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August 16, 2022 at 4:43 pm #115317
@elishavet-pidyon @keilah-h @koshka @freedomwriter76
The Gang
Nyx’s hackles had immediately raised at Crosshair’s tone. His tired head lifted in a piercing gaze and his ears perked.
Viktor’s hand flew to his side but Lyn was too busy focusing on her companion to pay any mind to others around her.
Thankfully, Viktor eventually calmed the situation, stating that they did indeed need sleep.
Nyx, however, was not easily swayed by the boy’s words.
”Guy needs to watch himself!” He bared his canines, writhing in Lyn’s grip, though she noticed it was half-heartedly. He really was exhausted.
But spotting Alyona’s frightened expression seemed to fuel him, and his instincts kicked in.
”Nyx, calm down, I’m sure he didn’t mean anything by it…” It was Ara who spoke this time, her voice soft and gentle. She reached a hand out and patted the creatures soft fur. He bristled and then slowly released a hiss before calming again.
Lyn sighed, offering a smile of thanks to her friend. Ara returned it. Nyx huffed and, slowly, his ears dropped and his eyelids drooped.
November stepped up, “You want me to take him?”
Lyn stared at her little fox’s tired form and shook her head firmly. “No, no…it’s fine. I’ve got him.”
Ara glanced at her worriedly before placing a hand on her shoulder. She knew this was more then just about Nyx being tired.
Lyn was pretty open about most things, including what she’d recently been through. She didn’t have much of a filter, and when it came to sharing her feelings that was sometimes a good thing. Sometimes not so much.
In this case it was good, because it allowed Ara, and November to understand her more.
So now, they both understood that Lyn was silently reliving a moment in her life where, everything had crumbled around her.
Nyx was the only constant thing for her….
And then….
She thought she’d lost him too.
She’d told Ara later how she’d felt when that had happened, and Ara immediately understood.
She knew exactly what it was like to watch someone you care about be hurt. And to be completely helpless to do anything….
Her eyes gazed at November. At the three deep-red gashes on his face. He’d been lucky he hadn’t gone blind one eye, as one of the gashes ran straight over it. It had barely missed his cornea, only touching his skin and creating a deep wound that wouldn’t heal over.
At least the Light One had protected his eyesight. She sighed.
Still…
Those marks should’ve been hers….
She looked away, trying to forget the terrible memory. How lifeless he’d looked. The blood. Her screaming his name. The crumbling of rock and stone around them.
“Ara?” Lyn tilted her head, drawing Ara from her thoughts. Ara let out a small gasp, returning to the present.
“Hm?”
“Y-You okay?”
”Oh! Oh…Y-Yea..” Ara tucked a piece of hair behind her ear. Lyn frowned and then offered a small side smile, her emerald eyes gleaming with understanding.
In a quick moment they shared a knowing gaze. A look that passed between them that let them know that they both understood each other.
One girl’s eyes gazed down at the furry ball of fluff in her arms, and the other at the curly-haired boy at her side.
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#ProtectSebAugust 16, 2022 at 5:22 pm #115318@freedomwriter76 @elishavet-pidyon @keilah-h @godlyfantasy12
I tried!
Zlatan
“You would do well to leave the bite out of your voice.” the lad was gripping the hilt at his side, but he didn’t draw.
Zlatan quietly replaced his own blade. He liked this boy.
Slowly, Victor released his grip. “We need to find a place to wait out the night. I know of a few places that would be safe, but…”
The rest of the troop looked weary, eyes haunted.
Mere children.
They needed rest.
“V’ere?”
First Grand Historian of Arreth and the Lesser Realms (aka Kitty)
Fork the GorkAugust 17, 2022 at 11:17 am #115332@koshka @freedomwriter76 @elishavet-pidyon @godlyfantasy12
Yeah, it’s totally fine. I can see why Crosshair’s rather judgmental voice is bothersome to the others; it’s kinda his natural tone, but they’re not used to it. I always say he has a “snake-like” kind of voice.
Crosshair
“Who are you asking?” Viktor snapped, narrowing his eyes. “If it is my sister, you would do well to keep the bite out of your voice.”
Crosshair was almost startled. He’d hardly heard anyone talk to him like that, except maybe Feather when she was really mad at him. Mostly it was himself, using that tone on everyone else.
Was that really what he sounded like?
Nyx, the fox, wriggled in his owner’s arms again. She stroked him, calming him down.
Viktor turned to the others. “We need to find a place to wait out the night. I know a few places that’s be safe, but…”
“Where?” said one of the others, his voice heavily accented. (@koshka, I’m sorry but I’m not too good with their accents so I’ll just type them normally.)
Viktor’s sister stayed close to her brother as he explained. She reminded Crosshair of his own sister, Omega, and how she always hung around their brother Hunter.
This girl still seemed to be fascinated by the crosshair tattoo on his face. He lowered his voice slightly, hoping it would suffice to sound friendlier.
“Why are you so interested?” he asked. “Do markings like this hold significance in your culture?”
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
August 17, 2022 at 11:21 am #115333@hallie-jean @e-m-trepke @power @I feel like I’m missing someone
We going to start up our rp again? Because if not, I think I’m going to put Feather and Rinzler with the other group. Their friend might need it……..
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
August 17, 2022 at 11:56 am #115338Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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@koshka. You did great, girl! 👍
August 17, 2022 at 12:17 pm #115339Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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@elishavet-pidyon. @koshka. @godlyfantasy12. @keilah-h. This is so much fun! 😁 Mine are just watching this scene unfold, lol. 😂
Riker
This had escalated quickly.
Yes, Crosshair’s tone had been a little…crisp.
Now, the boy named Viktor only a moment ago had his hand on his sword hilt, protecting what Riker now knew to be his sister.
Riker wasn’t afraid of conflict, he was in the SS after all, but he didn’t necessarily enjoy it either.
He glanced at the marks on Crosshair’s face. Scars or a brand.
Riker’s own fingers instinctively reached to touch his own, long, thin scar on his left cheek, but he instantly pulled away.
He didn’t want to attract any attention to that.
And he didn’t want any of this tension to result in a fight either.
He glanced at the other kids of the group.
Viktor had explained where a few safe places would be as his sister hung close to him. They reminded him of himself and…Angelina.
The fox seemed like it was on high alert again. Riker then glanced over at Ezra and Eva, who were standing there, holding hands, watching all the events in front of them unfold. Again, reminded him of someone else. Himself and…and…Iris.
Riker hoped, oh, how he hoped, that his sister, wife, and kids were safe.
Riker stepped forward, almost in between the kids and Crosshair. “Can we all agree that any and all tension is unnecessary right now? We all need to find somewhere to sleep.”
He heard footsteps, and suddenly Ezra was beside him. “Riker’s right. And it is wonderful to meet all y’all by the way. But all y’all look plumb tuckered out, so we need to get a move on.”
(I love my Southern boy. 😂😍)
August 17, 2022 at 12:39 pm #115343Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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@queen_of_alvastia. Thank you so much! 🥰 I hope my stories reach hearts, and minds, one day. 🤩
Leon
“When we get out of here, wherever here is, I promise I won’t leave until we find your family again.”
Leon blinked.
Their eyes still remained locked.
“I just…I just met you. And you would…do that…for me?” Leon asked.
What amount of compassion, care…did this man have in his heart?
Leon squeezed his hand. “And I promise I will help you find your brother. No matter how long it takes.”
(These two are going to be SUCH good friends, I just KNOW it! 😍 They are already getting there! 😁)
August 17, 2022 at 12:41 pm #115344crying. AGAIN
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August 17, 2022 at 12:44 pm #115346Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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@queen_of_alvastia. I must be good at writing emotion. 😂
August 17, 2022 at 12:46 pm #115347@freedomwriter76 Understatement! I need to read Leon’s actual story now 😉😊😭😥
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August 17, 2022 at 12:49 pm #115348Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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@queen_of_alvastia. Aww, thank you! 🥰
It is currently…in progress. And that progress is…oh, how could I put it…? *cough cough* slow. 😅 I mean, I could tell you some of the things he goes through if you’re not afraid of spoilers. The book he’s an MC in, Freedom’s Fire, is about both him AND Riker, who’s in my RP with the others. 🙂
August 17, 2022 at 12:53 pm #115349@freedomwriter76 You’re welcome!! 🤗😊
I’m a slow writer too so I get you! I am not afraid of spoilers!! Fire away!! I must know XD
(And you better have a happy ending in mind for Leon….he needs it!!!!)
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August 17, 2022 at 1:08 pm #115350Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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@queen_of_alvastia. Good. I’m glad others can get me. 😅
Okay then! (Prepare Yourself!!!! 😁)
And yes, he gets a happy ending, but it’s a rocky trail to get there. 🥺
So, for his story in the book, you first have to know something. Freedom’s Fire is a Historical Fiction book about…The Holocaust. (which doesn’t help the progress. 😅 Deciding what and what not to talk about, y’know? 😔) So, for Leon, he is Jewish (ethnically, but not religiously) but lives in Germany, he was born there, and his wife Aadelheide is German! So, their kids are 1/2 Jewish. Anywho, the book takes place through 1944-1945 mostly, and even into 1946. Leon and Aadelheide eventually send their kids, who don’t really look Jewish at all to the Germans, to friends in the countryside to hide them from the Nazi’s. However, Leon and Aadelheide don’t go with them. In the end, Leon and Aadelheide are both sent to the nearby camp. 😭 Leon begins to really hate the Nazi’s (including Riker. Hehe, conflict! 😁) and a few months later…Aadelheide…dies. (and now I shall cry. 😫😭) Leon is plunged into grief and hate, especially against Riker for reasons more explained in the book, and when he is released from the camp, he also becomes an alcoholic. Much of the book is Leon learning to let go of his hatred and love his enemies and even gets to…forgive Riker after he comes to God. In the end, Leon is healed and set free from his alcohol, his hatred, and his unforgiveness by God. Yes, his wife died and maybe the pain will never completely go away, but…he’s changed. And him forgiving Riker brings Riker to forgive himself and brings them both to a place of redemption AND they become good friends! 👏 (that’s not shown too much in the book…but I’ve got a sequel swimming around in my head. 😜)
August 17, 2022 at 1:10 pm #115353@freedomwriter I LOVE DOING THIS! And I’m so proud of Payton for not showing his obnoxious side lol
Payton
“And I promise I will help you find your brother. No matter how long it takes.”
Payton didn’t release his grip on Leon’s hand. Together in this world of dark tunnels, stones, and fear, he knew for certain he’d found someone he could rely on. Together, they were getting out of this.
He nodded.
Again the words stuck fast.
“Yes.”
A single word. A single promise.
“And I know we will succeed if we’re together.”
Emotion too hard to contain melted in his eyes and he pulled himself together.
“I guess we better get started then?”
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August 17, 2022 at 1:42 pm #115354Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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@queen_of_alvastia. Me too! 😀
Leon
“I guess we better get started then?”
Leon smiled. Nodded. “We better.”
He had found someone to talk to…to be able to count on. And someone that actually…cared, for once.
Leon gave his new friend a grin. “Let’s get started. And let’s find our families.”
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