroi
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      “We spent yesterday up a tree. Literally. We had only been on the road for, maybe two hours, when we heard wolves. I pushed him (Smalden) up a tree and told him to climb for his life.”

      “There is absolutely no reason in the world that one cannot survive off what grows in these woods. Unless of course one happens to pick what’s poisonous, and then he will not survive very long. Or do what S did, and vomit.”

      “S. thinks it some great adventure, and maybe he’s right. Life most certainly is an adventure. Especially our life.”

      But the best thing in it is the sentence after each entry. Remember, it’s Misfortunate, right? šŸ˜‰

      ‘This entry survived for almost a week, when it was accidentally dropped in a kettle of stew, and rendered disgusting.’

      You have listened to fears, child. Come, let me breathe on you... Are you brave again? -Aslan

      #107741
      Trahia the Minstrel
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        @elishavet-pidyon

        I love your lines! And is it crazy that I also have a character whose nickname is Prince S?šŸ˜‚

        The end of a story, a beautiful picture; a feeling of longing yet hope~
        Thatā€™s my wish to create.

        #107744
        Elishavet Elroi
        @elishavet-pidyon
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          @trahia-the-minstrel

          Thank you!!!

          ItĀ is rather crazy.

          *Starting to wonder if I have a talent for accidental plagiarism or if this is just another mad coincidence.Ā  Then realises what the Hermit of the Southern March would say to that, and shuts mouth.*

          You have listened to fears, child. Come, let me breathe on you... Are you brave again? -Aslan

          #107752
          Trahia the Minstrel
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            @elishavet-pidyon

            The Hermit. Yes.šŸ˜‚ I love Horse and his Boy ā€¦

            I donā€™t think itā€™s plagiarism, though. Your story will be different to mine in a thousand other ways, so I donā€™t think it really matters if some of our names have similarities.

            The end of a story, a beautiful picture; a feeling of longing yet hope~
            Thatā€™s my wish to create.

            #107753
            Elishavet Elroi
            @elishavet-pidyon
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              @trahia-the-minstrel

              Yeah, it’s notĀ really plagiarism…. I just have a talent for unwittingly using names others have either used or used similar ones. The funniest thing, is that the names aren’t usually common. I make them up myself.

              Ah, that blissful book! There have been many times I’ve quoted the Hermit to myself….

               

              You have listened to fears, child. Come, let me breathe on you... Are you brave again? -Aslan

              #107756
              Koshka
              @koshka
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                @trahia-the-minstrel. @elishavet-pidyon

                The Horse and His Boy is my favorite Narnia book! That and the end of The Last Battle. Ah, the Hermit…

                First Grand Historian of Arreth and the Lesser Realms (aka Kitty)
                Fork the Gork

                #107925
                Keilah H.
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                  @elishavet-pidyon Ha! I love those lines! They’re witty!

                  "When in doubt, eat cheese crackers."-me to my charries who don't even know about cheese crackers

                  #107931
                  Elishavet Elroi
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                    @keilah-h Aww, thank you! šŸ™‚

                    Yeah, that kind of tongue-in-cheek wit is a bit prevalent in my writing. It’s not always a good thing…but I like it here. šŸ˜‰

                    You have listened to fears, child. Come, let me breathe on you... Are you brave again? -Aslan

                    #107996
                    Keilah H.
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                      @elishavet-pidyon I like it. I just really find it hilarious when characters act/talk like that…..

                      "When in doubt, eat cheese crackers."-me to my charries who don't even know about cheese crackers

                      #108002
                      Elishavet Elroi
                      @elishavet-pidyon
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                        @keilah-h

                        Me too. Especially when it’s unexpected, like when it appears that the antagonist has “bested” the protagonist, but then in a few words that changes. XD

                        You have listened to fears, child. Come, let me breathe on you... Are you brave again? -Aslan

                        #108069
                        Lydia S.
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                          @elishavet-pidyon

                          Those are wonderful lines!!! (And I suddenly pity Wilfredā€™s poor journalšŸ˜›šŸ˜‰)

                          Fanfics really are fun. Itā€™s a chance to stretch your abilities as a writer! šŸ™‚

                          My fanfic follows Helmer in the months following King Jupiterā€™s defeat. I think itā€™ll probably span from a week or two after the defeat to sometime after arriving at Cloud Mountain. Then, itā€™ll skip to the night after he accepted Picket. At least, thatā€™s what Iā€™ve planned in my headā€¦ Weā€™ll see if thatā€™s what actually happens! XD Itā€™s been interesting to delve into the mind of someone who has no hope for the future besides revenge and no emotions for the present except anger, grief, and remorseā€¦

                          Here are some of my fav excerpts. šŸ™‚

                          He wheeled about and reached for his sword. As he buckled on the belt and pulled on his jacket, the cry of ā€œoath-breakerā€ rang through his mind.

                          Coward. Deserter. Turncoat. Failure.

                           

                          Heā€™d thought, someday, heā€™d come back for good. But heā€™d been young and naive then. Now that he wasā€¦

                          A bitter laugh welled within him. He was still young, wasnā€™t he? Perhaps so, but only in body. Everything else about him felt old. There were times he just wanted to curl up and go to sleep. And then to just go on sleeping forever.

                           

                          Helmer was lost. Heā€™d never been in these woods in his life. Deep down inside he knew that if he really wanted to, he could figure out where he was. But he didnā€™t want to. If he didnā€™t know where he was, then he wouldnā€™t know how to get home.

                          Sorry, those were longā€¦ *facepalm* Hopefully, they were interesting! šŸ™‚

                          #108072
                          Elishavet Elroi
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                            @lydia-s

                            Thanks! I have some more contemplative lines, especially in the one where he’s given charge of the heir. You know, the whole “here I am, guarding one who’s father I let die. I hope this doesn’t get him killed too.”

                            But Wilfred has a resilient humor that I’ve had fun expounding on.

                            Yes, fanfics are great!

                            Yours sounds so good. That’s a hard place in Helmer’s life (and thus an author’s thrill).

                            I love Helmer’s character arc, how it dips down to self-destruction and then climbs upward as he trains an attainted, young, and optimistically vengeful buck (so many adjectives fit…). I think Helmer really comes to life when Picket makes his own death-dealing mistake with deserved guilt.

                            I think Helmer comes to believe in the Mending, and he’s determined that his apprentice will live to see it.

                            And there are my opinions. šŸ˜‰

                            Anyway, your lines are very interesting. I like the use of fragments in his thoughts, and that last part about being lost is a perfect description of his while story.

                             

                            You have listened to fears, child. Come, let me breathe on you... Are you brave again? -Aslan

                            #108120
                            Keilah H.
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                              @elishavet-pidyon @lydia-s Fanfics are so fun, aren’t they?

                              "When in doubt, eat cheese crackers."-me to my charries who don't even know about cheese crackers

                              #108127
                              Elishavet Elroi
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                                @keilah-h

                                Yes!

                                You have listened to fears, child. Come, let me breathe on you... Are you brave again? -Aslan

                                #108141
                                Keilah H.
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                                  @elishavet-pidyon What fanfics do you write, apart from the one about this character Helmer? (In my own fanfics, “helmer” is actually the word for male dragon!)

                                  "When in doubt, eat cheese crackers."-me to my charries who don't even know about cheese crackers

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