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Naja reminding Franz to say “please.” 🤣🤣🤣 That was too funny.
LOL, yesssss!!!! 😂😂😂😂 Glad you thought it was funny!!! 😆😆😆
@freedomwriter76 I was thinking “Jareth would totally do that too” and remembered the interactions they had in the character castle. That was too cute.
"When in doubt, eat cheese crackers."-me to my charries who don't even know about cheese crackers
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@keilah-h. Oh my gosh, yesss!!! That was ADORABLE!!!!! 😍😍😍😍😍
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This looks awesome! Do you speak German? Or do you just study and implement things like that. Is this family Jewish or German?
He is perfect in Justice, yet He is perfect in Mercy, even when we fail Him. For this, He is good.
@freedomwriter76 I might add another young character sometime later…..I loved writing Jareth.
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This looks awesome! Do you speak German? Or do you just study and implement things like that. Is this family Jewish or German?
Aww, thanks!!! 💕💕💕
I do not, lol. 😅😆 But I’ve read books with some German in them and I can speak and write a bit of German, but mostly, I just implement the few words I know into my writing. 🙂
The family is German, since Jonathan is in the Hitler Youth, and Riker is an Officer in the Schutzstaffel, or, more commonly abbreviated as the SS. 😉
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Cool! I can tell this will probably get emotionally intense, as all stories set in WWII are.
He is perfect in Justice, yet He is perfect in Mercy, even when we fail Him. For this, He is good.
Oooh. That sounds so interesting!! I enjoyed reading it and am now even more intrigued in your story!! Dylan sounds really cool! 😀
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I really enjoyed reading that!! One thing I will point out though.
Riker’s sister came forward, Naja still in her arms. She looked up at Riker with a playful smirk. “Have you gotten taller or am I just mistaken?”
“Maybe you got shorter, Angelina.”
Angelina set Naja on the floor and raised an eyebrow. “You must tease me, Riker?”
Riker wrapped an arm around her, giving her a hug. “What else are older brothers for, Ang?”
Angelina wrapped an arm around him, hugging him back. “You’re a pest, but how I’ve missed you.”
“I’ve missed you too.” Riker whispered, giving her one final squeeze.
So, I can relate to Angelina in this moment, lol. My brother teases me all the time about being short. (Even though I’m not. He’s just really tall. XD) In this case, Angelina’s response feels natural enough, but I feel like it could be more so. I don’t know her personality, so what I’m saying may not apply at all. XD
Anyway, if my older brother said something like that to me, I would reply with something more like “Really?” Instead of, “You must tease me, [insert brother name]?”
And then when she says, “You’re a pest, but how I’ve missed you.” Maybe it could be changed to: “Surprisingly enough, I’ve actually missed you.”
Then again, what she says and how she says it all relates to her personality. So all of that may be of no importance. XD
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Oh wait… was I not supposed to give critique on this forum…? 😅
Oops…
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That was so funny!! I love her already!
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@esther-c. Thank you so much!!! 💕💕💕💕
And you’re okay!!! I appreciate constructive critism.
Franz….grhhhh.
Eli reminds me of this little boy I babysat one time. He wasn’t deaf but he had some disabilities and he was really sweet and clingy.
He must increase, but I must decrease.
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Aww, thanks!!!! 💕💕💕💕💕
Yw! <3<33
Ahh, IKR!? He’s just so precious!!!! 😍😍😍😍
So precious!! XDXD
If you don’t mind me asking, what is it exactly that you love about Riker??? Just kinda curious to see WHY everyone loves him…🤭’
Hmmm… lets see…
- He has a cute name lol
- He’s really relatable!
- He needs a hug 😭
- I get his struggles (not on the same level thankfully XD)
- Your love for him is infectious 🤣😂
- He seems like he cares about others! He feels really bad, but he also loves his family.
- I wanna tell him to stop letting people walk all over him! I also get that’s easier said than done.
Oof that was a long list…. XD
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So precious!! XDXD
I KNOWWWWW!!!!! 🥰🥰🥰🥰
1. He has a cute name lol
AHH, I’m sooo glad you like his name!!! It IS adorable…🥰🤭
2. He’s really relatable!
Ahh, I’m glad!!! He’s relatable to me, and I’m soo glad he’s relatable to everyone else too!!! 😁
3. He needs a hug 😭
That’s FOR SURE!!!! 😭💕
4. I get his struggles (not on the same level thankfully XD)
Me too!!! I think that’s what makes him so relatable! 😉🥰
5. Your love for him is infectious 🤣😂
LOL…I guess it is! 🥰😆😂
6. He seems like he cares about others! He feels really bad, but he also loves his family
Ahhh, IKR!?!?!? 🥰🥰🥰🥰
7. I wanna tell him to stop letting people walk all over him! I also get that’s easier said than done.
Yeah…poor baby needs to stand up to some people! 😢 He will, though…just you wait…😏🤭💕
Oof that was a long list…. XD
THERE’S JUST SO MANY REASONS TO LOVE HIMMMM!!!!!! 😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍
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