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December 3, 2024 at 2:58 pm #190839
I’m glad it’s a little intriguing! He wrote it because he always told himself he would, but he has weird physical and mental conditions that make it hard for anyone to take him seriously. He’s trying to feel content.
The letter isn’t even going to make it to the school because of plot conflict.
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December 3, 2024 at 6:54 pm #190845@whalekeeper Well now I’m sad too lol. Love it though
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December 3, 2024 at 7:13 pm #190846*“Love it” referring to your writing, not being sad
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December 23, 2024 at 12:39 am #192685@loopylin @whalekeeper @freed_and_redeemed,
Tauren spins around under the evening rays, filtering down through the canopy above. He laughs, pushing his curls out of his eyes.
“Les..!” He shouts, breathless from running around. Lesli smiles as Tauren spins her around, her bare feet gliding over the grass. She laughs, but it feels forced.
“Doesn’t this feel so great?” Tauren says, gazing off into the sunset.
“The sun?”
Tauren pauses, looking back at Lesli. “Starting over.” He smiles.
Lesli’s breath catches in her throat as she looks up at Tauren. “Oh—”
“—I guess.”
“It’s hard to make changes, but I couldn’t be happier with this. Thanks Les. I never would have had the courage without you.” Tauren smiles, wrapping Lesli in a hug.
“Yeah.” Lesli smiles, her head resting against his shoulder.
“What are we going to do next? I think there’s a river down the way—” Tauren’s voice fades as Lesli looks around the beautiful forest.
“Beautiful things are meant to be shared.” Martha smiles, warm and bright, as she hands Lesli a copy of her photo collection.
***
“Mommy! Picture!”
“Please?”
“Please!
“Here?”
Lesli nods, running in front of a bright pink shop sign and posing for a picture.
“Aww isn’t that a good one!”
*Snap*
“Look at these Les! “Tauren says, crouched over a pile of mushrooms sprouting from the ground. “—I should write home about these—did you see—”
Tauren turns around. “What’s… what’s goin on?”
“I dunno Tauren…” Lesli sighs, stuffing her hands in the pockets of her overalls. “I’m having fun too…” She kicks a pine cone out of the green grass of the grove.
“I like it here but it doesn’t feel like home.”
Tauren scratches the back of his head. “Oh, yeah. I miss home sometimes too.”
“I… feel like I’m missing a place that doesn’t exist.” Lesli says, pacing across the grass. “It never goes away, I just forget about the feeling when I get busy. Whenever we’re trying to reflect or enjoy a moment, it comes back.”
“Couldn’t you like—”
“Well—”
“It’s just hard because I know you’re really happy right now, and I don’t want to bring you down. I mean that I want to be happy with you, but I’m getting tired of pretending.” Lesli sighs.
“—You mean you haven’t been happy this whole time?” Tauren frowns.
“—Well not the whole time. But I’m only happy when I forget how I was feeling before.”
“Hmm…” Tauren sighs, plopping down on the ground. “Maybe—Maybe you can just forget more often.”
“I mean we’ve got a whole new life here.”
“I know I know. It should be out of sight out of mind but it seems to be the opposite. I can’t stop thinking about the past.” Lesli sits down next to Tauren.
“You could just start over completely, I mean I’ve only ever heard you say bad things about your past. You’re in the new place, you’ve got new friends… I mean you have a new life here practically. Isn’t that what you came here to do?”
“Hmm… I wish it was that easy.” Lesli pulls at the grass.
“Come on Lesli! This place is the best thing to ever happen to us, and we’re in the prime of our lives.” Tauren smiles, his eyes sparkling in the dawning starlight. “Live something worth writing about!” Tauren says, squeezing her arm.
Lesli leans over, covering her face with her hands.
What was I thinking, I can’t expect you to understand.
“Ah! I’m sorry Les—did I say something? What was it…” He wraps his arms around her, holding her.
“—It’s ok Tauren.” Lesli gets up, wiping a tear from her eye. “I’m just a little overwhelmed right now.”
“Oh ok. I thought I did that to you!” Tauren laughs relieved, starting off towards their cabins.
“It’ll get easier Les.”
Lesli fakes a smile, turning away to wipe a tear.
I really hope you guys get all of the nuances of this interaction because I’m so happy with how it came out lol 😭😭
- This reply was modified 2 weeks ago by MineralizedWritings.
"And so I left this world just as I had entered it. Confused."
December 23, 2024 at 9:01 am #192701Yayy! <3 Poor Les. She just needs to find the words right now. I like how she needs time to figure it out, because it’s honestly more realistic than reciting your inner conflict easily.
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December 23, 2024 at 12:32 pm #192731Aw, poor Lesli. That scene is so sweet but sad <3
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December 23, 2024 at 1:36 pm #192740Tyyy
Yeah I want it to take some time so she can have a negative character arc hehe
Also idk if you noticed but Tauren literally told her her pain wouldn’t be worth living/writing about 😭😭 he just doesn’t get that it takes time to process trauma. But he has good intentions of course.
tyyy
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- This reply was modified 2 weeks ago by MineralizedWritings.
"And so I left this world just as I had entered it. Confused."
December 23, 2024 at 11:08 pm #192772Yeah I noticed! It’s a hard balance between trying to keep up someone’s spirits and trying to erase the problem with positivity. I bet Tauren just hasn’t had enough time to think about what qualifies as one intent or the other.
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December 24, 2024 at 12:08 am #192778Yeah I think he just wants her to move on and have some fun 😭😭
"And so I left this world just as I had entered it. Confused."
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