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November 5, 2022 at 6:54 pm #120883
@freedomwriter ACH! Figured but yepâŠ(donât hate me guysâŠ. DX) @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon
Grimm
A crack sliced through the air followed by a pained yelp. Nyx landed with a soft thud on the floor.
Grimmâs heart lodged in his throat as blood seeped from the large slice in the kitâs abdomen, the whip having covered most of his small form.
None of them had time to react before another crack sounded and Nyx let out a pained screech.
âNYX!â A watery scream emerged from behind Hitchens and a blur of pale skin came forward. Small arms wrapped around the little fox, covering him from anymore blows.
Everything was too fast.
Hitchens was too fast. TooâŠskilled.
Another crack.
âPAXTON!â Someone screamed, maybe it was GRIMm himself. He couldnât quite tell. It mixed with the tear-streaked cry of the little boy covering Nyx, as the whil sliced across his back, tearing open his shirt and revealing a few of the feathers that covered the curve of his spine. A few of them tore, falling bloodied to the ground.
Grimm let out a howl, and before anything else happened, he held Hitchens wrist in his grip, causing the whip to fall.Â
Grimmâs eyes burned as he stared in the dark manâs eyes.
 âYouâŠYouâŠ.â He growled, âGive me one good reason why I shouldnât kill you right nowâŠ.â
Grimmâs hold tightened. A crunch sounded beneath his grip and Hitchens groans, writhing.
âRelease me, boy,â He spat, other hand going for his sword, but he was surrounded on all sides. His eyes roved. âThe fox attacked me, not the other way around.â
Grimm growled again, anger growing as his grip grew tighter.
âG-G-GrimmâŠ.W-WulfâŠ.â A wet voice sounded, extremely soft behind him. Grimmâs eyes flashed behind him. Paxtonâs face was covered in tears, his arms holding Nyx, who was twitching, eyes wide in shock in his arms.
Grimmâs face softened slightly, realizing just how bad the situation was.
Nyx needed helpâŠ.
Now.
He swallowed.
Turned back to Hitchens. Released him.
âGet out of here. Before I make good on my threat.â Â He was inches from the manâs face, despite their age difference, he wasnât intimidated.
Hitchens huffed, gripping his coat. He turned to his young officer. Raising a brow as if to ask if he was coming.
Grimm looked at the young man. âYouâre welcome to stay. You donât have to go with him.â
âYou have no authority over-â Hitchens started.
âNeither do you. Not here,â One of the boys stepped out, growling. âThe young man is free to do what he wants while heâs here. I wouldnât want to stay with you either if I were him.â
Grimm glanced down at the whip. âEspeciallyâŠnot with this.â Grimm cracked it beneath his heel. Hitchenâs eyes burned with fury. He glared at Grimm, and then glanced at the two bleeding figures behind him. âYou will pay for this, young man. I apologize for the boyâŠbutâŠhe was foolish to get in the way. That is not my fault. I will go, as youâve said.â He turned back to Nathan. âMeijer?â
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#ProtectSebNovember 5, 2022 at 7:00 pm #120885@freedomwriter76 it didnât tag u lol
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#ProtectSebNovember 5, 2022 at 7:09 pm #120886Ah no! Paxton and Nyx! poor babies đ„ș
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November 5, 2022 at 7:14 pm #120887Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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@godlyfantasy12. THE BABIESSSSSS!!!!! DX @koshka. @elishavet-pidyon. @keilah-h.
Nathan
âMeijer?â Hitchens asked, turning to him, eyes narrowed…questioning…threatening.
Nathan looked up, meeting Hitchens’ forest green eyes with his bright blue. He shook his head. “No…sir….I’m not coming with you.”
Hitchens’ eyes blazed with fury. “Fine…Meijer…but you’ll regret this soon enough.”
“Get out of here and don’t you dare come back.” One of the men, Leo, Nathan remembered, stepped up to Hitchens, a dagger in hand. “Leave everyone alone…and get out and don’t you ever come back…understood?”
Hitchens straightened his coat, his eyes roving all over the room. He scoffed. “I shall leave, as I already said.”
And, with that, Hitchens turned and walked away.
Nathan let out a breath he hadn’t known he’d been holding.
He turned to the others, but one of the brothers, Wolfgang, and Grimm were already beside Paxton and Nyx.
Wolfgang
“Paxton…Paxton…Nyx…Nyx…it’s okay…we’re here…” Wolfgang whispered.
Paxton looked up at him, eyes full of tears.
Grimm reached for him. “It’s okay Snow…it’s going to be okay…”
(Now…where did Hitchens go…? I shall write him as well, bc he still needs some development, lol. xD Plus, he’ll run into Dawson eventually, just not quite yet!)
Hitchens
Stupid children…stupid fox…stupid…soldier.Â
But they, nor Nathan, were the one he was looking for.
Dawson was.
Stupid man.
Insolent soldier.
Hitchens scoffed.
Who did all of them think they were, speaking to him like that!?
A thud sounded as Hitchens slammed into someone.
The woman hit the floor with a curse.
“Many apologies, my lady…I was not looking where I was going…”
“You should.” The woman snarled, as he helped her to her feet.
The woman gave him a glare. “Watch where you’re going next time.” She ordered, as if she were scolding a child.
Hitchens smiled and bowed. “Apologies. I am Colonel James Hitchens.” He bent, bowed again, and kissed the back of the woman’s hand, as he’d learned to do since childhood.
The woman nodded and smiled faintly. “Nice to meet you…Colonel.” She stuck out her hand, which Hitchens shook. “I am Frida Baumann. My two sons were with me, but I sent them off in a different direction. This castle is filled with…annoying people…isn’t it?”
Hitchens nodded. “Quite so, madam. Well, I cannot let a lady travel alone, can I? May I accompany you, madam?”
Frida nodded and smirked. “Yes, you can, Colonel. Maybe we will both find whoever we’re looking for.”
Hitchens nodded and grinned. “Maybe so…”
November 5, 2022 at 7:44 pm #120888@freedomwriter76 ugh Frida and HitchensâŠmatch made in heavenâŠ(actually maybe the other placeâŠ) @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon
Grimm
Paxton was sobbing, gripping Nyx close, blood seeping into his hands as he rubbed the kitâs fur between his fingers.
Wolfgang approached speaking soothing words.
âWait. Wolfgang.â Grimm held out a hand.
The young manâs eyes lifted, brows raising in question. Others were approaching, and Grimm knew trouble would start up if they got too closeâŠ
âEveryone, just waitâŠwait.â He held out his hands, voice low, still shaking from the events, eyes floating back to Paxtonâs bloodied back, and the red and tan ball in his arms.
âWhat-?â Crosshair started, growing agitated apparently, lookingâŠtruly concernedâŠ
âJust listen.â Grimm gently got down next to Paxton. The boyâs shoulders was heaving. He looked at Grimm.
âG-Grimm! H-H-H-â He was hiccuping so bad he couldnât speak, his stutter growing worse by the second.
âShhâŠshhâŠitâs alright SnowâŠeasyâŠâ Grimm gently laced an arm over the boyâs shoulder, narrowly avoiding where the whip had grabbed him, pulling back a strand of his white hair, which was now being soaked in sweat.
The kid was a mess.
âShhâŠ.â Grimmâs eyes shot to Nyx.
The fox heaved, eyes wide, narrowed into thin slits. His breaths were hisses, thankfully not wheezes, but the two scars across his abdomen wereâŠ
NotâŠ
Not goodâŠ
The fox wasnât the size of a humanâŠand a humanâŠa whip strike hurt bad enough. On Nyxâs smaller body, both strikes had lacerated over his stomach, and half of his back.
Grimm whispered into the crying boyâs ear, âPaxtonâŠIâm gonna help Nyx, but you gotta let him go, alright?â
Paxton heaved, hiccuping again. He nodded slowly, fingers slowly untwining. Grimm slowly unwrapped his arm from Paxton and reached for the fox. âWolfgang, take Paxton.â
Wolfgang obeyed, gently helping the boy away.
âN-N-Nyx!â Paxton sobbed, reaching the fox again, but Wolfgang gently held him back.
The crowd grew close again. âDonât!â Grimm warned.
âHe needs help,â one of the boys said, brows furrowing.
âI know,â Grimm glared, but his anger quickly dissipated. He sighed. âJust trust me.â He reached for the kit.
And as soon as his fingers touched fur, Nyx let out a screech like he was dying.
His eyes shot wide, pupils becoming even more cat-like. He snapped, nearly catching Grimmâs hand in his jaws. Grimm avoided it, and was able to grab the fox by the neck, holding him to the floor as he writhed, despite the pain.
Nyx screeched, making Paxton cry all the harder.
âWhatâs wrong with him?!â Someone asked.
âHeâsâŠInâŠ.ShockâŠâ Grimm grunted, trying his best not to hurt the animal, but also keep himself free from harm.
âEasy NyxâŠEasyâŠâ He held the fox still, or as still as possible, until he finally calmed down, eyes slowly lowering and clearing, tired breaths returning. Tears escaped his multi-colored eyes.
 âL-LynâŠLâŠâ
Grimmâs eyes softened.
âDonâtâŠdonâtâŠdonât makeâŠmake meâŠsleepâŠ.not againâŠ.notâŠnot againâŠ.â
Nyxâs eyes slowly closed, breaths heaving, the only sign he was okay. Grimmâs heart thumped in his chest.
Slowly he lifted the injured fox to his chest, turning to the others, eyes portraying the question and fear he couldnât bring himself to speak aloud.
He had a little knowledge of injuriesâŠanimal injuries as wellâŠbut in the rebellion things this worrisome had been best handled by medicsâŠ.
He might could deal with sprainsâŠbreaksâŠ.But the kit had lost a lot of bloodâŠâŠ
Could any of them help him?
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#ProtectSebNovember 5, 2022 at 8:26 pm #120889@freedomwriter76 @keilah-h
Ok, the ship is a bit⊠weird. Definitely leans more towards fiction than science. Itâs small, with only about five rooms, including the cockpit and the weapon closet. It was built specifically to board other ships, so it has several mechanical arms to grab onto another ship, and a sharp beak in the middle of the arms that stabs through the wall and opens up, allowing the twins to climb through into the new ship. All this makes it very much resemble a squid. Yeah.
Anyway, hereâs a picture.
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November 5, 2022 at 8:38 pm #120890Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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@loopylin. I like it! Very nice ship! I love that it looks like a squid, lol. xD Very creative! =D
November 5, 2022 at 8:50 pm #120891Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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@godlyfantasy12. NYXXXX!!!! Not sure if mine would know what to do about Nyx…heh…but maybe Paxton a little bit…IDK…Wolfgang ends up becoming a doctor later in life tho! <3 Nathan has some medical experience tho…enough for Paxton, at least. @koshka. @elishavet-pidyon. @keilah-h.
Wolfgang
Grimm held Nyx close to his chest.
Wolfgang still held onto Paxton, who was sniffing and crying.
Suddenly, Nathan was on one knee beside him. “Paxton…can I clean up your wounds a little…?” Nathan asked softly, carefully brushing a strand of Paxton’s hair out of his eyes.
Paxton looked at Grimm.
Grimm smiled faintly. “It’s okay Snow…let him help you…”
Nathan smiled again, just as Leo got down beside Paxton on his other side. “Here, Paxton, you can squeeze my hand if it hurts at all…”
Paxton nodded and took his hand, as Wolfgang still held onto his shoulders.
Nathan carefully and slowly applied some medicine to Paxton’s cuts, as Paxton squeezed Leo’s hand, tight.
Nathan quickly finished and applied a scrap or two of bandage. “There you go Paxton…it’s okay now…” He soothed, before standing and stepping away.
Paxton slowly let go of Leo’s hand, sniffing and slightly sobbing still.
Leo stood and held out his arms. “You can come here, Paxton…”
“What about your injury, Leo?” Joshua asked with a raised eyebrow.
Leo shrugged. “Doesn’t hurt anymore.”
(I’ll leave it up to you, Godly, if Paxton goes to him or not…cause I’m not sure which he would choose. Either way, Leo won’t be hurt by anything Paxton decides…none of them will. =D)Â
November 5, 2022 at 9:25 pm #120894@koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @freedomwriter76 aww the boys are so sweet and Nathan đ I think with Grimmâs help Nathan and Wolfgang can help Nyx.
Paxton
Paxton squeezed Leoâs hand tight, leaning into him and shivering, feeling cold. Heâd had to remove his shirt for Nathan to apply the medicine. He winced with the stinging sensation, silent tears falling. Silent besides his hiccups, that was.
He could feel eyes on him now. He feltâŠa bit exposed, to say the least. And cold. And drenchedâŠ?
When Nathan was done Leo pushed a strand of hair from his face, and Paxton realize the wetness was from sweat that had formed on his brow.
Anxiety. Fear. All of the emotion, mixed with painâŠand panic.
Leo beckoned him forward. And Paxton slowly fell into his outstretched arms, squeezing his eyes shut, chest heaving.
âShhâŠitâsâŠitâs okayâŠyouâre..youâre gonna be okayâŠâ his voice was tight, his eyes looking at the bandages on the boyâs back. And the thrush of downy feathers along his spine, some still bloodied.
The still purple, healing bruises that covered his upper and lower back, seemingly endless. And even a few faint scars, thought not as large as the one he know bare.
Others stared too, he knew, but he didnât care anymore. He gripped Leo tighter, fingers trembling.
Grimm
Nyxâs body twitched in his grasp, blood finally stilling beneath Grimmâs tight hold. âOne if you, come help me.â Grimmâs voice was firm, but laced with inner panic.
He wouldnât let anyone else knowâŠespecially not with Paxton already so upsetâŠ
ButâŠ
Nyx didnât look very wellâŠ
He was paleâŠfor a fox, anyway. His usually bright fur now whiter then usual, and his breaths slow and labored. Ears drooped.
AndâŠ
Despite their constant bickeringâŠnear quarreling from the get go.
Grimm wasnât about to lose the little kit.
He wasâŠ
He was still just that.
A kit. A child.
Really, so was he, but he wasnât going to think of thatâŠnot now.
He had a pack meme to care for. He looked over his shoulder. âIf I keep him stillâŠcan some of you help me?â
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#ProtectSebNovember 6, 2022 at 12:16 am #120895@freedomwriter76
Dante
Reuben smiled faintly. âTheyâre allâŠreally niceâŠ.heh. Leo is protective, Joshua is honest, Jakob is practicalâŠand Wolfgang is reallyâŠcaringâŠyeahâŠcaringâŠheh.â
Dante got the sense that he had touched on a sensitive subject. Makes sense. Kursk said something about them being hurt by their mom.
I havenât talked to my siblings in years.
âSoâŠyeahâŠhehâŠmy brothers are really niceâŠreally.â
âHey! I zink I saw someâfing!â Kursk cried from up ahead. âDante, is zis zat ship youâre looking for!?â
Dante raced to the window. The ship sat slouched in the grass, its many mechanical arms splayed about it. The owners were nowhere in sight. He smirked.
âYeah, thatâs the one.â
He started feeling around the edge of the window.
âDoes this thing open? I could climb down from here. What are we, twenty feet up?â
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November 6, 2022 at 1:15 pm #120898@freedomwriter76 @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon yall on?
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#ProtectSebNovember 6, 2022 at 4:04 pm #120903@freedomwriter76 @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon how was everyoneâs service? Ours was incredible, amazing move of God!
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#ProtectSebNovember 6, 2022 at 4:16 pm #120905@godlyfantasy12 I was actually helping my mom at the 3-year-olds’ Sunday school….But it went great!
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November 6, 2022 at 4:17 pm #120906Iâm glad you enjoyed church today! My church was great. Got to see a lot of family friends.
Since it seems that not very many people are on right now, would you like if I added another character to meet some of your characters? You can totally say no, Iâm just kinda bored right now.
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November 6, 2022 at 4:22 pm #120907Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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@godlyfantasy12. @keilah-h. @loopylin. Glad y’all’s services were amazing! Me and my family were exhausted from all the traveling we did Thurs-Sat, so we had church at home together, plus, we had to pick up the dogs from the Boarder at 8 this morning. xD
But anywho! I’m on for at least a few minutes!
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