WalkByFaith

I WAS LITERALLY ON THE ILLUSTRATION QUESTION 😣

@ellette-giselle

I was so, so close to finishing your questions, and then a bee came over by me, and I picked up my laptop and ran away (lol.)

But then I accidentally hit the screen somehow and I CLOSED THE LINK!!!

Augggghhhh. I cannot believe that just happened. Now I have to write them all out AGAIN. So this might take a while.

@ellette-giselle

AHHH ELLETTE YOU SAVED THEM!!!

AND IT’S DONE!! CONGRATULATIONS!! (I know this is a later draft, but still xD)

Biggest thing I noticed, is that, in the end where Joseph and Amelia are talking, some of the things that they say, “I’m so glad that… etc.” seemed a little bit like info-dumping. It’s good for us to have all that in…[Read more]

@theducktator

Sorry, didn’t get tagged! 😒

That does sound like fun! We always stay up till midnight too—last night we had a bunch of neighbor kids over, so we watched some YouTube videos and then played some games until midnight. I don’t think I’ve made any resolutions… but we’ll see, there’s still time.

Happy Almost New Year! What are you guys up to?

@keilah-h

Aww, your relationship with your brother sounds so sweet.

@elishavet-pidyon

Same—we played with our stuffed animals too. We had maybe thirty of them between us, and they all belonged to a “pack” with an alpha, and a beta, etc. (Me and my sister were Erin Hunter fans.) We acted out whole storylines—probably enough to fill a novel xD.

@ellette-giselle

Wow, that’s really cool. Definitely keep them in then.

@ellette-giselle

Wait, you wrote the hymns? I thought you had just pasted them in. 😳

(There’s a lot of hymns I’m not familiar with, since we don’t normally sing them at my church.)

@ellette-giselle

I finished! (And the art for the cover is really cool.) I gave answering those questions a shot, even though you might be past the point of feedback, I figured you might want to hear what I thought.

Were the characters believable?

For the most part, yes. At times, there was somewhat stilted (slightly forced seeming, or maybe a…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

You can’t leave me hanging there!! 😖 Although, I’m wondering if I want to know what happens next.

No real changes to the scene that I could think of. The one hymn is pretty long, but if you want to include it all, that’s fine.

I didn’t really notice that the uncle’s betrayal felt forced, but I would have to go back and look at it again to see for sure. I was so preoccupied with Yeah, I knew that was gonna happen and Oh no—what’s gonna happen to them now? To really focus on it. Unless Linus feels otherwise, I think it was fine.

@ellette-giselle

Sorry this took me so long to respond—I didn’t get a notification, so I thought you hadn’t wrote back yet.

My first thought is that you would need to save Joseph, because it would be strange to kill off the main character three quarters (four fifths?) of the way through the book.

But looking past that, Joseph’s charact…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Eh, I wasn’t surprised.

@ellette-giselle

Joseph, Amelia, and Beric. I don’t know her brothers well enough yet.

I’ve let myself be deceived. My whole life I thought I’d never have the strength, and I was right. But it’s not about me at all! None of this is.” Joseph waved his hand to punctuate his words. “My whole life I’ve been worried about what I can and can’t do, but…

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Good scenes, though. Joseph was a tiny bit preachy when he had his character shift arc, but it worked since that’s been his struggle since the beginning.

I can’t wait to see what happens next. 🥺

@ellette-giselle

Ellette!!!!! 🥺🥺

What are you going to do to them??

@smiley

HIIIIIIIII
Mileyyyyy!!!! I’ve missed youuuu!

AHHHHHHHH yayyyyy!!!!

Though we haven’t had any new people for a while… I wonder if Kathleen has stopped like checking people in. 🤷‍♀️ It used to be, like, every weekend or two we’d get a handful of new folks.

@keilah-h

Weird. I can’t even remember how they let me know I joined… probably an email. It’s worth checking.

@whalekeeper

I have mental health stuff, but I wouldn’t attribute all of it to oldest kid responsibilities. For me it’s a factor among other factors, not the cause.

Same. I think my OCD actually contributes a lot to me being bossier as an oldest child, because I like to have things a certain way.

@theducktator

Same. That, (and my obsession wit…

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