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May 3, 2022 at 9:53 pm #110319
what ya think?
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#ProtectSebMay 3, 2022 at 10:10 pm #110321Corvina
It got old. Quick.
Where the girl went, she went. First that…garden and then that circus, and now here.
And did Eder bother to fill her in on where here was? Of course not.
She stuck her tongue into the side of her cheek, annoyed. Her fingernails scraped against a rotting piece of metal that held fast to the lantern holder. It fell to the ground and she let out a long, suffering sigh.
Let’s get this done with.
Find the princess. Find out why she and her little group was here and then destroy it.
She smirked, remembering the look on Eder’s face when he’d realized his plans had been messed up when the girl had disappeared, along with her friends. All his hard work, shoved down the drain, all because she’d been…
What? Teleported?
Corvina shrugged. Didn’t matter. Whatever the case, Eder had no idea this was coming, and that had been a first…to Corvina’s knowledge anyway.
And oh the fit he’d thrown. HA! Corvina lazily laid her head against the wall, smiling as she remembered it.
Ahh, but then the moment had been cut short when Eder had turned to her. Expecting her to go after the girl.
As usual. It was always her.
His little puppet.
Her fists clenched until her nails bit into her skin.
No matter. She’d get this done quickly. Especially since now she didn’t have to worry about her master’s idiotic “partners” getting in the way. After all, it wasn’t like the last ones had worked out too well.
She doubted the next few would work either, not that he listened to her. She was just there to do as she was told.
To shut up and obey.
She stalked down the hall, glaring.
Perhaps it would be easier this time. Without Eder glaring at her every move.
Or was he still? She frowned and shook her head.
“Whatever.” She rolled her eyes. If he was, she hoped he could feel her hatred burning him with every step forward.
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#ProtectSebMay 3, 2022 at 10:14 pm #110322She’s great!
Oohh, so that’s why Ara was so flumuxed by Zlatan’s black hair. Hmmm, many those two should meet. Zlatan with charcoal black hair, golden eyes, and a mildly-pessimistic-yet-somehow-idealistic nature, and your dear antagonist Corvina whith her whole set of problems. Especially if Elishavet’s villian gets in too.
This is going to be awesome, especially once our elf returns.
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Fork the GorkMay 3, 2022 at 10:17 pm #110323@koshka YES that was the black hair thing! I’m glad u picked up on that!!
so Corvina’s the one who scratched November, in her Raven form. And it was actually supposed to be Ara but November pushed her away. And November and Corvina was greatly affected by it due to a spoiler later in the books…..so the blood red cape, and his hair, and he was standing by November….so yea
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#ProtectSebMay 3, 2022 at 10:18 pm #110324@koshka also Corvina means Raven-haired, that’s why her name is corvina (: kinda random fact but yea lol
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#ProtectSebMay 3, 2022 at 10:18 pm #110325And cheers for skirt-girls!(being one myself) I’m relishing that.
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Fork the GorkMay 3, 2022 at 10:18 pm #110326@koshka yay for skirts!!!
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#ProtectSebMay 3, 2022 at 10:20 pm #110327I noticed those color combinations had some sort of effect on her. The puzzle pieces are clicking.
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Fork the GorkMay 3, 2022 at 10:23 pm #110328@koshka yea, As of rn, in book one I’m thinking when that happens it leads into Ara’s dark moment. She already struggles with insecurity but when November gets hurt and she feels it’s because of her, and then it’s opens her up to all these feelings of hate and anger it kinda brings her to her low point.
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#ProtectSebMay 3, 2022 at 10:26 pm #110329Wow…she definitely sounds interesting. Let’s give it a try, shall we?
Although, my “villain” is around 30 years of age, and a bit of the Bonifer Squoonish type, just less nice. He’s the military governor of the Dorwain province of Eirtan.
Just that last sentence makes me want to call the eagles.
*Realizes that only makes sense in my book*
Anyway, he was originally a Shepherd of Eirtan (prince over a region), but after many years of building bitterness, he decided that the Eirtanian king was unfit to rule, and that Dorwain was a much better country.
…and I have to stop there, cause how ge just makes me mad, because if it wasn’t for him the nasty Dorwains would never have been able to _________________________
Okay, um, hi.
I do need to work on his character, and all that rant was to say that he’d want to lead. Oh, and he’d LOVE running into Viktor. Mwahahaha! (More like run Viktor through)
Eibuavkin don ra’ahrí v’oiraelisr!
And skirts are the best!
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May 3, 2022 at 10:27 pm #110330Aw, poor girl. That does sound like a good plot point.
Do I do that? Nah, only have major ‘what is truth?’ and ‘what have I done?’ issues planned for my MCs, so nothing overly tramatic. XD
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Fork the GorkMay 3, 2022 at 10:29 pm #110331BONIFER SQUOON SHRIEK…..*throws stuff against the wall and throws tantrum!!!*
I. LOATHE. HIM.
I how can he be LESS NICE?!?! Bonfire squoon is a sick monster….
ahem….anyway….those books crushed my soul, ignore my rant.
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#ProtectSebMay 3, 2022 at 10:30 pm #110332@koshka yea I’ve got trauma….XD
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#ProtectSebMay 3, 2022 at 10:33 pm #110333It is interesting though, Zlatan’s story is set up a little different as although there is a ‘villian’ who initiates most of his problems, Zlatan is his own antagonist.
His name btw, means ‘Golden one’.
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Fork the GorkMay 3, 2022 at 10:38 pm #110334Or nicer. He’s less two-faced, and only encourages people to betray and warp each other after his great success in the first because the latter failed for him.
If that made sense.
You have listened to fears, child. Come, let me breathe on you... Are you brave again? -Aslan
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