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March 16, 2023 at 6:03 pm #137245Anonymous
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Oh okay!! I’ll have to listen to it. WAIT…is that the one that says ‘be careful little feet,’ or something like that? I think I’ve heard it before. Is it on Felix’s playlist?
It’s SO SAD and TRUE ugh
Yeah, it’s that one!!! 🤩 Yesssss…it’s…on Felix’s playlist, and…just…😭😭😭😭
YESSSS!!!!!!! HE WILL!!!!!!! 😄😄😄🤩🤩🤩🤩
*jumps up and down* AHHH, I’M SO HAPPY!!!!!!! 😍😍😍😍😍😍
March 16, 2023 at 6:12 pm #137246@freedomwriter76
Yeah, it’s that one!!! 🤩 Yesssss…it’s…on Felix’s playlist, and…just…😭😭😭😭
YESS!!! Ahh it’s so sad and 😭😭😭😭
*jumps up and down* AHHH, I’M SO HAPPY!!!!!!! 😍😍😍😍😍😍
Aww yay!! (Me too!!!) 😍😍😍🤩🤩🤩
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March 16, 2023 at 6:16 pm #137248Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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@lightoverdarkness6. SOOOO GLAD HE GETS REDEEMED!!!!!! 😍😍😍😍😍
(btw, do you wanna chat in The Chat Chat if you have time? (i always love talking with you. ❤️) And if you ever wanted to, you can RP in the regular character castle as Matthew again, since Min won’t be on a whole lot. 😊)
March 16, 2023 at 7:16 pm #137288@freedomwriter76 YESS ME TOO!!!! 😍😍😍
I’m sorry I had to get off, I was making dinner with my mom!
Aww thank you!! I love talking with you too! ❤️
I might be able to chat some later, after I eat dinner! My fam will probably be watching March Madness basketball *eyeroll* XD so if they are then I can talk then! 😀
And I’ll try to RP later tonight! Thank you girl!
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March 16, 2023 at 9:21 pm #137359@freedomwriter76 @godlyfantasy12 @loopylin @princesachronicle22 @thearcaneaxiom @felicity @mineralizedwritings @euodia-vision @esther-c @any-one-else
Here’s the next part!!! 🙂
“Oh Asher,” I whispered softly.
The boy looked terrified. His eyes darted around, but…with less alertness than usual. His normally bright blue eyes were dull and he struggled to keep them open. As I watched, he blinked five times in succession.
He must be so exhausted, I thought.
His hands were bound tightly behind his back, his feet were chained to impede his walking.
His face was dirty and he had a bruise above one eye, and his wavy hair was disheveled and tangled.
I watched with an aching heart as he slowly looked about the room, assessing his surroundings. When he spotted me, he stopped, and his eyes brightened considerably.
My heart leapt at his joy at seeing me, but then sank once more as I remembered suddenly what I was tasked with completing.
I was hit with the full meaning of what my father wanted me to do. My father…he wanted me to kill someone. To take someone’s life. And a young boy, at that.
Could I really do it? If my life depended on it, if I somehow had to…could I make myself do it? And, more importantly, was there a way I could save Asher?
Suddenly, I was jerked back to reality at the harsh voice of the muscular man.
“Move it!” He commanded, and before Asher could react, he shoved the boy roughly. Normally, as quick and agile as Asher was, (as I had learned while attempting to kidnap him) he would’ve kept his feet, maybe wobbled a bit, but nothing more. But with his hands bound so tightly behind his back, his feet tied tightly as well, and he had been drugged, for goodness’ sake! He was probably very confused and groggy, and the merciless shove came when he wasn’t expecting it. He started to fall forward.
I stood there, helplessly watching as he leaned backward to avoid hitting the floor face first. He almost balanced himself out when his impatient captor pushed him once more, this time more forcefully.
Asher’s eyes widened as he stumbled, then slowly started to fall. My own eyes widened as well. The glossy concrete floor was rock solid, and could easily crack your skull. He was about to clash with the hard surface, and I was pretty sure which would win.
Without thinking, I lunged for Asher, my arms stretched out in front of me. I collided into him with a grunt, reversing his fall forward. As we hit the floor, I heard Asher gasp as the breath was knocked out of his lungs. A sharp pain shot through the arm that I fell on and I winced, my breath hissing through clenched teeth. Slowly, I leaned up, testing my arm. It buckled, and I cried out softly in pain. I tried again, pushing myself up with my other arm.
My eyes flitted to Asher. He lay flat on his back, his arms awkwardly pinned under him in a painful looking position. His eyes were wide and glassy as he gasped for breath.
“Asher! Are…are you okay?!” I asked, concern filling my voice.
After a moment, he nodded, slowly getting his breath back.
“Y…yeah…I’m f-fine,” he said a little breathlessly.
I sighed with relief. “That’s…that’s go–,” I was interrupted by the sound of loud laughter. I grimaced at the sound. I knew exactly who was making such a noise, and I wasn’t surprised. Living with him for all nineteen years of my life, I had thought that I knew him better than anyone. The events of this week had more than slightly changed my resolve.
The maniacal laughter continued, but still, I didn’t look at Vance. I had a peculiar feeling–heck, what am I saying? I had had about thirty different peculiar feelings in the last few minutes–but if I didn’t look at him…then everything would be fine. It would all be a dream, a terrible dream.
Instead, I watched Asher’s reaction. His gaze was directed up and directly behind me, eyes wide, mouth slightly agape. His breathing was rapid and quickly becoming more so.
I studied Asher’s terrified expression, the laughter of Vance–and the rest of his cronies who had joined in– bouncing around the room, seemingly growing louder, and warped. The voices contorted into monstrous voices and a headache pounded in my temples.
Suddenly, I felt at peace. The laughing hadn’t stopped. No…but it had grown quieter, soft, harmless. I closed my eyes, breathing deeply. Then, opening them, I focused on Asher once more.
I forced the truth into my mind, not daring to let myself pretend to not realize the severity of the situation.
My father…wants me to kill someone. A boy. He will not let me shrug off this so-called ‘responsibility.’ This boy…Asher, I care for him. And I will not let anything else happen to him.
I felt a hot anger rising in me.
I had thought that if I didn’t look at him…then everything would be okay, it would all be a dream.
It’s not a dream, I thought. This is real.
I gritted my teeth and pushed myself off of the floor, my arm aching, but I refused to acknowledge it.
I kept my back to Vance and the rest of his cronies, and I could feel their eyes on me as I held out a hand to Asher, silently imploring him to trust me.
His gaze slowly moved around the room, coming full circle to my outstretched hand. I forced a smile, my heart and thoughts racing. He studied my face, fear and uncertainty evident in his glance. A small smile spread across his face, and he took my hand. I helped him up from the floor.
Then…
I’ve stayed silent for too long. I’ve always known what was at work here, what my father was really doing…but I just pushed it away with the same old ‘Oh no, surely not.’
No longer.
I turned to face Vance, my eyes sparkling with fury, chin up, heart racing.
But a peace filled my soul, and I knew that I was doing something right, at least.
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March 16, 2023 at 9:34 pm #137365Woah, girl your writing has improved leaps and bounds since you first came here on kp! Like seriously, it’s gotten so good! 💗 Poor asher…
*Hug*
Oh! Was I not allowed to do that? *glares*
SOMEBODY HUG THE POOR BOY OK 😭😭😭
"And so I left this world just as I had entered it. Confused."
March 16, 2023 at 9:40 pm #137366Aww GIRL!!! That means soo much to me!!! Thank you so much!!! ❤🥲🥰❤🥰
I have been able to tell that it’s been getting better too!! I’m so grateful to all of my awesome, amazing, great friends here on KP for the encouragement and just reading you guy’s amazing writing has had an impact on mine!! Thank y’all so much!!
And OF COURSE you can hug him!! He’s like the main one of my charries that would appreciate it the most!! 🥰❤
*Joins you in hugging him*
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March 16, 2023 at 9:42 pm #137368You are welcome! <33
So glad our writing has impacted yours! I’ve experienced the same thing here.
I actually got the sentence tag “smiled faintly” from Godly’s writing lol
Aww yay! Let’s just all hug Asher now 😭😭
*Gives him hot coco*
"And so I left this world just as I had entered it. Confused."
March 16, 2023 at 11:13 pm #137386@lightoverdarkness6 AHHHH ASHER 😭 AND DYLAN!!! AHHHH!!! Love them!
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#ProtectSebMarch 17, 2023 at 8:28 am #137398Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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@lightoverdarkness6. AHHH, I LOVE IT!!!!!!!! 😍😍😍😍😍😍
*hugs both Dylan and Asher tight*
Min is right, girl!!! Your writing has gotten SO GOOD!!!!!! 🤩❤️👏🏻🎉🎊 You are doing an absolutely AMAZING job!!!! ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
March 17, 2023 at 9:05 am #137401You are welcome! <33
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So glad our writing has impacted yours! I’ve experienced the same thing here.
I actually got the sentence tag “smiled faintly” from Godly’s writing lol
Yeah!! That’s awesome!! 😊 KP is just amazing. Well, not as much KP as the people in KP 😊.
XD haha, yeah, ‘smiled faintly’ is a good one! One of my favorites is ‘smiled wryly’…Dylan does that a lot lol 😭😭
Aww yay! Let’s just all hug Asher now 😭😭
Yes!! 😭😭❤️❤️💔💔
*Gives him hot coco*
*drops 10+ marshmallows in it* There! XD
AHHHH ASHER 😭 AND DYLAN!!! AHHHH!!! Love them!
AWWW THANK YOU!!!! ❤️❤️❤️❤️ And AHHH IKR?! 😭😭
@freedomwriter76
AHHH, I LOVE IT!!!!!!!! 😍😍😍😍😍😍
AWW THANK YOU GIRL!!! ❤️❤️❤️❤️
*hugs both Dylan and Asher tight*
Yes!! Both my bois need some love ❤️❤️😍😍😭😭
*Hugs them tight* *Asher’s hot cocoa spills all over me*
XDXD
Min is right, girl!!! Your writing has gotten SO GOOD!!!!!! 🤩❤️👏🏻🎉🎊 You are doing an absolutely AMAZING job!!!! ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
AWW THANK YOU SO MUCH!!!! AHHH Y’all are making my day!!! ❤️❤️❤️😭😭
🥰❤🥲😊🥰❤🥲😊🥰❤🥲😊
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March 17, 2023 at 9:09 am #137402Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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AWW THANK YOU GIRL!!! ❤️❤️❤️❤️
You are SOOOO welcome!!!!! ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
Yes!! Both my bois need some love ❤️❤️😍😍😭😭
*Hugs them tight* *Asher’s hot cocoa spills all over me*
XDXD
Yes they do!!!! 😭❤️🤩😍
Haha, whoops! XD *grabs napkins and hands them to you* Here you go. Sorry Asher, we’ll get you more hot cocoa!!! Oh, and, *hands Dylan a cup*, there we go, you get some too. 😂
AWW THANK YOU SO MUCH!!!! AHHH Y’all are making my day!!! ❤️❤️❤️😭😭
🥰❤🥲😊🥰❤🥲😊🥰❤🥲😊
You are sooooooooo welcome, girl!!!!!❤️❤️❤️Ahh, I’m so glad!!!!❤️❤️❤️
March 17, 2023 at 9:20 am #137403Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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@godlyfantasy12. @mineralizedwritings. @lightoverdarkness6. @gwyndalf-the-wise. @princesachronicle22. @thearcaneaxiom. @keilah-h @anyone-else-I’m-forgetting-lol!
Okay…so…uhm, y’all know how Leo feels like he’s failed his brothers because they’ve been hurt?
I wrote this (UNCOMPLETED LOL) scene a bit ago for my possible WWI WIP…and…uhm…yeah…
…his father thought the same.
THERE IS A PARALLEL BETWEEN LEO AND FELIX!!!!!! 😧😧😧
Silence fell as the world plunged into darkness.
He was on leave, finally away from the filthy trenches, but he still couldn’t sleep…knowing that the war was far from over…knowing that at any moment his comrades…his fellow soldiers…his friends…his brothers…could die.
Maybe they were dying now.
His grip on the railing tightened, making his knuckles turn white.
“You’re still awake, darling?”
Felix turned to face his wife as she stepped out onto the balcony. She smiled, walking over to be at his side.
Felix wrapped his arms around her, pulling her close, kissing her head. “Adinah, darling…why are you up?”
“I was about to ask you the same, darling Felix. I was looking for you, and besides, the baby has a toothache and isn’t sleeping right now. Martha is holding him right now.”
Felix nodded. Frau Adelmann was an old friend of Adinah’s, and she now worked for them as a cook and housekeeper while her husband fought in the war.
He held his wife closer. “I’m just…thinking about the war…my brothers…”
Adinah slowly nodded, reaching up to kiss his jaw. “I have no idea what you’ve been through during this war…and I know you and your brothers have been through-“
“It’s all my fault, Adinah.”
Adinah looked up at him, her dark brown eyes questioning, searching, seeking. “Felix…what do you mean?”
Felix let out a deep breath and stepped away from his wife, letting her go, instead gripping the balcony again. “…I failed my brothers.”
March 17, 2023 at 10:09 am #137404@freedomwriter76
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Yes they do!!!! 😭❤️🤩😍
Haha, whoops! XD *grabs napkins and hands them to you* Here you go. Sorry Asher, we’ll get you more hot cocoa!!! Oh, and, *hands Dylan a cup*, there we go, you get some too. 😂
XD *takes napkins* Thanks! *See’s Asher’s horrified expression* *Hugs him*
*Dylan takes cup with a smile* *I hand one to you*
Hot cocoa for everyone!! 😂
You are sooooooooo welcome, girl!!!!!❤️❤️❤️Ahh, I’m so glad!!!!❤️❤️❤️
❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️ Yes!!! Thank you!! Love ya sister! ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
And THAT SCENE AHHHH!!!!! FELIX!!! 😭😭😭😭
Leo and Felix ARE so much alike there!!! Ughh the precious babies!!! 😭😭
(Does Felix get a redemption arc?)
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March 17, 2023 at 10:14 am #137405Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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XD *takes napkins* Thanks! *See’s Asher’s horrified expression* *Hugs him*
*Dylan takes cup with a smile* *I hand one to you*
Hot cocoa for everyone!! 😂
*takes the hot cocoa* Thanks, girl!!!❤️❤️❤️
Yay, hot cocoa party!!!! 🎉😉
❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️ Yes!!! Thank you!! Love ya sister! ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
❤️❤️❤️You are sooo welcome!!!! Love you too, girl!!! 💖💖💖💖
And THAT SCENE AHHHH!!!!! FELIX!!! 😭😭😭😭
Leo and Felix ARE so much alike there!!! Ughh the precious babies!!! 😭😭
(Does Felix get a redemption arc?)
IKR!?!?!?!? 😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭
(hehe…well…actually…I’ve been thinking about it. 😭❤️🤐)
Also…in other news, lol, I was listening to a song and found one that fits for Leon…It’s “Jealous Of The Angels” by Donna Taggart…and it’s just so fitting for him and Aadelheide. ❤️😭
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