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May 6, 2022 at 2:24 pm #110734
@koshka you’re welcome!! XD
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#ProtectSebMay 6, 2022 at 2:51 pm #110735@emilysf @godlyfantasy12 @koshka
Ok, this is hilarious!
What does everyone think of my adding another character? (I know, that might make our already jumbled narratives even harder.)
She would be in the Buteries kneading bread, and she’d either be a 15 year old lass named Winifrith(from my other series), or Viktor’s 12(about) year old sister Alyona.
Would that be too much, or do y’all think it would be fine? If it’s a good idea, than which one? They both need work.
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May 6, 2022 at 2:53 pm #110736@elishavet-pidyon GASP u should totally add another Charrie!! I vote Viktor’s sister (she can be like looking for him maybe? If they’re on good terms idk how ur story works lol) and maybe she appeared or found the Buteries and is eating already 🤣
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#ProtectSebMay 6, 2022 at 2:53 pm #110737@elishavet-pidyon ALSO thank u.
U can also put Winifreth in there if u want, that would be cool too! What book Is she from?
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#ProtectSebMay 6, 2022 at 2:54 pm #110738Vulkasin and Zlatan
He couldn’t help it anymore. Oh he tried, but November just kept adding to his mirth.
He finally got himself under control again, as Zlatan was giving him the Elder Brother look.
And then November nearly burst his reserve again. “Oooh…I just thought since food was involved, ya know, butter….” He glanced down at Ara’s arm and turned pure scarlet.
Lyn started laughing, and Vulkasin found a snag in his tunic to be fascinating since his brother was still watching him.
“Point is, we really should find some food. For all of us.” Ara said, obviously oblivious to the discomfort she was inflicting.
Sofia looked a bit bewildered. Her hands, now bandaged, rested on her knife hilt.
“Yah, food.” Zlatan addressed the group. “Do any of us now vich vay leads to ze courtyard?”
“Ze vindow of course!” Vulkasin grinned.
His brother sighed. “Last resort. Any os’er vay?”
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Fork the GorkMay 6, 2022 at 2:54 pm #110739Maybe tell us their personalities and that will help us decide??
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#ProtectSebMay 6, 2022 at 3:04 pm #110742The Gang
”I dunno, the window does seem like the quickest option,” Lyn nodded, bounding over to it and sticking half her body out. Zlatan’s face went pale, probably fearing she was going to fall out of it.
Vulkasin was motioning at her in an “I told you so!” To his brother.
”We could totally shimmy down.” Nyx agreed.
”Well… we could, but I doubt Arabella would want to try that.” She looked back and her eyes stayed on November. “And…ahh…no offense but….”
November, who was thankful Ara had released his arm, went considerably white at the sight of the window. He tugged at his curls.
“Oh. Yea. No, he’d die.”
November’s eyes went wide at the remark and he winced, looking away. The little fox was right. He was accident prone. But, the word stung, to say the least.
“NYX!” Ara cried. “He would not! But it doesn’t matter, we’re not going out the window!”
“Agreed,” Zlatan stated, his voice firm. “Ve’re going to find another vay.”
“Like?” Vulkasin cocked a brow.
@koshka @emilysf any ideas 🤣 other then the window? I thought maybe Nyx could smell for food but because the Buteries are outside idk if he could smell that far. Once they got near the entrance he might could but yea…also I hope it was ok putting that little part with Vulkasin almost challenging Zlatan at the end 🤣
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#ProtectSebMay 6, 2022 at 3:07 pm #110744Ok, I will.
*Mischievous cackling*
I do kinda want it to be Alyona, I just can’t make up my mind.
They are on good terms. Alyona is a bit of the “take me with you wherever you go, I’m with you to the end” sister, and fiercely loyal to her brother in a quiet and often unnoticed way.
Oh, and she might be a tiny bit competitive as a result.
But she has a lot of natural insecurities for her age, and she hides behind her family a little too much.
At least, that’s what I think she’s like, I’m not quite sure.
Winifrith is from an allegorical series I’m working on, and she’s basically a Preacher’s Kid that is under attack because she holds so much potential and promise and the rulers of the darkness would hate for her to see that. At least, that’s who she is in the beginning of the series. 😉
She shares many similarities with me, so I like her.
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May 6, 2022 at 3:15 pm #110747@elishavet-pidyon NOICE! My vote is still on Alyona 😂
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#ProtectSebMay 6, 2022 at 3:16 pm #110748Winifrith is fairly sensitive, with a heart for the hurting (she’d be finding something to treat Sofia’s scrapes on sight.). She struggles with communication though, and often feels alone. Oh, and loads of fear and uncertainty. However, she is a lot stronger than she thinks she is, especially when she learns to rely on The One Who Never Fails.
You have listened to fears, child. Come, let me breathe on you... Are you brave again? -Aslan
May 6, 2022 at 3:16 pm #110749I think it’ll be Alyona. 😉
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May 6, 2022 at 3:28 pm #110755Also yall might enjoy the memes I post about my charries on the Memes Inspo, etc forum page 😂
especially the ones with November since he’s just hilarious somefimes
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#ProtectSebMay 6, 2022 at 4:28 pm #110756Oh that’s fine! He’s always doing stuff like that whenever he isn’t serious…if he is ever serious.
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Fork the GorkMay 6, 2022 at 4:31 pm #110757@godlyfantasy12 @koshka @emilysf
So, here’s attempt number one for Alyona!
..and I hope it’s not out of order.
Alyona
Alyona tossed a handful of water into the dough and began to knead. It was awkward for her, bending over a raised trough like this instead of working on a board on the ground, but she tried not to show it.
If that guard realized she wasn’t one of the kitchen maids, she’d be in trouble. Or not, depending on how quickly they killed her.
‘Well, I guess you just got yourself work. If only it paid.’ But she suspected from how rude the solder had been, that this was not that kind of job.
If only she knew where Viktor had gone. He never returned since leaving to find the well.
“I hope all’s well. Surely if he can stalk a rabbit he can avoid a clumsy guard.”
She took a shaky breath and concentrated on the bread.
Over and over, punch, turn, punch. The rythem settled her mind and soon turned to music. A familiar song. She smiled and forgot for the moment how her voice trilled where stronger ones would soar.
“Born on the mountains.
Walk on the sea.
Bring them to pasture,
Come home to me.
For,
Wandering brother,
Never far be,
Leave off the water
Stay on by me
Bird of the mountains,
Wall of the sea.
Bring them to pasture,
Come home to me.”
The dough was ready, and she began to tear off lumps to form into loaves. Just like Mama had taught her.
Viktor would be hungry, after only having a bowl of snitched auleives.
“Where do you wander, brother of mine?”
You have listened to fears, child. Come, let me breathe on you... Are you brave again? -Aslan
May 6, 2022 at 4:51 pm #110760@elishavet-pidyon little does Alyona know she will ALSO soon be feeding *counts on fingers XD*
7 other ppl along with her brother XD
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