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August 24, 2023 at 7:56 am #154548
@FREEDOMWRITER76
NOOOOOO RIKERRRRR 😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭
AAHHHH IT’S SOOOO SADDDD
😭😭😭😭😭😭
I love your writing sooo much!!!! But…
FrEeDoM Noooo DO NOT hurt the J baby pleaseeee 🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺
And
HANS 😤😡😤😡😤😡
#HugRikerSquad
August 24, 2023 at 1:04 pm #154606Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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I KNOW, THE BABY BOI!!!!! 😭😭😭
I knowwwwwww, i’m so sorryyyyy *offers you tissues and cookies*
ahh, tysm!!!! 💖💖💖
idk if it’ll happen or not…but for now…yes…it has to happen to the J…and i’m so sorryyyyyyyyy 😭😭
ugh, ikr!? The evil man…😤😡
August 25, 2023 at 5:42 pm #154738@FREEDOMWRITER76
😭😭😭😭😭😭
I knowwwwwww, i’m so sorryyyyy *offers you tissues and cookies*
it’s okayyyyy 😭 I’ll be ok eventually 🥺 Awww thank you *takes a cookie and gives you a hug*
ahh, tysm!!!! 💖💖💖
💖💖💖 You’re soooo welcome girl!!!
idk if it’ll happen or not…but for now…yes…it has to happen to the J…and i’m so sorryyyyyyyyy 😭😭
*whispers brokenly* noooooo 😭😭😭😭😭😭 it’s ok…at least he gets to be happy in heaven 😭🥺💖💖
ugh, ikr!? The evil man…😤😡
yesss ugh 😤😡
#HugRikerSquad
August 25, 2023 at 5:50 pm #154739@freedomwriter76
ok…
so…
I just saw on the SHIPS SHIPS AND SHIPSSSSS (lol) forum…
Jezyk&Edyta 😭
The baby has a love interest? NOOOO 😭😭😭😭😭
THAT MAKES IT SO MUCH WORSE 😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭
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August 27, 2023 at 8:08 pm #154827Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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@lightoverdarkness6 @godlyfantasy12 @koshka @elishavet-pidyon @keilah-h @anyone-else-idk-heh
Okay…I have finished another chapter…AND Y’ALL!!!! I AM ONLY A CHAPTER (or two…😂😂) FROM FINISHING MY BOOK, AHHHHHHHH!!!!! 😭💖💖😭
but anywhoooooooooo, remember when I said things were about to get worse for my Bois, my BABIES!?
Well…here’s that “worse”…😭😭
TRIGGER WARNING: ANGST, SADNESS, ETC…PSYCHOLOGICAL TORTURE AND MENTIONED/IMPLIED CHARACTER DEATH
Days upon days of questions…interrogations…torture.
Riker revealed nothing, unwilling to betray anyone he had worked with in the Violet Iris resistance group.
But he was beginning to break.
Riker’s body trembled. Blood trailed from the injuries covering his body. He stayed on his hands and knees on the cold floor of the interrogation room.
He closed his eyes, tight.
No…no…please…not…not Jezyk. He was only sixteen!
Slick shined jackboots clicked against the floor, surrounding, hounding, mocking. Hans clicked his tongue. “Thought you could get away with lying, did you? Did you seriously think you would be able to keep everything from us? Luckily for us, Jezyk broke after he saw us try to get information out of you with a specific tactic.” Hans chuckled. “I suppose Jezyk just couldn’t stand the water.”
Riker slowly opened his eyes. He couldn’t get his breath to even out.
He remembered seeing Jezyk standing off to the side, eyes wide, tears coursing down his cheeks as Hans and a couple other officers tried to get information out of Riker by making him feel as if he was about to drown.
After that moment of seeing Jezyk, all he remembered was darkness.
Hans chuckled, low. “Well, at least he had the courage to say something.”
Something hard hit the floor with a thud.
A medal of the Swastika, originally silver, but now it was red. Jezyk’s.
Riker’s head swam. His head began to throb. “No…please…no…”
“Disobedience doesn’t come without a price.” Hans bent down and gripped Riker’s jaw, forcing their eyes to meet.
“Jezyk was a child and you…you…”
“He’s only one among the many,” Hans shrugged, “for it is simply a part of restoring the glory of the Third Reich.”
“By making sure we have no heirs left after us?”
Hans grinned. “We only get rid of the ones that are undesired for the Reich. Jezyk was a traitor. We can’t have more of those now, can we?”
“Jezyk did what he knew was right. You shouldn’t kill a child under any circumstance.”
“If anyone dares to hinder the Third Reich, I have every right to rid the Fatherland of them.”
So…twisted.
Riker tried to pull away, but Hans had a tight grip. “That doesn’t make it right. When has murder ever been okay?”
Hans laughed and smiled. “Oh, you foolish child. Don’t you realize how much the world has changed? Don’t you realize that the rules are different now? The world has moved on and left foolish children like you behind.”
Riker finally pulled away from his grip and sat up, smacking Hans’ hand away when he tried to grab him again. “Don’t call me a child.”
Hans smiled, unfazed. “You can certainly act like one. The Fatherland is not the same one you once knew. It’s better now…stronger. And once the Third Reich gets back its glory, we will improve the rest of the world as well.”
“By murdering the people that don’t agree with your view?”
Hans sighed. “Oh Riker…you poor, foolish, stupid child. How is what I want to do any different than what you did?”
“…What?”
“Jezyk died because you pulled him into your mission. ‘Save Jews to make a better world’, correct? Though your beliefs are skewed, I will say I do admire you for being able to build an army so quickly.”
“That’s not what I…”
“And now Jezyk is dead. All because of you.”
Riker’s body trembled.
No…he didn’t…he didn’t mean to.
“You pulled him into saving Jews. Something Fin started…but you took it even further. You did well for a time. But taking it so far…why? Why did you risk everything for people you didn’t even know?” Hans’ fingers wrapped in Riker’s hair. He pulled Riker’s hair to make their eyes meet once again. “Why did you take it so far?”
“It…it was the right thing to do.” Riker whispered, stumbling over his words.
Jezyk was dead too. And all because of…because of…him.
Hans smiled and released Riker’s hair, instead grabbing Riker’s jaw. “Why did you risk everything for people you didn’t know, I’ve asked myself, over and over again…but I believe I have finally come to a conclusion.”
Riker stared Hans down. “You don’t even know what’s up and down, so how would you know?”
Hans smiled, unreactive.
“You were trying to buy forgiveness.”
Riker almost opened his mouth, to protest, to say no, he was doing it because it was right. And he was. But…Fin’s words came back. “…Are you trying to earn atonement?”
No…he wasn’t. He was trying to do what was right…But that didn’t mean he wasn’t doing both.
Hans released Riker’s jaw.
Riker’s gaze fell. He stared at the floor as it spun. No, he…he couldn’t earn atonement.
“You thought you could somehow earn forgiveness? You thought you could buy your way into being accepted? You believe in all of the religious stupidity, so…you thought you could bribe your way into Heaven?” Hans’ boots encircled him, each step sending a throb through Riker’s head.
“No…I didn’t…I didn’t…”
“You seriously thought you, a traitor, a low life, a murderer, a mistake, could ever be forgiven? You thought by being a so-called ‘good man’ you could bribe your God into stopping the suffering you’re destined for?”“That’s not what…not what I…meant. I didn’t…I didn’t…believe that.”
Hans chuckled. “Oh, but on the contrary, I know you did. And it was a foolish…stupid…childlike idea. You are a foolish child for ever thinking you could even ever be forgiven. And you pulled others in, trying to buy your way to Heaven. Jezyk trusted you, Riker…” Hans got down onto one knee in front of Riker; Riker looked up, met his eyes, “…and you killed him.”
Hans stood.
“I…I…I didn’t…I didn’t mean it…”
Hans brushed the dust off his uniform. “It’s too late for that now. Jezyk can’t hear you. You betrayed him…killed him.”
“I…I’m sorry.”
Hans glanced back from where he stood beside the door and shook his head again. “It’s too late for sorry now.”
The door opened and slammed closed behind Hans.
Riker picked up the small medal, tears blurring his vision, blood staining his hands. The blood only represented what he already knew: innocent blood stained his hands.
Blood nothing and no one could wipe away.
His body trembled, his head spun, and he was left in darkness.
~*~
Several men were missing, prisoners and guards alike, sent on long marches deeper into Germany.
Leon, Isaiah, and Yosef had all been spared. If Leon still believed in God’s mercy, he’d believe that it was providence…but he didn’t believe in God’s mercy.
Bruno had been taken with the last group…and Leon could only hope that he would live, even with how much Leon had disagreed with him.
A piercing headache tortured Leon’s head, but he didn’t make a sound, knowing he couldn’t.
Standing in the front row with a large group of prisoners, Leon stood still and silent, even as his body threatened to collapse beneath him.
A small handful of officers walked into the middle of the throng of men, shoving one man onto the dirt, and two of the officers held onto another officer…Riker.
Hans stepped forward, standing in front of Riker, speaking quiet, undiscernible German. Hans snapped his fingers. “Prisoner 55464, come stand at attention.”
Yosef’s eyes filled with alarm, and quiet prayers escaped Isaiah’s lips.
Leon obediently stepped forward, unwilling to earn yet another beating. Hans faced him, and Leon lowered his gaze. Hans smiled. “Ah, obedience, I see. I have heard about you, 55464, and I have rarely ever heard good things. Feigning obedience when I am around will not cut it, 55464…but perhaps some bloodshed will…encourage you.”
Vile sadism…evil at it’s finest.
“On your knees beside Schind, 55464, hands behind your back.”
Leon remained where he stood, and a guard shoved him to the hard ground beside Riker. The guard’s rifle hit Leon’s back, shooting pain from Leon’s previous bruises. “Hands behind your back, filthy Jewish pig. Schnell!”
Leon put his hands behind his back.
The man the officers had previously thrown to the ground was placed on his knees a couple feet in front of Leon, his hands laced and forced behind his head.
“Please…don’t kill him because of what I’ve done.”
“He knew of your work and told no one…that is treason, Riker, and he will pay for it. Look at what your mission has cost so many…so much more blood now stains your hands.”
“Please, don’t kill him…”
Hans shrugged. “Traitors must be punished.”
“Please.” Riker begged, practically in tears.
Cuts and bruises covered his face…his neck…his hands and arms, many of them bleeding still. Whatever he had done…Hans was punishing him severely.
“Punishment must be given for crime, Riker.” Hans adjusted his uniform cap. “It is a matter of right versus wrong, after all.”
Riker trembled. “…You’re a monster.”
Hans chuckled and walked around Riker, crouching down behind him. “No, Riker…you are the monster. Fischer, ready your gun.”
The officer obeyed, holding his rifle, the barrel aimed at the man in front of Leon.
They were about to kill him…right here, right now.
Leon closed his eyes, tight. Such disregard for…life.
Precious, beautiful life.
Leon reopened his eyes and risked a glance at Riker, who was being held still by Hans. Holding Riker’s shoulder, clutching Riker’s jaw and keeping Riker’s eyes forward, Hans smiled sadistically. “Watch, Riker…watch him die, and see where all of your so-called heroism has gotten you, you foolish child.”
Leon closed his eyes again, unable to watch.
He wasn’t dead yet.
He’d cling to the last shred of strength he had left…with everything he had, he would cling to life.
There were rumors of Americans being close…indeed, Leon had heard tanks in the middle of the night.
Maybe they would be released soon…maybe all of the rumors were true.
Maybe hope was indeed on the horizon.
August 27, 2023 at 8:11 pm #154828Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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MY RIKER, MY BABYYYYYYYYYY 😭😭😭😭😭😭😭 i’m so sorrryyyy, baby, i’m so sorry!!!!
August 27, 2023 at 8:22 pm #154829@freedomwriter76 NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!
RIKER!!!! LEON!!!!
JEZYYYYYYKKKKK!!!!
*sobs for eternity*
#IfMarcelDiesIRiot
#ProtectMarcel
#ProtectSebAugust 27, 2023 at 8:24 pm #154830Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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@godlyfantasy12 I KNOWWWWWWWWWW, I’M SO SORRYYYYYYYY!!!! 😭😭😭😭😭
*offers you cookies and tissues for the tears*
August 27, 2023 at 8:25 pm #154831@freedomwriter76
*screams forever*
Hans is slime. He is disgusting 🤢
Any noun can become a verb if you don't care enough.
August 27, 2023 at 8:26 pm #154832Can I have a cookie??
Any noun can become a verb if you don't care enough.
August 27, 2023 at 8:28 pm #154835Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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Mmmmm, you should see the Gestapo officer that was in the movie I just watched 🤢🤮😤😠😡
but yes, Hans is so…VILE!!!! 🤢😤
but he didn’t use to be so evil 😭😭
August 27, 2023 at 8:28 pm #154836Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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*hands you a cookie*
August 27, 2023 at 8:32 pm #154838@freedomwriter76
*reaches through computer screen and takes cookie* thanks.
Any noun can become a verb if you don't care enough.
August 27, 2023 at 8:40 pm #154840@freedomwriter76
Girl..I started to read it and like after the first few sentences I started tearing up like immediately 😭😭😭😭 And I’m sitting in the living room surrounded by my fam and I don’t wanna start sobbing in front of them soooo I’m gonna read this a little later…but
GIRL CONGRATULATIONS ON ALMOST FINISHING YOUR BOOK!!!! That’s SO exciting!!! 💖💖💖
#HugRikerSquad
August 27, 2023 at 9:51 pm #154844@freedomwriter76
I…
I…I don’t think I’ve ever cried this much over your writing girl…not even when Fin died…not even when Dietrich sacrificed himself…
*Sobs heartbrokenly*
RIKERRRR!!! LEONNNN!!
JEZYYYYYYKKKKK!!!!
😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭
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