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August 19, 2022 at 5:45 pm #115563
Ik mine was rlly Long guys, sorry it’s cuz I put in that scene from my WIP
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#ProtectSebAugust 19, 2022 at 5:48 pm #115564It’s fine! I like long ones, although I usually can’t write them.
First Grand Historian of Arreth and the Lesser Realms (aka Kitty)
Fork the GorkAugust 19, 2022 at 5:48 pm #115565That’s fine! (I kinda take long anyways, sooo.) November is wonderful!
You have listened to fears, child. Come, let me breathe on you... Are you brave again? -Aslan
August 19, 2022 at 5:48 pm #115566@freedomwriter76 Franz can lash out at November btw it’s fine, I kinda figured he would, Ik when it’s other ppls characters ur kinda like “how far can I go XD”
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#ProtectSebAugust 19, 2022 at 6:11 pm #115569@freedomwriter76 do u get off at 5?
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#ProtectSebAugust 19, 2022 at 6:25 pm #115571Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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@godlyfantasy12. You’re good! I quite like long ones! 😉 Alrighty, but that’s gonna make Riker (and Arabella…) A N G R Y!!!! No, sorry. I was helping my Mom make dinner. XD (PIZZA! Mmmm!) I LOVE NOVEMBER SO MUCH!!!! *sobs* @elishavet-pidyon. @koshka. @keilah-h.
Riker
Before Riker could even say, do, or think, anything, Zlatan placed himself in front of him, telling Franz to hit him. And then…Oh no…November.
“STOP!” November rushed at Franz, knocking into him and pushing him back.
Franz stumbled but didn’t fall. His eyes narrowed, and he gripped November’s arm, hard. “Try to attack me, you little snake!? You’ll regret it, understand me!?”
November stared back at Franz.
Franz grinned. “What, mute now!?” he shook November’s arm. “THINK YOU’LL GET AWAY!?”
He raised his arm.
And without even thinking, Riker moved. “No!” he screamed, grabbing November. His father’s arm hit his jaw, and Riker hit the ground, his arms wrapped, protectively, around November. Blood came from his jaw, but he didn’t let go.
November looked up at Riker, his eyes wide. Riker smiled faintly. “You’re okay, November. I’m here.”
AUGHHH!!!! SO SWEEETTTTT!!!!! *sobs*
August 19, 2022 at 6:39 pm #115572Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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My Baby is so precious. 😭😭😭 *grabs him, hugs him, and rocks him back and forth* 😭💖
August 19, 2022 at 6:43 pm #115573@elishavet-pidyon @keilah-h @koshka @freedomwriter76
POOR RIKER 😭 FRANZ HOW DARE YOU!
Arabella
”NOVEMBER!” Ara screamed as the man raised his fist. November froze and Ara’s heart plummeted.
“No!” Riker moved, shielding November from the blow and taking it instead. Blood sprouted from his jaw and Ara gasped, tears streaming down her face.
Was any of the blood from November?
Her fists clenched as she looked back at this horrid man. Rage filled her chest. Rage she’d only ever felt a few times before.
Once when November had been scratched.
And all those times she’d had to look Riven in the eye.
”How dare you!” She raised her voice, stunning even the man in front of her. She didn’t often raise her voice, so even to those who didn’t know her, it was often surprising. Even Lyn jerked back slightly. “You have no business being here!”
She hated the tears in her eyes, but ignored them. She held her ground as the man turned his dark eyes to her. He was now swaying on his feet, but the venom in his eyes hadn’t lessened.
He tried to take a step forward but Zlatan blocked him, looking ready to pummel him, but seeming unsure if he should since this was still Riker’s father.
Nyx…however….had no problem had all approaching the situation headfirst.
(oh boy yall….) heh 😅
A sudden flash of movement came from Ara’s right and before she could register, she heard Lyn cry out, “NYX WAIT!”
But it was too late. The fox had already pounced, claws out. He hissed, hackles raised and leapt onto the man’s shirt, clawing furiously at whatever he could touch.
Riker’s father bellowed and tried to grip the little creature, but he was too quick, moving across the man’s neck and shoulders in a flurry.
“LITTLE RAT!” The man screamed.
”I’LL TEACH YOU TO KEEP YOUR HANDS TO YOURSELF!” Nyx squeaked.
Ara turned around to Lyn, unsure of what to do. Lyn looked the same.
Crosshair’s weapon was still raised, and a few of the other men seemed unsure of what to do.
“No! You might hit Nyx!” Lyn looked at Crosshair.
This has spiraled into quote the mess.
November
November gasped, trying to catch his breath. He looked up at Riker and saw the man was bleeding. His eyes widened and he paled considerably, his stomach twisting into knots.
Oh, how he hated blood….
”You’re okay, November. I’m here.” Riker was smiling, so he must not have been too badly wounded. Still, November opened his mouth to speak. Before he could, however, a clamor of voices made his head snap.
“LITTLE RAT!” Riker’s father was now fighting with Nyx…when had that happened?
”I’LL TEACH YOU TO KEEP YOUR HANDS TO YOURSELF!”
Oh Nyx.
November let out a breath but couldn’t help but smile at his friend. Still, to say his nerves were shot would’ve been an understatement.
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#ProtectSebAugust 19, 2022 at 6:44 pm #115574@freedomwriter76 @koshka @keilah-h @godlyfantasy12
Ooooooooooooooo! Pizza!
Riker, November… Words fail.
Alyona
Something had changed. This was bad.
Alyona strained to see her brother’s face. When she did, the breath left her lungs.
Lit with a strange fury, his face shone white, but the anger met grief in his eyes. Dangerous grief.
He darted forward and she lost sight of him in the action.
‘Lord, we need you.’ she bit her lip. ‘Now.’
You have listened to fears, child. Come, let me breathe on you... Are you brave again? -Aslan
August 19, 2022 at 6:44 pm #115575@freedomwriter76 @elishavet-pidyon @keilah-h @godlyfantasy12
Zlatan
White hot fury.
Freezing passion.
Smell of blood.
The world went red.
.
.
He blinked. Franz was on the floor before him.
“I’m sorry.”
He was breathing, a large knot forming over his temple. Thank the Maker, he wasn’t killed.
Riker looker up his eyes wide.
“I’m sorry.”
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Fork the GorkAugust 19, 2022 at 6:44 pm #115576@freedomwriter76 both are boys are wonderful! *proceeds to also envelope November in a hug*
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#ProtectSebAugust 19, 2022 at 6:46 pm #115577@freedomwriter76 @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon
So everyone is going at Franz now XD, so how bout we say it’s kinda free for all, and now Franz is unconscious on the ground, thx to all three guys (Zlatan, Nyx and Viktor XD)
and Arabella certainly have him a good talking to that’s for sure. She probably would’ve slapped him to if she’d had the chance, but I have a feeling he would’ve slapped her first…….and then he might’ve gotten killed…. 😬 XD
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#ProtectSebAugust 19, 2022 at 6:47 pm #115578Also I have a feeling everyone else is gonna be like RIKER WE ARE SO SORRY and Nyx just gonna be like
PFFT I’M NOT 😎
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#ProtectSebAugust 19, 2022 at 6:48 pm #115579@freedomwriter76 @koshka @keilah-h @godlyfantasy12
Wow. These characters… Wow.
*Pulls Zlatan into the group hug*
*Doesn’t think Nyx would want to be huged by a stranger*
You have listened to fears, child. Come, let me breathe on you... Are you brave again? -Aslan
August 19, 2022 at 6:50 pm #115580@elishavet-pidyon no he wouldn’t XD
*pulls Nyx into strangle hug as he squirms to get out of it.*
”LET ME GO!”
NEVER!
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