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March 17, 2023 at 10:24 am #137406
@freedomwriter76
*takes the hot cocoa* Thanks, girl!!!❤️❤️❤️
Yay, hot cocoa party!!!! 🎉😉
You’re welcome!! ❤️❤️ Yeah!! (Haha, it’s funny cuz here it’s like 64 degrees and raining but no, we’re having cocoa! XD)
❤️❤️❤️You are sooo welcome!!!! Love you too, girl!!! 💖💖💖💖
💖💖💖💖😊😊
IKR!?!?!?!? 😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭
YESS!!!! 😭😭😭😭😭
(hehe…well…actually…I’ve been thinking about it. 😭❤️🤐)
*Gasps* Oh!! So you’re telling me there’s a chance?!
Also…in other news, lol, I was listening to a song and found one that fits for Leon…It’s “Jealous Of The Angels” by Donna Taggart…and it’s just so fitting for him and Aadelheide. 😭❤️
Oh really? Ahh I’ll have to listen to it! (And probably try not to cry 😭😭😭❤️❤️)
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March 17, 2023 at 10:32 am #137408Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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You’re welcome!! ❤️❤️ Yeah!! (Haha, it’s funny cuz here it’s like 64 degrees and raining but no, we’re having cocoa! XD)
(lol…similar here, but it’s more like 30-something degrees over here. 😂)
*Gasps* Oh!! So you’re telling me there’s a chance?!
Yesssssssssss!!!! ❤️🤐
Oh really? Ahh I’ll have to listen to it! (And probably try not to cry 😭😭😭❤️❤️)
Yeah…it’s sweet and a great song…but…yeah…😭😭😭❤️❤️❤️💖💖💖
March 17, 2023 at 10:44 am #137409@freedomwriter76
(lol…similar here, but it’s more like 30-something degrees over here. 😂)
Haha, yeah!! I love spring…but it can be literally any kind of weather 😂. Like, about a week ago it was 70 something degrees, and then a few days later we had a fire in the fireplace!
Yesssssssssss!!!! ❤️🤐
Yayyyyy!!!!!!!!! ❤️ Hopefully!!!
Yeah…it’s sweet and a great song…but…yeah…😭😭😭❤️❤️❤️💖💖💖
Yeah…I’ll have to listen to it…it sounds like it could work with…
Dylan and his wife. 🤐
#HugRikerSquad
March 17, 2023 at 10:47 am #137410Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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Haha, yeah!! I love spring…but it can be literally any kind of weather 😂. Like, about a week ago it was 70 something degrees, and then a few days later we had a fire in the fireplace!
Lol, that’s how it goes!!! 😂
Yayyyyy!!!!!!!!! ❤️ Hopefully!!!
Yep, hopefully!!! ❤️❤️❤️
Yeah…I’ll have to listen to it…it sounds like it could work with…
Dylan and his wife. 🤐
WHATTTTTTTTTTTT!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?
GIRLLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
March 17, 2023 at 10:54 am #137412@freedomwriter76
Lol, that’s how it goes!!! 😂
Yep!! 😂
Yep, hopefully!!! ❤️❤️❤️
❤️❤️❤️
WHATTTTTTTTTTTT!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?
GIRLLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
YESSSSSSS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!
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March 17, 2023 at 10:56 am #137414Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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YESSSSSSS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!
I NEEDDDDDDD TO KNOW MOREEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
March 17, 2023 at 12:17 pm #137416@freedomwriter76
🥺🥺🥺😭😭 nooooo so sad XD
I like parallels in books though.
"And so I left this world just as I had entered it. Confused."
March 17, 2023 at 12:18 pm #137417Oh wait… I might know this spoiler 🤔😉
I think I might know who Dylan’s wife is lol
"And so I left this world just as I had entered it. Confused."
March 17, 2023 at 1:17 pm #137424Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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🥺🥺🥺😭😭 nooooo so sad XD
I like parallels in books though.
IKR!? 😭😭😭
Yeah…they’re fun XD
March 17, 2023 at 3:17 pm #137443@freedomwriter76
Okay….
🤐🤐🤐
Hmm….
Oh yeah, you might…🤫🤔
@both-of-you-XD
So some of my books are going to be connected, kinda like yours, Freedom, just different time periods and my characters at different ages, because I just LOVE my charries, (shocker XD) and that style of writing, and it’s so much fun to write them at different times in their lives.
I’ve been planning on this one for a while, but I just changed some of the main scenes (or well, they’re scenes but in my head lol) like yesterday XD.
So this will be a few books from now, when Dylan is about 25-30. He now has three precious children, and a beautiful wife, Lily. He’s as happy as he’s ever been.
Until the accident happens.
On their way home from visiting his family, Aunt Iris and Uncle Matthew XD And Uncle Asher, the young bachelor of the family, a car slams into their car…
On Lily’s side.
That book will be mostly on Dylan learning to forgive the people who took away his wife from him.
And I’m still wondering if Lily will die, or if she just gets hurt really bad, because Dylan has already gone through so much, the poor baby 😭😭😭.
What do y’all think? And I’m still figuring out the details lol.
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March 17, 2023 at 3:23 pm #137445Yes, Dylan!!!
He’s my fave of your charries!! 😁
Great scene!! 😄
@freedomwriter76
Is it bad that I’m kinda feeling bad for Felix?? XD
And sorta random question:
Do you write from everyone in the family’s POV?
Write what should not be forgotten. — Isabel Allende
March 17, 2023 at 3:25 pm #137447Yes, Dylan!!!
Yes!!! Ah I love that part when he finally has had enough 😅😂🤭
He’s my fave of your charries!! 😁
Yeah, he’s one of my fav’s too!! Aww thank you sister!!! ❤️❤️❤️
Great scene!! 😄
Thank you!!! ❤️❤️😊
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March 17, 2023 at 3:26 pm #137448Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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Is it bad that I’m kinda feeling bad for Felix?? XD
And sorta random question:
Do you write from everyone in the family’s POV?
Nope, not bad at all…he may even get a redemption arc. 🤐
And lol, no…but pretty close XD
Felix/Hans get their own book, The Boys do too, as does Himmler, and also Adolphus, so basically, everyone except Frida, Dietrich, Annalise, and Steffi😂
AHHH, I LOVE IT…but…also….😭😭😭😭😭😭😭
BUT I LOVE THE STORY!!!!! ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
Just…y’know…😭
March 17, 2023 at 3:53 pm #137454@freedomwriter76 @lightoverdarkness6 @anyoneelse
You guys… I’m starting a short story!!! EEEEEECK!!!
Im very excited, if you can”t tell. It’s first person pov, which isn’t my usuall, here’s a little snippet for you guys! It’s called “Bucket List”
I cross my arms as we walk, wincing as my twisted ankle comes in contact with the ground.
“I hate this. I hate all of this.” I say, anger twisting my voice.
I listen to Archie’s pause over my radio.
“I know.” Archie sounds frustrated for once.
I try in vain to burry the sickening pleasure of knowing he’s not perfect.
“I’m getting tired of hearing about it—” Archie pauses to cough. “It kinda ruins the experience.” He gestures up at the tall old growth trees. I know he’s referring to the forest. Although not as nice as the ones back home, it’s the best one we’ve seen in a while.
“Experience? What experience? Getting sent on a suicide mission?” My voice cracks slightly with anger. “AND HOW COULD IT BE ANY MORE AWFUL THAN WALKING TOWARDS OUR DEATHS?!”
Archie turns towards me, his body slouching. I hear him sigh over the radio in my helmet.
“Merissa, here’s the deal. I’m on limited time, and you’re ruining the last of it. WHY? WHAT’S YOUR PROBLEM?!” He uncrosses his arms, leaning forwards towards me.
“ARCHIE WE’RE GOING TO DIE!” I pause, feeling my body shake. “And you’re out here trying to have some kind of a vacation?”
“No. I don’t want a vacation. But If I’m going out like this I won’t have my life be one of arguing, anger and resentment.”
I can hear Archies breathing speed up over the mic as he turns away. I wince, listening to his ear rattling cough start again. A constant at this point in my life, I’d deemed it to be the most annoying sound on planet earth. Was there anything better described as a earworm than the sound of somebody else’s ruckus coughing transmitted directly into your ear? I turn away, shaking my head in annoyance. Archie wheezes as he tries to catch his breath. I turn, looking towards him as he leans over.
“Hey.” I cringe at the embarrassment of involuntarily walking towards him. “You alright?” I lean over to try to see his face through the darkened glass shield.
He sits down, likely tired by the coughing fit. I look down at the air monitor on my wrist, it reads clean. Perhaps it’s the lovely—perhaps it’s the awful trees. I just tripped over one of them yesterday, in fact. I reach over towards Archie, unlatching his face shield and pulling it up so he can get some fresh air. I plop down a couple yards away from him, back turned. I’m not sure I want to see his reaction. I stand, walking along the edge of the riverbank. I flip up my own shield, enjoying a break from the grey tint it applies to everything. I stare into my reflection in the river water. It wavers slightly, my bright blue eyes mixing with the colorful trash on the river bottom. I watch as a discarded plastic spoon floats away down the river.
“Thanks.” Archie says softly.
I turn towards him briefly, not without a stab of guilt.
“Yeah.” I say stiffly, trying to hide the compassion wanting to leak out of every inch of me.
My reflection wavers in the water. I feel the pain trying to surface as I look into my reflection. I stare back at myself, my eyes empty, grave, and angry. My dark grey camo armor holds a few dents, and my helmet shows more than a few signs of wear. My face sags with exhaustion, even though I got a full night’s sleep yesterday.
“I want to stay here for a little while before we move on.”
“Sure.” I respond flatly.
I watch out of the corner of my eyes as Archie removes his helmet, setting it in the sparse grass beside him. He tosses his dark brown hair back, and I think for a moment I’ve seen him smile. He turns his face up, letting the slight breeze wash over him. I look away, noticing my usual jealousy towards him replaced with guilt. He coughs loudly, his small moment of tranquility jarred out of existence.
"And so I left this world just as I had entered it. Confused."
March 17, 2023 at 4:01 pm #137455Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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