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@His-Instrument well @Ethryndal and I discovered recently that I’m Luthien Tinuviel and I have dark hair but I’m not from Rivendell. 😀 The Girdle of Mellian, I think… 😉

@That_Writer_Girl_99 that is a GREAT midpoint. So right now what you’re looking for seems to be a first plot point— where Kara commits to action. What about Blake? Was he taken in the fight with the Catastrophes? Or did he use it as a distraction to infiltrate the prison and get caught or something? If that’s the case Matthias could have gotten…[Read more]

@That_Writer_Girl_99 perhaps you should try mapping out Kara’s arc in detail and going from there?

@ethryndal it’s because all great minds think a like.

@Aratrea lol

All right @That_Writer_Girl_99 read through the document, and left a comment in one place, but otherwise you did good. 😀 You’re handling Matthias with more subtlety. *thumbs up*

Have you figured out your plot problems? Any way I can help you?

@BethanySinkyRoses welcome aboard, new KeePer! 😀 Look forward to seeing you around.

(@aratrea I hope you know that profile picture makes you impossible to take seriously. XD)

I…. I think I love this too much. So you’re wanting to change it from flash fiction to short story… okay. Here are my thoughts on how I would go about it.

I’m crazy. I know that

I think your beginning is fantastic, it really pulled my in. So uness you come up with something better I’d say leave it.

I stare at his eyes. There’s something i…

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@That_Writer_Girl_99 no, you’re doing and have done great. Just last I checked you were having problems with the plot, and that’s the one thing that really hangs me up when I struggle with that.
*cough* I suppose you can ignore that bit of advice then. 😉

@That_Writer_Girl_99 quick tip: look at your different character motivations. Each character is the hero of his or her own story. What are they aiming for? What is it they want? Kara’s not going to be the only one moving the plot. Each person’s life is an entire story. You chose to tell those stories through Kara’s eyes, but they’re still separate…[Read more]

@That_Writer_Girl_99 I promise I haven’t forgotten you. I’m really busy right now so I will get to this as soon as possible, but it may be a bit. 😉

@That_Writer-Girl_99 I promise I haven’t forgotten you. I’m really busy right now so I will get to this as soon as possible, but it may be a bit. 😉

@Winter-Rose poor guy… *hugs him* Seriously though, you did great. First person pov is not one of my strong points and can be very easy to do typically, but you did great with it. Thanks for sharing. 😀

@Daeus yep. 590 words, so I’m pretty happy. 🙂 Thanks yourself.

@Daeus writing now. I’ll be going until two o clock.

@Daeus about to be. I’ll tag you when I start.

*screams*
@Ethryndal aaauuuuggghhhh!!! I’m dying! *chokes on her laughter and topples over off her chair and goes into spasms on the floor*

PERFECT. Absolutely perfect.

@That_Writer_Girl_99 could you give me the link to the doc again? Mine is doing weird things.

That sounds like a great solution. Good job. I notice you’re thinking in wider perspectives now— purposefully using the interactions to develop or manipulate. *wiggles eyebrows* Excellent work, my young padawan. 😉

@That_Writer_Girl_99

@Daeus it just doesn’t like me. 😀