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December 24, 2022 at 5:17 pm #125679
Corie
I looked at the fennec fox curiously. Maybe he was a Lyabrinnian… or at least like one. His mouth didn’t move when he spoke.
Jocelyn smiled and I smiled back at her. She seemed like a nice girl. I started down the hall as the others followed.
I rubbed my arms and shivered as I felt a cold draft blow by. Ty seemed to notice, but didn’t do anything. I frowned. Why did our relationship have to be like this?
As we walked down the hall in awkward silence, I tried not to keep staring at Everton’s shoes. They were so… cool! I fell in step next to him and asked, “Where did you get those shoes?”
He cocked his head, surprised. “Er… at the mall.”
I furrowed my brow. “What’s a mall?”
Everton looked at Amidala, then back at me again. “You don’t know what a mall is?”
I innocently shook my head. Amidala stepped in front of him. She smiled, saying, “A mall is like a really big building with lots of stores in it.”
I nodded. “Oh, all right.”
I turned, walking backwards, and addressed the rest of the group. “Does anyone know where we’re going?”
Grimm spoke up, “We’re looking for two friends of ours. One is a young woman with brown hair and brown eyes, her name is Arabella. The other a orange and curly-haired boy named November. Have you seen them at all?”
I shook my head. “I haven’t. I’m sorry. But we’ll help you find them. Well…” I glanced at Ty. “I will.”
Ty nodded slightly at me. I smiled softly. Maybe he would stay with me. After all, I’d had too many close calls with death lately. (Some things happened in her book)
Everton grinned. “Okay! Great! I don’t know what would’ve happened without Tyrone to help me. I’m not taking a liking to that Aloth guy.”
Ty raised an eyebrow. “What does okay mean?”
Everton’s eyes grew wide. I giggled. “We must be from all over the place. Where are you all from?”
Jocelyn spoke up first.
That was kind of hard to write! 😆 I haven’t written in Corie’s POV in a long time!
Write what should not be forgotten. — Isabel Allende
December 25, 2022 at 6:36 pm #125689Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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@keilah-h. @godlyfantasy12. @mineralizedwritings. @lightoverdarkness6. @elishavet-pidyon. @koshka. @loopylin. @theloonyone. @everyone-else-here. I’m bacckkkkkkkkk!!!!! I can’t WAIT to get back into the Character Castle and everything else here on KP!
And now that y’all have moved everyone around….hehe…I can bring in some characters that need more development.
So, I’m keeping the Boys but moving them around (I love them too much to let them go…and Godly, I think you do too. XD) but I’m pulling Leon/Lily, Ernest, Kursk, Julius, and all of my American Revolution characters out, and changing Riker back to WWII Riker like it was the last time we did the Castle. (shortly after a specific character’s death…most of y’all know who I’m talking about, I’m sure. *sobs*) But anywho…I’m keeping the boys, Frida, Alec, Adolphus, Dietrich, Himmler, Edy, and Camille, but removing everyone else and bringing back past Riker.
Now that that’s out of the way…it’s time for me to introduce some new charries! OH, and I’m bringing Hans back, heh. =/
But anywho…first off…one of my absolute FAVORITE charries…
Fin!
Name: Fin Wolfgang Müller
Age: 42
Profession: SS Officer (Colonel)
Personality: Kind, faithful, devoted, courageous, somewhat stubborn, caring, compassionate, honest, always fights for what’s right, a strong man of God
Looks: Brown, straight hair worn cut short and partially parted at the top, pale skin, gray eyes, semi-muscled build
December 25, 2022 at 6:36 pm #125690Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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Name: Erich Elias Braun
Age: 23
Profession: SS Officer (1st Lieutenant)
Personality: Stubborn, somewhat unkind, has a horrible attitude, but hard-working and devoted, loving towards his wife and three-month-old baby boy, somewhat arrogant
Looks: Bright blonde hair worn in a sort of waved quiff hairstyle, pale skin, bright blue eyes, semi-skinny build
(Broken by his past and out for revenge on the entire people group that hurt him…Jews. Has a complete internal conflict as he tries to justify the bad things he’s doing)
December 25, 2022 at 6:37 pm #125691Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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Name: Felix Heinrich Baumann
Age: 58
Profession: SS Officer (Major General)
Personality: Hard, cruel, prideful, devoted, hard-working, somewhat honest, rude, arrogant, abusive
Looks: Gray hair, pale skin, dark blue eyes, skinnier build, but has some muscles
(Hans and Himmler’s oldest brother, the Boys’ father, and Frida’s husband)
December 25, 2022 at 6:40 pm #125692Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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And finally…
Name: Jezyk Raymond Graff
Age: 16
Profession: SS Guard (Private)
Personality: Kind, sweet, loving, honest, hard-working, never gives up, always fights for what’s right
Looks: Dark brown hair worn in a sort of waved quiff, pale skin, dark brown eyes, slightly muscled built, but mostly skinny
December 25, 2022 at 6:48 pm #125693@freedomwriter76
Girl!!!! *Gives you huge hug* I missed you so much!!! I hope you had a amazing Christmas!!
Oooh…Jezyk! That’s all I’m gonna say…XDXD
Aww, yay!! I love Fin!! But *sobs* well, you know. He’s so sweet! Him and Riker’s relationship is so sweet!
YAY!!! I can’t wait for my charries to meet yours!!
#HugRikerSquad
December 25, 2022 at 8:12 pm #125703Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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Girl!!!! *Gives you huge hug* I missed you so much!!! I hope you had a amazing Christmas!!
*hugs you, tight, back* I missed you too!!!! I did! Had a great time with family and got some gifts that I will be sure to enjoy!!! 😀 I hope you had an amazing Christmas too! <3333
Oooh…Jezyk! That’s all I’m gonna say…XDXD
Oh gosh…Lol. XDXDXD
Aww, yay!! I love Fin!! But *sobs* well, you know. He’s so sweet! Him and Riker’s relationship is so sweet!
YESSS!!! OH MY GOSH, YESSSSS!!!! I love him soooo much!!!! <3333
YAY!!! I can’t wait for my charries to meet yours!!
YES!!! Can’t wait!!!!
December 25, 2022 at 8:42 pm #125704Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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So…I suppose I should get some of my charries moving, even if they aren’t with anyone at the moment, huh? 😉
Fin
They walked down the hall, their jackboots clicking against the cobblestones.
It was a castle, and it was…well, certainly old.
And they were lost.
But at least none of them were alone.
“How in the world did we get here?” Erich muttered with a roll of his eyes, arms crossed, and paired with a scowl.
Fin smiled softly. “No matter how we got here, Erich, we’ll get out…don’t worry.”
“Fin is right, Erich…and maybe this will be an opportunity. So, why don’t you stay quiet, hmm?” Hans asked, his coal eyes throwing daggers.
Erich nodded and uncrossed his arms. “Yessir.”
Hans smirked. “Good.”
Fin bit his lip. Hans’ methods of intimidation, though they worked, weren’t exactly…favorable.
And they didn’t work on everyone to begin with.
Fin glanced over at Riker, who followed them in almost complete silence.
The only time he spoke was when Jezyk, who walked beside him, spoke first.
Riker smiled after Jezyk spoke, and turned to Jezyk, whispering something back.
Fin smiled faintly. Riker had almost taken a brotherly affection to Jezyk, a role he fit in well. But, of course, he had a younger sister, so it was probably natural for him.
Just as it was for Fin.
It had to be…when you had 7 younger siblings.
Wolfgang
Leo and Jakob were gone.
Everyone was…except Joshua and Camille.
Camille was asleep in Joshua’s arms, finally spent, and Wolfgang gave his second oldest brother a worried frown, his eyebrows furrowed together. “The others…do you think they’re okay? Leo, Jakob, Reuben, Zlatan, Vulkasin, Nyx, Grimm…and…Paxton…? Do you think they’re all okay?”
“I’m sure they are, Wolfgang. We need to put them in God’s hands.”
Wolfgang nodded, even though he didn’t really know what God had to do with this, but if it comforted Joshua, it was okay.
Joshua walked over and gave Wolfgang a small smile. “Come on…let’s keep going. Let’s find the others.”
Wolfgang nodded and followed his brother.
He sure hoped everyone was okay.
(I’ll do some of the others another day or something…don’t have any ideas at the moment…XD)
December 25, 2022 at 8:53 pm #125705@freedomwriter76 SCREEEE I JUST SAW UR BACK!!! I MISSED U SOOOOOOO MUUUUUUCCCCCHHHH!!! *huuuuugs tight!!*
YES PLEASE KEEP THE BOYS!!! Oh hey maybe this can make Reuben end up with one of his brothers again, idk.
Also this’ll be cool because when November sees Riker again (if he does) he’ll know like “whoa….did…he leave and…time change?!?!” And Riker’ll be like “NOVEMBER I MISSED YA!” XD XD
#IfMarcelDiesIRiot
#ProtectMarcel
#ProtectSebDecember 25, 2022 at 8:57 pm #125706I’m glad u kept Riker in!!!
also I’ll be RPing later been having Christmas stuff but I’ll Probably RP tonight while lying in bed!
@lightoverdarkness6 @esther-c @loopylin @mineralizedwritings @freedomwriter76ALSO freedom, Ara is all by herself if u want her to meet one of ur charries!!
even one of the bad ones…up to u!!
#IfMarcelDiesIRiot
#ProtectMarcel
#ProtectSebDecember 25, 2022 at 10:02 pm #125707@freedomwriter76
Woot woot! Glad your back in the castle! Julian i suppose disappeared…. things got a bit confusing…
So we’ve got some charries that were fighting a wind, I believe that was Milo and a few others. @loopylin has a dragon who scared people lol, and the group we were in split further.
The only group I could tell you with certainty who is in it is mine, because I can’t keep track of the rest lol.
Tauren, Lesli, Mathew and Lyla (light’s charries), Paxton and Luna (godly’s charries), Carmen and Carter (loopy’s) are in our group.
Don’t worry about Kaine and everly, they fell in a hole then woke up in there world and realized it was all a dream 🤣
And Tauren just passed out because the dragon and everything in the castle was too much for him.
Oh and I had this idea of a castle villain anyone can use, he’s a guard named easton, anyone can wright him to make some drama, just don’t make him too evil XD
I like the charries your introducing! can’t wait to see them interact!
"And so I left this world just as I had entered it. Confused."
December 26, 2022 at 12:21 am #125709@freedomwriter76
AHHHH!!! You’re back!
I can’t wait to read more about Fin, and all those other charies!
And…
I may need to add in a character in desperate need of development. You see, I wasn’t going to worry too much about him because he wasn’t in the first book. But now that’s changed (mad author laugh) and I need to figure him out. So, I don’t know when I’ll introduce him and his friend (they both need work, but him particularly now), but you’ve been warned.
Anyway, I need to go work on Bible Quizzing, so goodbye for now!
First Grand Historian of Arreth and the Lesser Realms (aka Kitty)
Fork the GorkDecember 26, 2022 at 8:29 am #125711@freedomwriter76
*hugs you, tight, back* I missed you too!!!! I did! Had a great time with family and got some gifts that I will be sure to enjoy!!! 😀 I hope you had an amazing Christmas too! <3333
*Hugs you even tighter* *hears you gasping for breath* *releases you* Oh, I’m so sorry!! XD
Awesome!! That’s great!! Yes, me and my family had a great Christmas too! I got a character work book that I’m really excited about! I’ve been looking for a good Character development sheet, and that one looks really good.
Oh gosh…Lol. XDXDXD
Lol. You always choose the best looking characters!! And they fit their names perfectly!
YESSS!!! OH MY GOSH, YESSSSS!!!! I love him soooo much!!!! <3333
He is!! So PRECIOUS!!!
YES!!! Can’t wait!!!!
😊😀
Oh, and I’ve got something to ask you…*whispers* Can I be part of the protection squad?? I may have someone to protect. 😆😁
#HugRikerSquad
December 26, 2022 at 10:07 am #125719Anonymous- Rank: Knight in Shining Armor
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I completely lost track of what’s happening with Cynthia. Lol. Can y’all help? @lightoverdarkness6 @koshka @godlyfantasy12 @mineralizedwritings and (if you can) @freedomwriter76
December 26, 2022 at 11:43 am #125733@sarafini
Ack! Sorry I don’t know where your character was! If you need to move her to another group of characters, sometimes that’s whats best when it gets confusing.
"And so I left this world just as I had entered it. Confused."
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