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May 5, 2022 at 4:52 pm #110591
@koshka Go on and rewrite it if u want! I love ur POVs!!! U can go ahead and write some more of the brothers reaction, especially to Nyx if u want cuz idk how Zlatan would take Nyx 🤣
Corvina
Corvina jerked slightly as something wet touched her hand. She looked down, finding that the girl, Zoe, was gone. She was now replaced with the snow-white form of a wolf.
A beautiful wolf, truth be told. Corvina’s eyes widened slightly, but she quickly got over her initial shock as the girl padded forward, eyes now lit up and headed tilted. She looked…almost excited now. Expectant. As if filled with some sort of…purpose.
She looked at Corvina, as though she wished to help her. Somehow.
Innocence shined through the white wolf’s eyes and Corvina had to look away, tormented by it.
Tormented by what she didn’t have.
Still, the girl-ah, wolf- stared, waiting patiently for Corvina to continue onward. She sighed.
Perhaps the girl could be of some use in this form. A keen sense of smell might help in their search. Corvina cleared her throat, looking at the wolf’s brilliant fur, refusing to focus on her bright, wide eyes.
“Huh, well…” She cleared her throat. “Nice shift, kid.” She walked past and then nodded towards the door ahead of them. “Think you can smell for any other humans?”
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#ProtectSebMay 5, 2022 at 5:11 pm #110593Okay, I just had to give Viktor some movement.
And great job, y’all! I’m enjoying reading these so, do much.
Viktor
Vikor shifted uncomfortably, conscious of the stranger’s questioning gaze.
He didn’t know if it was his hands or something else about him that had piqued the other boy’s… What was it? Suspicion? Amusement? Irritation?
The serpent, however, was more interested in the auleives, much to Viktor’s relief.
‘I wonder if it breathes fire?’ He bit his lip. ‘Best not make it mad.’
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May 5, 2022 at 5:14 pm #110594@elishavet-pidyon XD I FEEL THAT poor Viktor…
Maybe since Denali is AFK we should ummm…move Viktor??? Idk…..
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#ProtectSebMay 5, 2022 at 5:17 pm #110595Zoe
“Huh, well…” Corvina cleared her throat. “Nice shift, kid.” She stepped past and then gestured towards the door in front of them with her head. “Think you can smell for any other humans?”
Yes! Yes! Zoe bounced to it, sniffing the frame and floor, for any scent that humans leave behind. She caught a trail, one person, and wagged her tail in huge sweeps, turning back to Corvina with excited eyes. Here! Someone! Follow me!
She pranced through the door, bouncing down the hall before them. Looking back over her shoulder to make sure Corvina was following, she returned her nose to the ground and continued following the trail. It wandered from side to side, like a scared animal brainlessly seeking escape.
Looking back again, she assured herself that Corvina followed, then raced into a new room, slipping on the stones and catching herself with her claws. The trail was confused here, like there had been a muddling of paths, and she now scented several different people.
More! More! she barked, moving in a circle, trying to sort them out. She dashed back to Corvina, then around the room again. The first path went off one way, but the rest went off another. She swung her head questioningly between the two, then glanced back at the girl.
Which way? She whined, hoping Corvina would pick.
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May 5, 2022 at 5:17 pm #110596Yes indeed, poor, dear Viktor.
I don’t know either. I really want to see Kilied’s response…
It’s okay, I mean, Viktor doesn’t mind too much. Not for now.
You have listened to fears, child. Come, let me breathe on you... Are you brave again? -Aslan
May 5, 2022 at 5:27 pm #110597@emilysf hey I’ll pick up here in a few ok? Wanna give Jocelyn and them some scenes first k? Cuz I figure we’re getting ready to sorta find them? But we don’t have to reveal ourselves to them, maybe just watch them from a distance…
But for now maybe if u want to RP as Sofia?
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#ProtectSebMay 5, 2022 at 5:30 pm #110601@godlyfantasy12 cool Lina beans!
Sure! I was planning on doing a bit with her anyway, so that works for me!
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May 5, 2022 at 5:31 pm #110602Vulkasin
The foxlike creature squeaked and seemed to cock his head at Zlatan.
Lyn laughed “Don’t be silly, darling.” She pecked it on the ear at which the thing tucked it’s head into it’s paws and chirped.
“Zees is Nyx, you say?” Vulkasin ran his fingers through his grey-blonde hair and replaced his helmet. “He looks like a good friend of yours.”
Nyx lifted one paw, looked at him, then nuzzled Lyn’s neck.
Zlatan
Zlatan shifted his shield again and glanced down the hall. He wasn’t sure what to think of Lyn and her furry Nyx, but he had a vague feeling as if he had just lept from a cliff without gauging how far was the drop.
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Fork the GorkMay 5, 2022 at 6:01 pm #110620@koshka (OK SO HAVING NYX FOCUS ON ZLATAN IS SECRETLY PERFECTION. U actually have no idea because….ok…bruh. I’ll explain after this scene XD)
Jocelyn & Nyx
Nyx was looking at the brothers curiously, his eyes narrowing.
“Do we trust them? They smell like steel.” He glanced at their swords. And then at Zlatan’s black hair. Just like Ridley’s.
Ridley.
His hackles stood on edge.
”And I don’t like his hair.” He turned up his nose.
“Don’t be silly, darling!” Lyn shook her head, making the two brothers glance at her curiously. She took Nyx from November and held him in her arms, but the little fox still eyed the eldest brother warily.
She pecked Nyx on the ear. His fur grew hot with embarrassment. How was he supposed to be menacing when she kept kissing him?! He placed his paws over his head.
“Lynnie!”
“Zees is Nyx, you say?” The tallest brother, Vulkasin, asked.
Odd name, Lyn thought. Though, she couldn’t say anything. She’d heard plenty of odd names in Cirque. She nodded and Nyx peeked out from under his paws.
“He looks like a good friend of yours.” The young man grinned. He seemed quite friendly, and Jocelyn liked that.
She laughed vibrantly. “Ah, much more then that good sir!” She cuddled the little fox, to his dismay. “This is my little darling! Though, if you call him that, best be prepared to get a face full of fur.” She winked and allowed the little fox to leap from her arms. Nyx shook himself, annoyed at Lyn’s affection. He huffed, his three tails swirling around her leg. November laughed.
Arabella
While her friends were goofing around, Ara had notice Zlatan seemed quite…uncomfortable.
“Is everything alright?” She ventured to ask.
He didn’t answer, and, instead, quirked his lips and furrowed his brows, as if questioning himself on what to do. His gaze shifted from Jocelyn to Nyx and then he sighed, crossing his arms.
Ara frowned. She clasped her hands together. “I’m…I’m sorry. We should’ve mentioned there might be more of us. But…this is it. For us, anyway. We didn’t even know if Jocelyn and Nyx were here, to be honest, or where they were. But…I promise, you can trust them.”
Zlatan looked at her, his eyes softening slightly. Vulkasin and the others seemed to have noticed their conversation because they’d gone quiet.
“Definitely! We’re totally trustworthy!” Lyn exclaimed, grabbing Ara by the shoulder and beaming from ear to ear.
Nyx, however, stayed seated on the stone floor, still staring warily at Zlatan.
“Yea, sure. But what about them?”
November frowned, looking down at the little creature. Very thankful the brother’s couldn’t understand his squeaks.
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#ProtectSebMay 5, 2022 at 6:04 pm #110622@koshka SO u don’t even realize it, but having Nyx zoom in on Zlatan was so perfect because of his black hair and the way he pulled out his sword (I should’ve had Nyx notice that! It would’ve been GREAT) oh well XD we can have some tension later XD)
(BTW THIS IS A SPOILER FOR ONE OF THE BOOKS IN MY SERIES UMM SO IF U DO NOT WANT TO KNOW THEN…WHOOPS XD)
anyway, I’m Lyn’s book there’s a ton of betrayal and deceit and one of the things that happens is, she discovers her best friend (Ridley, who has black hair, and is also the love of her life, until of course this happens) killed her uncle.
Now it’s kind of a long story and it wasn’t pre meditated. It’s one of those, the Uncle was lying to Lyn this whole time too so he wasn’t exactly innocent either, and Ridley’s kinda a good boy gone mad with power and then he apologizes again in the end but still Nyx is definitely distrusting until u earn is trust, and with his loyalty to Lyn and overprotectiveness of her? Recipe for disaster if u mess with her XD so yea
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#ProtectSebMay 5, 2022 at 6:16 pm #110631Oh my! That’s PERFECT! And actually quite amusing if you know the twins’ backstory.
You see, for certain reasons related to their government’s current leader, wolves with Vulkasin’s extreme height are in pretty constant danger and suspicion.
So it’s been interesting to see Zlatan for once getting all the ‘long end of the blade’ (to use a possible expression from HoGHoS, my book).
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Fork the GorkMay 5, 2022 at 6:22 pm #110633@koshka HUH! That is funny!! I love ur charries soooo much!! Also what’s really great is I actually have a Wolf shifter in my series named Grimm (he’s Jocelyn’s love interest and he and Nyx have a very….complicated annoying little brother-Essie relationship 🤣. I sadly can’t bring him in rn because they’re ages would be slightly different (by a year or so) BUT I am thinking of WAAAAY later if this RP continues maybe the timeline will shift and they’ll be like “magically removed” and then put back in and they’ll be older XD. Like time goes by in their world but not in this one, so they’ll have met all the other charries and had their other adventures and such, and other writers can do the same 🤣
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#ProtectSebMay 5, 2022 at 6:24 pm #110634their age would only slightly differ really but if i did this I could also introduce Paxton later and I’d love to do that…but For that to happen my charries age would have to change a bit drastically…
I say drastically. Like from 14/13 to 16 lol (that’s what happens when ur series spans over multiple months/years of their life) yup it’s one of those series
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#ProtectSebMay 5, 2022 at 6:50 pm #110638Sofia
“Let’s stop and think this through.” Sofia spoke aloud, finding comfort in the familiarity of her voice against the almost deathlike silence. Like Aer.
“Don’t think of that,” she gasped, struggling to push away the storm of emotions that burst inside her. She staggered a few steps drunkenly, then paused to lean against the wall. “Don’t think of them. The children–DON’T!”
She gritted her teeth, fighting back the threatening tears with the strength of her entire body. Her hands clenched in fists and she pounded them against the rough wall, welcoming the pain from the scrapes and bruises she inflicted on herself.
“Don’t. Don’t. Don’t.” Move yourself so you don’t have to think! she chided herself, pushing away from the wall and staggering along again, her steps growing more sure. She sucked the blood off her knuckles, then let them alone. She’d bandage them later with part of her cloak.
She had to stop wandering. This dim place dug into her memory and dragged forth the worst ones, the ones she wanted to forget.
“HELLO?” she yelled, begging for another voice to answer. Anything to get her mind away from her pursuing thoughts. “Please,” she whispered, quickening her step.
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May 5, 2022 at 6:53 pm #110639@emilysf poor Sofia 🥺
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