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February 1, 2023 at 5:18 pm #131064
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XD XD Our poor charries
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@godlyfantasy12. 😭😭😭😭
Iris
Was deaf.
She couldn’t even imagine.
She and the children had been sent away from Germany and to America…to live with her parents…just so Eli wouldn’t be harmed.
She and her children had spent over a year in America with her parents during the war…separated from their Husband and their Daddy…just to keep Eli safe. Just so they wouldn’t lose Eli.
“I’m so sorry…” Iris whispered, “I can’t even imagine…”
February 1, 2023 at 5:37 pm #131070@freedomwriter76
Grimm
Grimm stared at Iris for a moment, then gazed at the little boy still holding her hand. He gave the boy a small smile. Nodded.
“Thank you.” He carded his fingers through Paxton’s hair, memories of his sister running through his mind.
He closed his eyes for a moment, taking in a soft breath.
“If you have to focus on the past, focus on the good, not the bad.”
Grimm smiled at Lyn’s words, remembering Conan. Otsana. All the others who had survived.
The ones he’d fought for.
Ones just like the little boy here.
Paxton.
Eli.
He opened his eyes.
His sister’s sacrifice wasn’t in vain…they’d made sure of that…
He raised his head, a small, content smile on his lips. “Well, I’m glad we’ve run into friends and not enemies. Since you know November…I’m guessing you’ve been to this castle before?”
Riker nodded. “Many a time.”
“Are you looking for anyone?”
“Just a way out. As always. I suppose your looking for your other friends?” He directed this question at November, who straightened at the attention.
He nodded. “Y-Yea. Same old story…” the ginger sighed.
“Well then, since we’ve nothing better to do, we’ll join you!” Riker smiled turning to Iris who nodded sweetly.
“A-Are you sure? I…I don’t…” November rubbed an arm, looking away. He met Riker’s eyes, frowning. “Remember what happened last time…? I wouldn’t want to…to hurt your…” He glanced at the kids, looked down at his feet.
Grimm raised a brow.
Did Riker know…?
Riker gave a sad smile. “November…I trust you. I know you’d never hurt any of them.”
November didn’t say anything.
Paxton watched this exchanged with confused eyes, lips pursed. He gripped Hope and Grimm tighter.
Riker looked at Grimm and Paxton, smiling. “And you can trust us too.”
Grimm looked down at the white haired boy, nodding slightly. “Alright then…if November trusts you, so do we.”
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#ProtectSebFebruary 1, 2023 at 5:43 pm #131073@freedomwriter76
I’m trying to think how to start a conversation with someone and Paxton. I think Paxton and Riker would be cute and Lily cuz she’s adorable!!!
Jonathan and November would be cool since their the same age! And Naja (Does Jonathan have a girlfriend or anything yet? XD XD)
and Grimm Iris and Eli since he can speak Sign? Idk lol what do u think would be some convo starters?
*starts handing out conversation starter cards XD*
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#ProtectSebFebruary 1, 2023 at 5:47 pm #131075Grimm and Riker would be cool too, they’re both coming out of their guilt (Ik Riker’s character arc is toward the end-ish and Grimm’s technically isn’t but Grimm is doing better then originally)
But they both have guilt and are trying to still remove themselves from it
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#ProtectSebFebruary 1, 2023 at 6:02 pm #131077Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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@godlyfantasy12. We can start with Riker/Lily and Paxton, and maybe Riker can talk to Grimm a bit later, cause I would like to do that as well. 😊
And yes!!! Jonathan, November, and Naja would be cool since two of them ARE the same age and Naja isn’t too far behind. 😉 And heh…now that you ask…he doesn’t have an “official” girlfriend…but he just went to a dance (in the timeline) and did bring a “date”, and he does have a secret crush on her…she’s about 3, almost 4 years younger than he is…💕 They’d be a cute couple, tho. 😊 (and they may actually get married in the future…we’ll see. 😂💕)
And for now, we can do Iris, Eli, and Grimm. Eli and Grimm communicating will just be ADORABLE! 💕💕💕💕
Riker
They continued on their way forward down a hall.
Riker clutched Lily’s hand, as she skipped beside him. She was quietly humming a song Esther and William had taught all of the young kids in Sunday School.
Riker smiled, when his attention fell on the little boy that was walking on the other side of him. Paxton, he remembered. Riker smiled. “Hello there, Paxton.”
Paxton looked up at him.
Lily stopped humming and turned her attention to Paxton, face breaking into a big smile. “Hi! I’m Lily! How old are you, Paxton!? I’m five and a half!” She held up five fingers.
(so energetic…so adorable. 😂💖)
Naja
She walked side by side with Jonathan, who had November on his other side.
Naja smiled at November. “Sooo…November…how’s Bella these days? I still remember her…is she doing well?”
“Naja, not so many questions…” Jonathan whispered, in a bit of a hiss.
Naja just shook her head and turned her attention back to November. “If you don’t want to talk about her, it’s fine. I was just curious.” She shrugged.
(Lol, Naja can tell when someone has a crush now!!! 😂😂😂)
Uhm…not really sure what to do for Iris, Grimm, and Eli tho…😅😊
February 1, 2023 at 6:09 pm #131081Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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@loopylin. So sorry this is so late!!! I totally forgot about Eddie! 😭💔😢🤦🏻♀️
Steffi
They continued on down the hall, Jason pushing her chair, Adolphus carrying both of his boys.
“Daddy…I’m hungry…” Henry whined, and Steffi turned around.
“I have a bit of food in my purse…we could sit down…I have a blanket right here in my lap, we could sit on that.”
Adolphus nodded again, and Jason took the blanket and carefully laid it on the castle floor.
Adolphus set both Henry and Aiden down and came back over to Steffi. “Do you want to stay in your chair, or…?”
Steffi smiled softly. Though she was grateful, extremely grateful, for the wheelchair, it did get uncomfortable sometimes. “I’d like to sit on the blanket if it’s at all possible…” She whispered.
She saw Aiden try to toddle off the blanket, but he toppled and almost fell, but Jason caught him just in time and set him back down.
“It’s possible. Just hold tight.” Adolphus replied with a soft smile.
Steffi nodded.
Adolphus came over and without much effort at all, considering she weighed way less than she probably should have, he lifted her up into his arms and carefully set her down on the blanket.
He rolled the wheelchair over, Steffi pulled the food out of her purse and was beginning to hand some to Henry and Aiden…when all three adults stopped.
Adolphus stood up straight. “…Did anyone hear that?”
February 1, 2023 at 6:33 pm #131085@freedomwriter76 AHH NAJA I LUV U XD XD
November
Heat rose to his cheeks At the question Naja posed. He ran a hand through his hair, chuckling awkwardly. Naja grinned, raising a brow, just like Lyn sometimes did.
“S-She’s good…”
“Yea? She was really pretty last I remember…”
November looked at the girl. Blinked, mouth half open. “I-I…”
“Naja!” Jonathan hissed.
“Oh hush, I’m just teasing,” Naja giggled.
Jonathan shook his head, but November noticed the small smile on his lips. November blushed harder.
Jonathan placed a hand on his shoulder, chuckled. “Ah…it’s alright, November.”
“Yea, you’re not the only one,” Naja sing-songed, raising her brows at her brother.
Paxton
Paxton flushed at Lily’s sudden rush of enthusiasm. The little girl bounded toward him, eyes bright and smile big. She was a mass of energy, like Lyn, or Luna.
Paxton gripped Hope close to his chest, sucking a quick breath in.
“Easy Lily…I think he might be a bit overwhelmed,” Riker said gently. Paxton glanced up shyly, then met Lily’s eyes once again. Despite the age difference, she was only a few inches shorter.
Paxton toed at a piece of floor with his shoe, shyly looking away.
“I-I’m e-eleven.”
“That’s how old Eli is!” Lily said excitedly.
Riker smiled. Lily sidled up next to Paxton as they walked, glancing at Hope. She reached a hand out to touch the bear, but Paxton flinched, eyes wide. He moved the bear away quickly, making the girl’s hand fall, expression growing sad.
Paxton gripped Hope closer, withdrawing to himself.
Riker’s brows furrowed and he cleared his throat. “Ahh…Why don’t you ask him what his bear’s name is?”
Lily nodded. “Does it have a name?”
Paxton stayed quiet for a moment before speaking.
“H-Hope… Her…her n-name is…is Hope.”
He squeezed her tighter, looking away.
Grimm
He couldn’t stop looking at the boy. He just reminded him so much of…
He let out a sigh.
It was like he was meeting Paxton all over again…
Except Paxton wasn’t Deaf, or mute.
And this boy was…
Which made it all the more…
Real.
Similar.
He thought he was doing better…
Lyn had been helping him through things…
But, it was moments like these…
Where…
He just couldn’t help but think about her.
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#ProtectSebFebruary 1, 2023 at 8:28 pm #131096Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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@godlyfantasy12. Haha, me too! 😂😂😂😂
She’s adorable when she’s little, and HILARIOUS when she’s older! 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣
Iris
Grimm kept looking at Eli, and then staring ahead.
Staring off at things…thinking about things…that weren’t there anymore.
She’d often seen that look in Riker’s eyes. She’d seen it many times a long time ago…back during and before the war.
He didn’t do it as much anymore…but sometimes…some days…there were moments when…
…he still saw things that weren’t there anymore.
“Grimm…are you alright?” Iris asked softly, gently laying her free hand on Grimm’s shoulder.
Jonathan
“Naja!” Jonathan hissed, turning to his sister with a glare.
Naja’s eyebrows raised higher. “But November’s not the only one.” She winked, and Jonathan glared harder.
“Naja, come on, knock it off. It’s not funny anymore.”
“But you love her, Jonathan…and you know it. You wouldn’t have taken her to the dance if you didn’t.” Naja teased.
Jonathan scoffed. Rolled his eyes at his sister. “Yeah, right.”
Naja crossed her arms. “You know you love her. And she’s my closest friend, and she likes you too.”
“She does!?”
Naja smirked at him, and Jonathan’s face flushed as he realized that he was screwed. “Okay, fine, yeah…I do like her.”
“You love her, Jonathan, you don’t “like” her. And Isabel loves you too.” Naja smiled and turned her attention back to November. “So, November, how have you been?”
Riker
“H-Hope… Her…her n-name is…is Hope.”
Riker smiled softly.
Paxton seemed very nervous, but that was okay.
Lily reached up and grabbed his hand. Riker looked down, smiled at her, and squeezed her hand.
He turned to Paxton with a small smile.
He was very shy…and reminded Riker of someone that had once been very shy…trying to not be hurt by the world again.
Paxton reminded Riker of himself.
Riker smiled softly at Paxton. “It’s okay, Paxton…you don’t have to talk. But if you want to talk, then we’ll listen…we won’t hurt you…I promise.”
(Riker just knows these things…bc he’s experienced them…💕😢)
February 1, 2023 at 10:27 pm #131099@freedomwriter76 ugh ur charries are so sweet/cute 😭 ❤️
Grimm
Grimm tensed at Iris’ touch, head turning to face her. He cleared his throat with a cough, glancing once again at Eli. The boy was looking up at him, head tilted since he couldn’t hear what was being spoken.
He smiled, big and wide. Innocent. Just like Mirella…
Grimm nodded slowly.
“Yes…I’m fine. Thank you.”
Iris raised a brow, lips pursing. “Are you sure? It’s…alright if…” She looked down at her son, “If certain things bring back memories…”
Grimm stared ahead, going quiet.
“I know a bit about that myself,” Iris looked over at her husband, who was beaming at Lily, mid-conversation with Paxton.
Grimm gripped the golden heart on his waist like an anchor, heart beating in his ears.
“You don’t have to talk about it…but if you’d like to,” Iris offered softly.
Grimm let out a small sigh. She reminded him of Arabella. Though perhaps a bit pushy…like Jocelyn.
His lips pinched into a smile at the thought of the blonde.
A few moments of silence rung after them.
Grimm looked down at Eli, watching as the boy studied his surroundings with wide, keen eyes, taking it all in stride. He could practically see the wheels spinning in the child’s head.
“She was like him. Looked like him, I mean. And Paxton…” Grimm glanced at the boy standing beside Riker, bear hugged to his chest. He smiled fondly. “Moon-colored hair…big smile. Brown eyes though…bright.”
Iris listened intently, eyes betraying her emotion. “How old…? If…you don’t mind…”
“Eight.”
November
November couldn’t stop the heat that overtook his ears and face as Naja and Jonathan continued to tease each other, though he was thankful attention was off of him now…
Until Naja turned her sights back.
“So, November, how have you been?”
November pursed his lips, wincing at the question. He hated those kinds of questions.
What were you supposed to say?
Oh, just great! Ya know, found out my whole life’s been a lie, I have a sister I didn’t know about who’s been trying to kill me and my friends, crazy dangerous fire powers, and my crush-er-best friend nearly got eaten by a sea monster earlier this year….
….
That didn’t exactly sound like a great first line…so he stuck with the usual:
“G-Good, you?”
Paxton
Paxton relaxed slightly as Riker gazed at him, eyes soft, Like Ara’s…
Like Ember’s…
Something about them seemed…
Safe. Kind.
Paxton glanced at his friends, at the other kids nearby, and then at Lily, who was smiling and giggling.
They seemed happy…not…hurt…
Paxton’s shoulders fell a bit, tension releasing from his chest. He lowered the bear from his face a bit, meeting Riker’s eyes. He smiled softly, nodding.
“A-Alright…”
Riker smiled, eyes crinkling. “So, how’d you meet November and Ara?”
Paxton bit the inside of his cheek, unsure of how to explain everything. The group kept walking, everyone in their own conversations. Paxton gazed at his feet, careful not to trip over anything.
“She…they…they s-saved me.”
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#ProtectSebFebruary 1, 2023 at 10:56 pm #131103@godlyfantasy12 @freedomwriter76
AHHH you guys I love them all 😭😭 I would give Paxton a hug if it wouldn’t scare him 😥
"And so I left this world just as I had entered it. Confused."
February 2, 2023 at 9:51 am #131155February 2, 2023 at 3:17 pm #131206@freedomwriter76 u wanna go??
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#ProtectSebFebruary 2, 2023 at 4:50 pm #131225@lightoverdarkness6 @princesachronicle22
Hi Y’all, I’m going to try entering two characters for my first time here:
Liren
(Lee-ren)I’ve already introduced him, though not by name. He wields a sword that controls him. He has little agency in what he does. The sword’s name is Kirrtes(Key-(r trill)-tes). Kirrtes has him rampage and assassinate. The worst part for this man however, is not only seeing the faces of the people he kills, but instead, when piercing living flesh, he experiences all their thoughts, feeling there sadness, guilt, hate, memories, ect as they take their last breaths looking at a monster. He experiences all their pain, knowing that it is by his hand, having no power to stop it. He hates Kirrtes, but hates himself as well. One must wonder who the true victim is…
Liren is tall, with simple dark hair and eyes. His clothes are disheveled and dirty, but made from sturdy fabrics and leathers. He holds Kirrtes in his left hand. He is in his late 20’s in earth years. Kirrtes is a unusually long one handed sword, with a reflective blade. It also has a red hilt, ornate golden guard and pummel. The guard has a black and purple marbled stone in the center. Kirrtes’s age is unknown.
N’nesha
(Nene-sha) N’nesha’s name means good and gift in the S”halek lanugage. She is a Shal’le women who just barely came to age finding Rrachelek. This is a big deal for her race. where humans have one line of linear thought, shal’le have two. These two lines of thought can operate fully independent of one another. You could think of it as a whole race and culture with multiple personality disorder and/or split mind. They have one mind and spirit, but they live in that dual nature. This influences there values, language, and culture. This has many advantages and disadvantages. One issue for example is that it’s hard to agree with yourself at times, which is very counter productive. Children have little sense of decision, because they simply argue with themselves. This is where parenting and Rrachelek come in. The Parents stewardship to nurture their children are far more stressed to the Shal’le, so they can teach them Rrachelek. Rrachelek is a state of self diplomacy to both sides, a complete self mastery, and so once one finds their self mastery, they have come of age. N’nesha just having reached this milestone is still not mature in her use in Rrachelek, but is still in good control of herself. Her left side, Nele, or gift, is more care free, and struggles feeling held down by her right side, Neshe, or good. Neshe is more logical, but never pessimistic, except when Nele tries something stupid, which is often. But N’nesha has Rrachelek, so she has them both in check… mostly. Both sides still have bright hopes for the future, as N’nesha desires to serve as a scholar of magical languages.
N’nesha has long, bright red hair as shared by most shal’le, and green eyes. She has a slightly enlarged skull at the back with a crease along the back of her head hidden by the hair, marking the two different hemispheres in her brain. She looks to be 15 in earth years.
note: The Shal’le language she speaks, S”halek, is comprised of one line of speech with a second independent line encoded into it. Allowing them to have two independent conversations at the same time. In the Castle, I’m not sure how this will come out. The unspoken agreement I’m assuming is here is that all characters magically speak the same language whether or not they realize. This would work in most cases, but as a Shal’le, this is not how N’nesha thinks nor speaks, so she will likely have a hard time communicating in the language she now suddenly knows, even though she now suddenly knows it.
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February 2, 2023 at 5:01 pm #131228first off…UR CHARACTERS ARE SO COOL BUT I FEEL SO BAD FOR THAT MAN 😭 DOES HE EVER GET A HAPPY ENDING?!?!
also!! As for the language I’m not entirely sure what to do here…
we have people with Russian accents and who can speak Russian and other languages too.
I have a character who speaks mentally, and only to those he trusts or allows to hear him (or if he’s injured, weak or severely distracted sometimes others will be able to hear him and he can’t control that)
and there is also a character in the castle who is deaf and mute and communicates through sign language.
so there are lots of different varieties of communication in the castle rn, so I’m sure we can figure something out 😊
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