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Ruth replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 5 months ago
If Nar is his sister, he’s going to be furious that his new enemy is carrying around pictures of his sister. If Nar is a crush then he’s going to be really mad because it doesn’t seem like he would want everyone in kingdom come to know that he carries around her picture.
Nar is his sister, and he is very protective of her.…[Read more]
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 5 months ago
no I haven’t!!!
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 5 months ago
Doesn’t everyone have at least a fragment of virtue though? (Sorry, I don’t mean to shut down everything you’re saying, this is just my thoughts. 😅) I’m not saying they have to be someone that the readers will look up to and be like, “Oh my word I want to be just like them.” I understand mankind is sinful and there probably are people out there t…
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 5 months ago
Now, you mentioned your characters not knowing God. And I liked how you put that—“without God there is no hope.” But…you have to think that these characters are probably looking for hope, right? Even just an occasional thought of wishing there was a way out of this darkness they’re living in.
So I know with where they’re at right now,…
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Ruth replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 5 months ago
Ha! Took me a second to figure out where this is going……. I’ll be surprised if they’re both still alive and out of jail by the end of the day.
Lol
You kidding me? The police have already tried to take Alpha (when he stabbed Jep and Chase went to the hospital) and well, Alpha hasn’t stepped foot in the station yet.
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Ruth replied to the topic The Baron Chronicles in the forum Short Story Critiques 1 year, 5 months ago
@theducktator @ellette-giselle
I bet he’s gonna die in the end.He can’t die; I like him too much!
Oh dear…well, two more stories left and then you’ll know. Don’t worry, Baron will be happy with the ending.
I would love to see this published someday!
Hopefully sometime in Spring I will submit it to a publisher. Fingers crossed though cuz…[Read more]
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 5 months ago
I also hope I didn’t come across as rude or brushing you off…I really do appreciate your thoughts because that means I need to work on foreshadowing! And explaining my book to others helps me flesh out my thoughts a little more! Thank you so much! <3
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 5 months ago
Ok, so the biggest thing I noticed was the lack of hope throughout the story. The characters seemed to think about death a lot and were put through a lot of physical pain. There’s nothing inherently wrong with that, but it needs to be balanced out with hope. When I got to read those Lilitu/Sef memories from when they were little, that w…
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Ruth replied to the topic The Baron Chronicles in the forum Short Story Critiques 1 year, 5 months ago
@raxforge (I changed a few things in the story btw) @ellette-giselle @keilah-h @whalekeeper @hybridlore @theducktator
Story 10!
Only two more stories and then The Baron Chronicles will come to a close. Thx for reading this far! 💜
Fire
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Ruth replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 5 months ago
… May I ask what’s in Alpha’s pockets?
Alpha’s gonna be so mad lol
- A pocket knife (are you surprised lol)
- some loose change
- some random things he picked up like an acorn probably (Strange new world, strange new things, random things in pockets)
- a picture from a couple years back of him and Nar having a flour fight (he lost)
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Ruth replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 5 months ago
Alpha’s reaction.
I apologize to Dante ahead of time. I like you Dante, but Alpha is not a fan.
Alpha
Before Dante could get far, he was pinned against the wall in the hallway outside their room, Alpha’s finger’s wrapped around his throat. A red vapor was thinly veiling Alpha’s eyes. “Watch yourself, Dante. You may think you know a…[Read more]
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Ruth replied to the topic Snowball Fight! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 5 months ago
173 words
Her wide, innocent eyes were of a bluish purple, flecked with white as if some painter had dabbed their brush in white and flicked it with their finger. Then, some magical fairy had come and made all the spots glow like the stars in the sky. Her skin and hair were of similar shades of the bluish purple. Even her little boots…
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Ruth replied to the topic Snowball Fight! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 5 months ago
Okay, I wrote 500 hundred words. I won’t post them here though because they’re part of a story I plan to post soon of The Baron Chronicles topic and I really don’t want to spoil what happens in this story.
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Ruth replied to the topic Let's Laugh! Writing Memes in the forum Art 1 year, 5 months ago
(where this super cool person is wearing a mask and then they remove their mask and its a GIRL 😮 nothing against girls being cool, just the trope is over used and I am more surprised when it turns out to be a male rather than a female.)
My least favorite part about this trope is the girl almost always has eyeliner on. Or they’re…[Read more]
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Ruth replied to the topic The Baron Chronicles in the forum Short Story Critiques 1 year, 5 months ago
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Ruth replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 5 months ago
Woah…
Dante has officially been added to Alpha’s possible threat list….
Like what if he needed stitches?
He’s usually okay with getting stitched, if it’s Nar who’s doing it. As far as anesthesia, he declines.
I might write an rp later, when I decide how to write Alpha without making it too dark
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic Denomination Q and A in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 1 year, 5 months ago
correct, the priest isn’t forgiving the sins. It is God.
*is confused* If you know it’s God forgiving the sins, then why do you guys go to confession to a priest at all? Why not just ask God?
I’m sorry if that sounded rude…I don’t mean it that way, I’m just very confused and trying to understand.
And about mega churches, my c…[Read more]
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 5 months ago
I’m so sorry, I forgot about this!!!!
I think it’s a new day, so where do you want to continue? XD
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic Worth All the World in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 5 months ago
are you looking for critiques? Or just posting for fun?
I just wanted to make sure…I don’t want to assume you want critiques if you’re just wanting to share it with us! 🙃
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic Worth All the World in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 5 months ago
Saraaaa… 🥹 Girl you’re so sweet.
I’M SERIOUS…I LOVE IT SO MUCH
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